All Comments on 'My Sister in Paris Ch. 01'

Great start Akireon! French girls are sexy as hell, and I like your idea of talking dirty, it actually has class.

Keep it coming!

Very sexy, very erotic.

You had better have part two on its way and soon!

Since when has Paris been built around the river Thames?

...most Americans don't even know Paris is in France, never mind what river it's on.

That's a hot story. I loved the pacing. Looking forward to chapter two.

Il est La Seine, mais c'est sexy de toute façon.

... doesn't mean that lack of knowledge in a story is acceptable. Good story that just needs a little geographic editing, ie. as mentioned, Paris is on the Seine River. London is on the Thames.

My first was a French girl.My best time ever.No w(holes) barred.A couple of years later met her again.We've lived together for 4 yrs.What a dream.

This is amazingly good. It is so carefully, smoulderingly written: all the little details pile up. And then, so sexy, so _erotic_ (which is rare on this site), the sister there soaking it up and being a silent witness and being a potential next participant . . .! Very, very vivid, and I'm probably going to end my night tonight amplifying this fantasy.

P.S. Guys, no-one thinks Paris is on the Thames. It's an editing mistake . . . author writes about London, changes mind, does global search and replace, doesn't notice Thames is still there. It's bad editing but not ignorance. It suggests the commenters on it haven't actually tried writing.

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Three stars, could have been four, if not for stupidly locating Paris in England!

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...JESUS! You want geography or do you want SEX??

so what's he doing drooling over his naked 16 year old sister and her lesbian lover and comparing their clitorises? Correct me if I'm wrong, but I thought anything under 18 in a sexual context was off-limits on this site?