All Comments on 'My Day at the Mall Ch. 03'

dude this is a really good story. i cant wait for the rest. please hurry.

"The quiet was rent apart by a loud scream" – and the shit hit the fan! Wayne old friend, what a cliff hanger!! So far so great – certainly on a par with your epic "The Last 24 Hours". Well drawn characters with a rich background and a plot worthy of the best Wayne (aka John Wayne) movie, what more could we ask for? Oh yes, a few more chapters! Pete.

Keep them coming - great story line!

An excellent story going at break-neck speed. Excellent writing please keep it coming.

Keep it coming....U have me hooked!

Why is it that my favourite authors are cliff hanger addicts? "A scream breaks the silence...". Now is that a cliff hanger, or what. All I can say is please don't leave use hanging to long. John B.

Great story im sitting on the edge of my seat. cant wait for more

Frankly I agree with the guy. Also that her physical virginity exists until she willingly gives it away.

I agree with Wayne. I would also state that her physical virginity exists until she willingly gives it away.

Loving this story. This Winslow must be immensely rich to have so many law enforcement officials in his back pocket.

5/5

Too easy...too laid out.

1 star. Unfinished, won’t be finished, series