All Comments on 'My Sister, My Slut Ch. 02'

Nice work, thanks!

All I can hope for is more. More. More. More. It is so similar to what happened between my sister and I....thank you.

I love it! This story is so erotic. I liked how you paced the action so that it created a sensual image rather than rushing things. Keep up the good work.

But all the crap they went through before fucking was unnecessary & didn't ring true.Don't know why he needed to reject her when she came to him looking for her panties,then she didn't want anything to do with him, yet all he needed to do is fix breakfast, buy's her lingerie & she's putty in his hands

in saying that sort of liked the story and am looking forward to next chapter even thou the sex part of the story was below par hopefully you get more into the sex and less of the rest thought after C1 we'd get stuff like golden showers,arse fucking,oral etc etc

maybe next chapters hopefully

Yes, I loved the sex and the incest, but after reading so much on this site, what I enjoyed most was that the writing is literate! I thought the pacing was quite good. You express yourself in complete sentences, sentences that actually make sense. Excellent vocabulary. You spelled your words correctly, as far as I noticed. The two characters are well-drawn and true-to-life.

You did "invent" an awkward word, "debauchedness." If you were trying to avoid "debauchery," there's "debauchment." Try dissipation, venery, profligacy. lasciviouosness, lechery . . . there are lots of synonyms, because it's a very popular sport.

You are an excellent writer with a real gift for phrasing. I particularly liked "The entire summer was a train wreck, starting with that simple laundry discovery which pushed me into an abyss of obsessiveness, of sordidness with my sister's panties, of dreams and angst and lust and guilt," although many other passages were as good. Looking forward to where you take this.

PLEASE!!!

That was hot ! Just don't leave it too long before you publish part 3, or I'll go off the boil. Brilliantly told story, well worth 5 stars!

it made me think of the time I fucked my sister she was the hottest an the best sex we ever had we fucked ever time we got a chance till we both got married

Great story, can't wait for part three...

Have her wear an anklet in the next story, and suck her toes during sex

Your build up is way too long. Way too many cockblocks happening. Just get to the fun part without annoying your readers...