by Secretauthor2021
A great series so far, but there are too many typos (punctuation errors). I suggest you find an editor to check your stories before they appear on Literotica.
Loved it. The build up was intense but why did it take them so long to admit they were in love?
They were supposed to be virgins learning the art of lovemaking. They were both experts and didn’t need practice. As inexperienced lovers they should have fumbled a little. They were too expert
Sorry, can't give it a 5 until prefixes are joined to the words they modify, e.g., up stairs, pop corn, and spoken lines have the correct punctuation: "I love you," he said; not "I love you." He said. Reply I COULD USE HELP and I'll work with you.
More than happy for assistance. I’ve got another story (not part of this one) almost ready to go.