All Comments on 'Moving into a New Town'

With room for sequels

Very nice story.. hope there are more with David and Amanda..

THIS (and everything like it) . . .

"Maybe." She said as she dug into her purse. "Call me at work, not at home though," She said, handing me a business card. "By the way, what's your name?"

SHOULD BE

"Maybe," she said as she dug into her purse. "Call me at work, not at home though," she said, handing me a business card. "By the way, what's your name?"

Note the commas, lower case letters and the quotes. Also if dialogue is in same paragraph, second she said isn't necessary.

RAMJET69, Actually that has been a topic of much debate between my editors. There seem to be two currently accepted forms, one of which you describe and the one which i tend toward. I have found mainstream novels that are both ways. I think the method you describe is the more traditional method, but the style this story is written in is more consistent with what today's word processors gramatic checkers tend toward. I suspect its a case of not being able to manage the complex rules about which when to punctuate which way. Anyway, i appreciate your feedback and hope that you enjoyed the story in spite of the punctuation controversy.

I am not a biker but I've been around them enough to be able to "picture" your story. Thanks.

This is a hot story which is what this site is about. 5/5.

I know from experience that bikes are real pussy magnets - never that good, though!

However, the way corporate America works - Ms Deming would have known "Dave" was going to show up Monday, and she would have known his name and CV

Enjoyed the story very much. Now I'm ready for a sequel :-) . Thanks for all of your efforts and hard work.

This story is just so fresh and erotic!! Not the hum drum stuff most seem to write!! I will hunt for more like this one! My hat is off to you X_Storyman!!!!!!!!!

Fun twist at the end!

Needs Chapter 2

As always your stories are erotic and fun. I agree with others, you need to write one or two more followups.

LOVE how friendly the women are in your stories!!!

Where do you live?

Do any of your local women visit Nashville? :+))))