All Comments on 'Moving to San Diego Pt. 03'

great story love it keep going

This story is really hot. Love the intrigue and playing in plain sight.

Put a Tiger In Her Tank,

Tiger

keep on going but the diction is kinda cheesey. does he have to brag about his massive shaft or her tiny vagina?

I wanted to see her belly start to swell....

Her baby will look so much like Jason that there won't be any questions about who is the father. It won't bother Jim though because he already knows that Jason is fucking his trophy wife Lisa, and is glad that Jason is the one fucking her, that way she isn't fucking someone else while Jim is gone away on business.Jim probably has the house wired with hidden cameras also.Thanks for the good chapter....Rich

you really need to send your work to an editor to catch the MANY MANY mistakes you make in your grammar and spelling. I almost stopped reading the first submission because of it, but decided to go ahead and read it anyway.

I will tell you a few things you do. First of all, you use -ly way too often, and at inappropriate times. When it is called for, you don't use it! I know that word perfect has a spell checker, please use it frequently!

And last of all.. someone else mentioned it, but it really IS unneccessary to keep reminding everyone of his insanely huge cock. We know it is 10 inches (although I think you mentioned once that it was 11..not positive on that one)we don't need constant reminders. Tight is good, tiny over and over is not needed, no one likes redundancy.

Other than the spelling and grammar, and a few too many reminders of cock size, the story is great. Keep writing, but please, get your work looked over first. It will make you a better writer.

Love the way he did you describe the sex between Lisa and Jason from the start of the series. Maybe Lisa will have twins from Jason but his father will think they're his. I can hardly wait for the next chapter when Jason goes to school and finds a girlfriend.

Can u pay the videos they just sound so hot and great story I've whacked of too all of the parts

So many risks - a lusty torrid story - pure joy in each chapter!