by _Kushiel_
totalmente hermoso y sumamente caliente, espero mas capitulos muy pronto, am_sr
I have been a huge fan of this story on the other site, and have often returned simply for Mr P. By far, my favourite erotic story- ever. I look forward to experiencing it here, chapter by chapter. Nicely done _Kushiel_!
Again for your great comments.
But I have come to the realisation that I really need a proof reader! I always think I've found all the mistakes, corrected all the typo's and then it is published to the site and BAM they hit you between the eyes, so glaringly obvious its frustrating.
All applicants can apply via .... lol jk ;)
Glad you are enjoying the read!
Cheers
Kushi x
wow i love this story so much after read booth chapter one.
i just had to read two. this was even more erotic as it started out slow but boy did it make up for that . with him getting you so hot and horny .brilliant story out standing writing.
That was so freaking hot!! That was like one of my ultimate fantasies right there... I'm literally soo jealous of a fictional character right now, it's pathetic lol. So goood!!
Ya know, as good as the story is, the guy is pretty much a douche, lol. Granted, he was careful with her at points, certainly where safety was concerned, but he had no problem treating her like sex trash from word go! Yeah, its a story and thats the plot... But who does that?? Its one thing if youve talked about it ahead of time, but going out of your way to degrade and humiliate someone without knowing how they're going to take it or be able to deal with it? I just dont see what joy you get out of calling someone a slut, cock tease (hey, he was a pussy tease!) or whore (he didnt use that, but you get my point). I dont see how you could get off on that. Oh well.
Holy Crap!
This was, by far, some of the hottest dirty talk I've ever read. The dad is so perfectly dominant. I Absolutely Loved It. Instantly added it to my favorites.
This is a marvelous story with a plot that moves at a brisk pace. Excellent characters and marvelous descriptive writing perfectly convey the overall romantic mood of the story as it unfolds in this second chapter. Five stars.