by MrMorningstar07
Nothing incest, just a voyeur cuck, the lack of english is the least of your problem.
You have potential, but I suggest you download "Grammarly." It will correct your grammar and punctuation, making your work more readable and less confusing.
You might also cut back on the repetitive capitalised words. NOBODY carries on like that when they are fucking or being fucked. It's unrealistic and it detracts from the enjoyment of the story. YOU may like writing it like that, but most readers don't like reading it.
Don't give up, you'll learn as you go.
For 1 no real friend would do that 2 no son would stand for it 3 this isn't a incest story 4 you copied this from countless others its not a original story and it's unrealistic it's a trash story about a piece of shit mom a piece of shit friend and piece of shit son I give it 1 star only cause there isn't a lower star to give