by promithius
I liked the story and read the whole thing but man, that was a long read with really not that much sex. I'm used to reading stories that are a little more explicit. It was a good reading story, just not a good jerkoff story.
I loved the 312 pages about redoing the courts. Sizzling stuff.
you fucked up the story when you made him a control freak
I feel that it's way too long with not enough sex. It was also way to detailed it is meant to be a quick story full of sex. You can never have to much detail in the sex scenes.
This was a very enjoyable story. Would have enjoyed a little more sex but I really enjoyed the development of their relationship.
A little long in the tooth and at the end you kinda whitewash the sex scenes after such a long build up.
First of all, you obviously do not know much about children. You describe a three year old kindergartener as a geek who never had any friends. Three year olds are in preschool, not kindergarten. How is a child that young considered a geek when they have very little life experience? Unless a three year old has been in day care, they have little opportunity to make many friends.
The story took a strange turn toward the end. The male character seemed very stunted and did not know how to relate to women. The story would have been much better if the relationship would have been allowed to develop naturally.