All Comments on 'My Invitation'

You got to add more to this story!!!!!! And soon!!!!

EAxcellent start for what promises to be an enjoyable adventure with people who have no hangups.

First of all, What do you mean by accessible? I assume that when they are eating covered parts should be inaccessible (whatever that means in this context)? They seem to go out twice that first night. He picks out a dress, they eat at the Marina, converse, and all of a sudden they are back in his apartment picking a dress again? Then they go out, but don't eat. Later while fucking, he notes that the time is 11:26. but the importance of this is not clear.

Accessible means easy to enter or approach. A cloth panel hanging in front of genitals would leave them accessible and still covered from sight.

As to your annon comment about having problems following the transition between memory lane and their second date (to the marina) I'm glad to get your feedback. I will find a way to make such transitions clearer in future stories.

The value of comments increases when they are not from Annon. I read all but more weight is given when the comments are actually from someone.

An excellent and well written start to what I hope will be a sensuous tale of several chapters. Chapter 02 ASAP, Pete.

This story was different in ways I can't quite describe... to myself or to You. Not 'different' in a bad way, no. It is just different. I don't normally feel as if I am at a loss for feelings or words, or the ability to put those feelings into words. I liked this story, and hope you have more in store for this pair.

against men in that the fees are higher for the club than the women's - WHY???? In these days of equality they should be the same.

Acknowledgement that imperfection should be no bar to love and attraction has featured in your stories before, but this is at another level.

Removal of one or both breasts is traumatic for a woman, but as you rightly observe it's not the end of the world and far more preferable to the fatal alternative.

As the old saying goes - beauty's only skin deep

never read such appalling drivel as this...

Great chapter 1. THIS NEEDS MORE!!!!

CHARACTERS. 6

STORY 6

It lacks 2 things,

A satisfying ending, and a few more commas.