All Comments on 'Music Man Pt. 01'

It is a good effort, but there are some real annoying aspects. When you want a character to feel or act a certain way, but which feeling or action has no basis or logic, you just assert that the feeling or action has no known reason. How lame is that?

Then you suddenly portray Cassie as some base animal led by her clitoris? "There was still that attraction. It was a basic, animal thing, a biological urge; Zak was a good mating partner, and she was physically strongly attracted to him even now. It was her body pushing her at a very primitive biological level to have children by him." Where the fuck does that come from? Either she's a sensitive perceptive intelligent woman, or she some airhead fuck toy looking for Mr. good cock. Of course you continue to insinuate Cassie has a lingering animal lust for Zak, which destroys any intellectual or virtuous substance to her character. You make it look that if it wasn't for Ged in her life, she would already be back in Zak's bed. Is her memory that short, or her self-respect that little? Kind of confusing.

So the plot is becoming obvious, lame, and contrived. It is a sound plot idea, and technically well written. But the execution and plot devices need some reality and logic. But thanks for your effort.

Do NOT continue reading, this must be one of the most retarded stories on the site, and that's saying something.

So far so good.

Cassie girl is a little broken and I already can see problems on the way.

But thinking where this is heading seems a bit unrealistic.

Hope she doesn't fall into Zaks arms. Someone else maybe but not the cheater she knew. Out of character.

Here goes part 2

but it is with fear and trepidation that I proceed to Pt. 02

Yeah, big crash coming for the loving couple. Really great story, you're an excellent writer. Thanks for keeping us entertained!

dumb shit.

cuck story

What is with these anonymous fucktards who obviously didn't read the story commenting on this? Maybe try reading it before you proclaim "cuck story" or "dumb shit." Fucking moronic assholes.

I really wish Dev's would revoke all posting by anions