by jacobmerriweather
I greatly enjoyed this! A couple of grammatical errors, but nothing too distracting. I would love to see where, if anywhere, you would take this story further.
I don't know if it's really a good idea to fuck your niece who thinks she's a kitten. It may just be me but I think it's kind of taking advantage of someone clearly incapable of making sane decisions.
Very well written and loving.
I think you should stop here. It ended well and sometimes more is less.
Really good story.
I wouldn't mind reading the one that inspired you as well.
@jacobmerriweather the story I think you are looking for is Puppy Girl: The Stray by Tx Tall Trees
I'm on my phone. That's not the story, but I have read it and it's very good. Definitely would recommend it.
This is probably my favorite story on this website to date. Thank you for posting
let me say your story was very well written, but (I know I'm going to get blasted) I feel like I was reading a story about a man taking advantage of a girl that had the mind of a child and that's just wrong.
I'm all for role playing and thought that it was very sweet at times and hot at others.
I actually cried. This is beautiful. I don't even like BDSM, but her wanting to be his kitten just...
God damn.
Different may be the way to put it. Writing is good, covered lot of the bases for characters quickly which is good for short story but it is different.
It made me feel uneasy that I was reading a story so obviously about a very young girl who's been re-aged for the purposes of the story. I'm surprised Laurel never pulled it, to be honest, but you pulled it off, so I suppose kudos are due. I just feel uneasy about it, and I always will, so I'm not giving you any stars, in preference to giving you one or two and dragging your score down; I really just wanted to register my unease, that's all.
When I wrote this story, I wanted to involve a lot of pet play (thus the kitten aspect) and I understood the risks of involving the scene with the doctor/ Danny being scarred and perhaps a little cut off mentally. Really, what I was going for was that the story started off at her worst and progressively, as she had an outlet to safely express herself in a fun way that appealed to her, she began to open up again to her uncle/ the world. That's why at the end she starts actually talking, and it ends with her willingly leaving the house. Baby steps in the right direction. Def wasn't going for the pedo feel, sorry if it came across that way. More of a non traditional, kinky pet play taboo mending heart love story if that makes any sense. Thank you all for your input though.
At first I was a bit uneasy about the subject of the story, but overall I thought it was very well written, very erotic, and I personally loved it, especially the ending.
Wow this actually got to me i wirte for a different site but i decided to look on this one and honestly i was surprised i loved it even tho i felt a pedo vibe coming off from it but wow its the best ive read in a while if u want to collaborate just comment on here and ill get to u overall reallllly good
Which in case you didn't know translates into "So amazing!".
I love the way you wrote this. The progression was amazing, seeing her open up starting with the cleaning the dishes, then the sitting next to him on the couch. It was brilliant. Do you know if there is going to be any more? Have you planned anymore to this I mean Loll. Definitly giving 5 stars and favoriting for later reading :3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
Very touching, great progression though the sudden actual sexual tension breaking point seemed a little rushed to me . Your writing got a little confusing in a few areas. Mostly you just had little errors like spelling or wrong word useage, but at one point she is drinking her beer, then it's your beer, then you're talking about how she never drinks beer. As for the "pedo" comments I don't see it that way at all. It's common for survivors of traumatic events to return to a childish state of mind for a sense of security. I've seen patients first hand who completely thought they were kids, not simply acting childish. She certainly began to act more adult by the end, and I'm not referring to the sex. I think you did an excellent job of showing therapeutic progression
Cleverly written despite the occasional spelling/grammar miscues. The comments regarding taking advantage of her can also be viewed in a different way. The safe, conventional alternative was to fill her with drugs. Instead, he found a way to tease her out of her self imposed emotional exile by taking the time to assess what she really needed and gradually brought her back into the light. My personal opinion is that love is the most healing therapy one can receive. Maybe he took a chance but I liked the way it turned out. If he had treated her like a child it would have reinforced her decision to continue acting like one. Treating her like a woman helped her to become one. The sex wasn't forced or imposed on her but it wasn't neglected either. All in all, a healthy delightful story.
This is one of the better stories I have read on this site. I hope you will be writing more or continuing with the relationship progression of Brett and Danni. I love the way you portrayed Danni as a kitten. I find this to be an issue I am most often perturbed by since I personally identify as a kitten in my relationship. Please please write more.
I was on the verge of reporting this story when I realized that my raging erection put a lie to my objections. While I would never take advantage of someone underage either physically or mentally I've depleted my supply of semen many times when my own niece would unabashedly flirt with me. There is no doubt in my mind that I could have seduced her but I was held back by the knowledge that my brother would have kicked my ass, but certainly not from any social or moral constraints. So I choose to give tha writer the benefit of doubt. I guess there's a little pedophile in us all.
It clearly states she just turned 18. So I don't get your comment
I hope you continue with their story. Danny created her safe environment and I applaud her young uncle in seeing it was what she needed. That he was able to help make her feel safe in her grief and blossoming desires. Win-win. More, please!
I struggled with the pedo feel, just like some of the other commenters. And it wasn't because of the niece's mental state. You did a good job of showing her progression to a point where she could make her own decisions. The pedo vibe was because:
1. You said "Her pussy was completely hairless";
2. You made it clear she was a virgin; and
3. Due to her trauma, she paid little attention to her appearance.
Consider those 3 factors carefully. You never said she was shaved; you said she was "hairless." In addition, it would be quite unusual for a sexually inactive person to shave her pubic area, since nobody sees that region. And it would be even more unusual for an unkempt person recovering from trauma to shave an unseen area. Put them together, what do you have? She wasn't shaved; rather, she was too young to have pubic hair. 1+1+1=3. You stated that she was 18, but you described her in a way that made her seem much younger.
Jacob, I take your explanation and intentions at face value. I don't think you meant to write a pedo story. I think it was an inadvertent product of some unfortunate choices of descriptions that you chose. But there's no denying that the story has a blatant pedo feel to it. Sorry to put it that way, because you're a good writer and there were a lot of things to like about it otherwise.
Best regards,
AverageBear
This site and not only am I strong critic but I am not interested in pet play. Nor did I even know their was a term for it until I read the comments. Excellent progression to the point that I would love to read a continuation.
Not so much for the sexual part, although it was good, but I would like to read how she turned out, where their relationship went, if the town never found out she was his neice and how much of their role play made it out into the public like: how did they act in the theater, what did she wear to the grocery store, what were his work parties like, did they go on vacation etc.
Good job.
Just because a girl is hairless doesn't mean she's underage. it clearly says she started caring about her appearance, doing her hair and make up. Most girls shave these days, it could easily be seen as something akin to shaving your legs/ armpits. She seems young but the pedo crap is everyone else's interpretation/ how they read it, which is purely subjective, not the story itself.
If you don't like if...don't read it. I could tell from the start it was going to turn into pet play.
I didn't get a pedo vibe at all. The character took a shower and shaved her pussy because she was expecting to get fucked, she wanted to look nice or some shit. Just because the writer didn't explicitly state that she saved does not mean she was hairless to begin with. How Manny 18 year Olds do you know of that have naturally bald pussys?
I normally don't like the furry stories but this was well done due to the heart emotions attached. Never felt the pedo vibe read more like a young girl who was on the verge but due to circumstances kinda lost herself and thru role play was able to open the door again.
This story was amazing one of the best I've read and I really really hope you continue it I look forward to reading the next ones and I find myself hoping she'll start speaking more way to go.
Give the naughty girl what she wants -- lead her around on a leash and spank and fuck her in every hole - every day. That's what she needs. It's only abuse if you don't give her what she wants and what she needs.
You're my absolute favorite writer on this site, and this is one of my favorite stories of yours. It seemed almost tame compared to the degradation and humiliation of your other stories, which I love, but I do hope you decide to do more like this one in future. I really enjoyed the pet play, and the caring uncle was superb. Thank you for your stories!
As a woman who is 23 years old with a traumagenic dissociative disorder that often manifests itself into petplay or little play, I thought I could put some minds at rest.
This reads very authentically as a story about someone who's using regression and sexuality to relearn who she is - you constantly hear in therapy about finding your "new normal" and it is absolutely not uncommon to use sex to find that. Regressing to childhood is a way to try and prevent the pain from returning but does not render someone incapable of consent in most cases. Acting or feeling childish to cope with trauma doesn't mean someone can't make adult decisions - a child as young as Danny acts, or someone developmentally delayed to the point of being incapable to consent, wouldn't have initiated sexual activity without prior grooming.
Stop trying to keep mentally ill people, even fictional ones, from having control over their own sexuality.
This story was very heartwarming & honestly comfortable to read - thank you for the work put into it. It feels honest.
I love this story. I connect with it on such a basic level. It was so fucking sexy but it also made me cry so soulfully. THANK YOU.
It was weird how this really raunchy sex story had this really sad/sweet undercurrent to it.
Well developed characters, good story line, and very well written!
Absolutely freaking amazing! I was inthralled with the story, constantly hard over kitty from beginning to end and in love with how it played out into a comfortable happy ending/beginning!
Thanks much for writing this great story, feeding my kinky side and giving me some go-to bits for a quickie now and again ;)
I wish more folks would write like this. Your development of the characters on such a deep level was amazing. Their connection is very well written!
So she does speak some english after all. You referenced another story for inspiration, I read another that brought his girlfriend out of a coma after he licked life back into her.
This is one amazing story. The characters are so realistic you can almost hear the 'meow'
Looking forward to your work. Trying to find more on this subject.
I Normally do not like relieves fucking . This story is so deep and hart warming Ican't help but fall in love with these characters. GREAT WORK KEEP IT UP !!
Truly an amazing story love it so much i wish you would write more to this story
I know this is kinda late coming as you don't seem to be writing anymore, but wanted to say it anyway. This story was sweet, loveing, and romantic, which is incredibly surprising coming from a primarily non-con author like you. Not anything ageist you, just that non-cons don't have very much loving, sweet or romantic moments and its truly surprising to see that you were able to have more of a romantic feel then a lot of romance writers, main steam or otherwise.
Love the story, deserves more then five stars, but couldn't give more.
Thank you so much for writing this,
Tanhors and family.
I would have given it 5 stars but there were a couple of things that could do with some editing. Otherwise I loved this story.
This was an amazing story from start to the ending, I'm glad she found her voice again and he had the patience to wait for her to heal. and if being a kitten helps her to heal then let her, she's not hurting anyone....keep up the great work
This story is a real gem. It's wonderfully efficient in what it accomplishes. I cried. Wish it was a lot longer though. The characters, esp. Kitten obv., are so lovable. Something mythical about it. Mmm.
When you break a hymen there is blood. Love that you didn't mention that when they were busy cleaning each other off lol. 5* besides that.
Awesome story. Be cool to have a sequel.
Tons of spelling and grammar errors to clean up. Maybe run it by a proofreader. I suck at spotting my own as well lol.