All Comments on 'My Sister's Bet'

I really enjoyed this. The horrid start to the training but his reaction to it was awesome. The slow build up sexually was great. More of a tease but bit worked out so well. The final Fucking was so well done I couldn't help but go YEA!!! Would love to read more of these two lovebirds. Well deserved 5. Bravo

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Hope you have an exotic follow up with sister.

What a lovely and tender affection between 2 siblings.

Will Aria be the person peeking?

Will she join in the fun?

This was not just really hot but incredibly enjoyable to read and this could very much be written into a great story. Keep writing!

Wonderful slow build up to a loving beginning. I hope you continue with the story as you laid the hint of it expanding.

Fanbloodytastic thank you. I hope we get to read of their adventures in more chapters.

He won that bet multiple ways. So if they were not alone, who was there? Aria? Hope we find out.

can't wait till we find out who was watching

Good progression, not too fast or slow towards the final connection. Of course the other sister has to be the next, logical as no parental background has been established. Don't hurry Aria, let her involvement germinate, even if it is exploring her eavesdropping takes us back to earlier in the summer in parallel. If the story eventually captures Mom and Dad, lay the foundation during the Aria story firmer than Aria was foreshadowed in this story. BTW concerning the comment "I'm guessing English is not your first language," non-critique from that poster, who obviously is jealous of your writing skills. Hope he/she returns to their cave under the bridge.

This story is great. You developed their characters and a plausible progression between the two. I look forward to a potential chapter 2. I will add you as a favorite author so I can get notifications of future tales!

OMG...the best i had read ! Please more of this.....5CAE

Really enjoyed your story. Thanks a lot for it. I too am looking for a possible future chapter 2.

Best story ever i dont usually comment but this just had to get some credit fucking hell.

You're a lucky bastard when it's real or not you're a great story writer!

When I was reading this, my thoughts this was even better than the stories I read a week a go by MrIllusion. Big was my surprise to find out in the end, it was a new story by my now favorite writer...

loved the long slow tease,and the promise of chapter 2, where we'll learn who was watching them.

How can she claim to be good trainer and NOT know of the Saitama workout?

I gather ther will be a second part with the second sister?

So I'm hoping there's a part 2, u made it sound like that perhaps they were not alone there at the end. It was a hot story so hopefully there's more to come.

Wonderful story that had me soaking wet alllll the way through. ^_^

Good healthy sexercise... you can't beat it!

... that doesn't require a sequel, but one would be welcome!

Bring out the second part today lol

Wow great one!! Love it from begining to end.. love the teasing thru the whole thing!!

La suite maintenant ?!

:))

That was an amazing story. Well thought out plot, enough teasing to keep the reader interested until the final sex scene.

While I wouldn't go as far as some of these commenters in trashing you, there were a few spelling and grammar issues here and there, but it's understandable. In the heat of the moment when you're writing, you can get carried away. That's why I have someone read over my stuff now in addition to doing a once over myself.

That doesn't take away from how good the story is though. I look forward to reading your next work.

Loved the story, loved the way their relationship developed and would really love to know where they go from here.

Spelling and grammar mistakes, where there any? really didn't notice story was too good to notice.

Great story

Hope to read a sequal

I love stories with a great build up like this rather than instant sex, loved it

Loved this, gotta be one of the best ive read on here.

The build up, the teasing, the flashing, looking, touching kissing licking, it all just added so much.

Thanks its a 5* all day long 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼

Excellent pacing, Beautiful story that begs more chapters.

hope to read more of this story...

I loved the plot and how it played out. Good suspence.

In the last paragraph you suggested there is more story to come. Please continue!!

I enjoyed this very much. I like how the younger sister was in charge, and she teased her brother, the brother sister relationship was captured quite well. I’d love to read more.

I was thinking that when he showed up to the gym for his "test", Jen wasn't going to have a clue what he was talking about. His sister made up the whole thing about the test, knowing what it would take to get her brother motivated. So, when's the next chapter coming?

I agree with many commenters. Good solid buildup and progression. Other authors could learn some techniques from you. Keep writing like this.

We would like to start with thanking you for writing this story, it is so good.

You dropped lots of hints about things to come, we are hoping that means there will be a sequel.

Regardless, great story, thank you,

Tanhors and family.

No much drama... Not boring for a sec...

I'm also a writer and major major perv. I have read thousands of stories, and I'm generally a pretty brutal critic. Most people can not achieve in a 10 part series, what you did in one short story. The poster might not be the original author, but to the original author, that story is a masterpiece.

Great history I really enjoy it the last part was the best I wish we can have more of that thanks keep whit the good work u are great pls write a second part plssss

Peach, unreal, loved your whole concept, the build up was naughty, teasing with the end result sweet and loving, icing on the cake ... turn down the hottie for a date 😁

Congrats, another great price of wtitting 10*

It was so nice to read. So well paced, that I was looking forward to the climax as much as he was. Like most other readers, I guessed that sis was the one.

That was the most unique, sexy, amazingly fun story that I've read in this section in at LEAST a year! Bravo to your imagination, creativity and fun writing!! I'm looking forward to the next chapter, no doubt including the bitchy, but now VERY horny other sister, hehehe!! Hell, I'm drooling just thinking about it!! Thanks for writing and sharing!!

I really loved the bit (and I'm a guy) about telling her basically that she's a virgin, no matter what happened, until She gives it away! Nice :)

This story just became part of my top 5, ever. I’ve been reading adult erotica for years and i can say his is very well designed. Just how the whole situation develops is mesmerizing.

Where's the rest of the story. In the end you said they thought they was alone and they wouldn't find out till later that they weren't. I for one and I'm sure most of your readers would agree that we want to know more about them and who found them and what happened when the found out someone saw them.

There was a sequel, broadly hinted at.. Is it under another title?

Loved the story,

Peach could probably have improved the legitimate part of the training strategy, though. AFAIK, heavy training every day is not as effective as alternating heavy training with light training, so the body gets a chance to rest.

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amazing story, not much has caught my attention here lately but my word i loved this

Great story it had me wet and wanting! ❤️

I think this is the 5th or 6th time that I have read this and it is an awesome read still!!!!

Thank you!!!

You end with that tease about they were not alone or unseen in the basement, but I do not see anything about a subsequent chapter?! I mean, the story is hot enough Old Al would stay up reading as ling as there were words to read! No teases needed. Arrgh! Do not leave me hanging like this. It’s wrong to be mean to us old folks, you know. Heh heh

Al

Thanks for the imaginative story!

I'm guessing Aria was watching? A sequel with her would certainly be hot. A sibling threesome...damn. Fantastic story.

Another Episode pleasssse!

BEST story yet!!!!!!!!

!eh

You know your fansty seems to be all over and with all different people you like this 1 you need to leave the incest stories alone cause you ruined this with so many different people stick with 1 subtext if it's incest then dont mention anyone else in other then family unless it's just 1 person in the lead up to the sex with the family member/members a incest story is ruined every time when done differently then what I said and anyone who says otherwise has no idea how to write a story like this and has no idea what would sell the best for a writer your pay here is the votes and anyone real voter would not give you a 5 star for the above named reasons so with that being said I'll give a 3

Old uncle al there wasn't another chapter cause it was ruined with other people being involved that wasn't part of the family in a capacity outside of the build up to the sex with the family which is a no no in a incest story

11/10 Tables!!!!!

Great premise.

Nice, long buildup.

But the sex itself, the first time his cock penetrated her pussy, zoomed by.

Why did it have to go by so fast?

Why did she simply lower herself onto his erect cock? Why didn't she use her hand/s on it for a while? Asking him how it felt? Did he want her to keep doing it?

Why didn't she rub his cock head up and down her pussy? With dialog about how good it must feel? Asking him to imagine how good it would feel if he pushed it inside?

Did he like the way her pussy looked? Smelled? Tasted? (Her fingering of her sopping pussy, and then rubbing the pussy juice inder his nose would have been nice.)

And what did her pussy look like? Maybe I missed it, but was it shaved? Trimmed? Hairy?

Four stars.

Yeah, I had to go with a 4/5 myself. It is a really good story, but most of the criticism and complaints enumerated by others who commented before me are very valid. There was a long agonizing build up to a very rushed ending.

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The deal with the best friend wanting to start a fight felt out of place when in the previous few sentences you had described her as not wanting to go out with him still even though he had buffed up and passed the test. I'm glad that he deflowered his sister and then they continued to have sex going forward. But an emotional connection between them should have been written into the story as well. 😕

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It wasn't bad, but it definitely could stand a lot of improvement.

5 years, almost to the day, and still no continuation, ending, epilogue, or closure. Whatever you call it, it is overdue.

It would be a great treat to yourself to at least use a spell check program.

You are obviously hinting that the curvy sister caught and joined them… and yet five years later and nothing?

Long drawn out build up and then short fast finish 3⭐️

That was an intense, and amazing story. Have you thought about writing a sequel, or a series? I would love to read more.

Yes, that was a great story about sisterhood and motivation. The important thing is to find a reason to do something and keep it interesting. ;P Thank you.

What a great build up to a very climatic end. Thanks

(5/8/2023) “At peace, and alone. At least, that's what we thought. But we wouldn't learn about that until much later.” Oh, come on… Was big sister Aria watching??? It’s been six years! Five stars and this goes on my list. We need a sequel!! PLEASE!!!

Stupid immature childish story

5 Stars ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Slow build up. Seduction. Creativity. Most importantly Love. This story had it all. On the sister tag this story is the best on lirotica.

Is there ever going to be a follow up

It would be nice to know who was spying on them

Did you die or something? Just saw its been like 6 years since you wrote.