by lexxihart
Mmm I love this story I can't wait to read more x it sent me to sissy heaven, that wonderful feeling of submitting to a real man and accepting that you are his bitch write again soon x sissy Lucy
Fantastic story! But now you ought to stick to your promise, which is this being an ongoing saga... Can't wait to read further chapters of Thomas' debasement....
Anyway thanks for the brilliant idea.
This was really hot! I like stories where the younger, less powerfully built takes control of the older and more powerful! Please keep adding chapters
Great start for your first story, love how he uses girls names for them. Be interesting if he makes them dress as Pauline and Michelle
When I read stories and enjoy them, I'll leave a comment. When I don't enjoy them I usually won't leave a comment. You however asked for constructive criticism. The premise of the story was good. I personally am somewhat submissive and love being feminine for my lover. This story however was very unrealistic. The father is uber masculine, loves laying the pipe to women, physically imposing, is the master of his domain and in less than 24 hours and a 2 minute conversation he is a quivering submissive fag that gives up control of himself and his house to his son's bony, average dick boyfriend. I hope this helps. Good Luck
Who is Thomas? Michael is the dad, Paul is the son and Ethan the "alpha" boyfriend. There is a lot of hot sex and will be interesting to find out who else is in Ethan's pride.
Hated this. Just not my thing. The disrespect, name-calling, brothel of bitches, feminization, dom/sub and incestuous cheating. Not one thing was hot IMO. Different kinks for different folks I guess.
Excellent story. Please write a few more chapters. The father needs to be fucked by the young Daddy.
Red hot. Love a story about a pushy and confident dom making himself man of the house.
wow really hot and with so much possibilities for future chapters, using father and son together, getting the other son involved, maybe in front of his dad or girlfriend, ethan dominating his 2 adoptive dads and so on. can't wait to read them, so please hurry with more
The fathers name went from Michael to Thomas... and then Michelle at the end for (Michael) .. still a good story line but the name switch threw me off
Very nice. I really want to read the next chapters. I liked how he treated them like girls. I hope he will force Pauline and Michelle to wear female clothes (stockings, panties, bra, for instance) and maybe have them tattooed
hey there great work.ans so much possibilities for future chapters, like father/son together, gettin the other son involved,or the 2 adoptive dads serving ethan. can't wait to read more,please hurry
the names kept changing from michael to thomas to michelle and the roles of Ethan and Paul too.
The story started well, but you really need an editor to catch some of the easy to fix issues. I had to stop reading once you started mixing up names and changing character names. Once you used an entirely different name for a character I got turned off.
Damn that was a hot fucking story!!! I do agree with several people that you do need to have someone edit for you to make sure the names stay the same. Besides that I can't wait to read more keep it up :)
Great story. Well written. You can edit the few typos and resubmit. Put a stop to all the moaning. Here's an extract from the Help section;
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I loved this story despite the editing errors (which you can correct). My favorite line is:
"I craved his humiliation. I decided to surrender to his degradation.....please paint my face and claim me as your faggot."
I too am married and have actually been a secret "in the closet" cocksucker for years. I love submitting to alpha males who fuck my mouth and dump their big loads of cum down my throat.
I can't wait to read more chapters. Wonder if his wife finds out. Maybe she sees the videos that Paul took of his new faggot bitch.
Mmmmmm. Yes, that is my dream -- my wife watching me suck cock. Even better if I'm dressed in my sexy nylons, panties and bra.
I'm such a sissy, aren't I.
Saw your new post and the title caught my eye as could be hot. You didn't disappoint. I got broken in good by some young dominate dick behind my partners back.. So the son submitting and the contrast is awesome. The dad submitting is cool and hot but given your straight background for him drawing it out would have been better I think.
Managed to get to the end of the first story without making too much of a mess!! Just leaking down my leg.
Looking forward to the next session - waiting for Paul to cum home and he and his Dad getting busy!!! DAMN another load started to leak
a bit confused, started off as Michael then became Thomas. Other that will read the rest later. Just to let you now have done that and been there with my fuck buddy and my older brother!
The dad submitted far too easily in this story. Much more resistance would have been a lot more interesting