All Comments on 'My Sister's Babysitter'

Could we have another go please?

It surprised me again how well your stories are but their was a few small places you made grammar errors. I always look for yours as i enjoy you and your work

Have a great day and keep writing

Dave

It was a great short story, but it was missing some emotion and suspense. I would have preferred more detailed descriptions of emotions and other feelings, but for it being a 1st person Narrative, its good.