by Newlycucked
better all three had died and left the gene pool before the bastards were born. Barring that remember dead wives tell no lies.
. . . the story telling test. The guts of the story fit, the details used to put flesh on the bones don't fit all that well. There seemed to be details I had not much interest in as reader, unneeded repetition, and then rapid jump in exclusive sexual behavior with lover that could not be supported by the prior story.
A good proof reader, copy reader and especially a good editor would help make you a better author.
There is nothing in the story that explains how and why Aida turns into exactly what the author wishes in his fantasy. The fantasy itself isn't the issue. The problem is that, wow what a coincidence, Aida just acts out the fantasy. Boring.
What a sad pathetic story - surely Carl deserves a twelve bore stuck up his A..e & his priorities rearranging ?
The narrator,'I', never gives his name and no wonder. He should be ashamed to be known. He gave his wife away for a cheap thrill. She got a rich, successful, artistic man to love and give her the children she wanted. Carl got a replacement for his wife without having to bother about her day-to-day life. Carl was the absolute winner here. Just why Aida did not kick out her unloving, pervert husband and move in with Carl is the outstanding question.
for those cuckold lovers this was great
for any normal person it is less then trash
don't worry about the score it seems lick the WACC flock to this shit like flies and will slowly boost your score.
1: the cucky for being the brain sick cuckold
2: the wife for being the whore
3: the lover for being the marriage destroyer
4: the author for writing such a dumb story
What ruined the story: When she went with Carl in his plane, if the plane had crashed and both died...That was the perfect ending...This ending was a forced one, because she sudenly change character!!! Another error...How in hell the lover would speak spanish? To many forced issues in order to lead to this sad ending...1*
The first time she swallowed I would of done the same to her even if I needed to trick her than after she lied and fucked him denying me I would have forced it up her slut ass. She would be with the rich guy and there kids but divorce would have been immediately taken care of. He gets nothing by staying with her and for veins a sneaky dick Rick guy would've been living with really bad knees after I took a bat to them. Hubby wanted her to fuck some guy with him seeing but she was sneaky and the dick gave him up to her so he could make her fuck without guilt
When Aida said what she did and then get pregnant that is the time to kick her and Carl out. By telling her what you helped Carl in getting what he wanted
another asshole hubby gets what he deserves she should make him suck carls cock he should enjoy it
She knew that she would ultimately fuck Carl. She let the relationship develop slowly - smart woman. She satisfied her sexual cravings aroused by Carl by screwing hubby madly every night and then...she knew, an excuse to go to Carls?
She knew and played Carl too but the problem was, Carl could fill her better, had stamina, money, charisma and wanted her for himself. She knew, it worked out great for her...she was no dummy!
Idiot wanted to watch her, not lose her. She married him but was perfectly willing to cheat so...no real love there. He lost nothing except his self respect, she certainly doesn't respect him!
You live a dream world and that world is full of ahte and bitterness. I'm sure your ex wife is dancing every day and night that she finally got rid of your nasty ass. I gave this tory a 5
The story started slow but picked up nicely, great transitions. I did like that the stories timeline was measured in months not days, more realistic. The ending is a bit abrupt but finishes the story completly. Waiting for the next story!
I think it’s commendable that this site is an outlet for the mentally challenged to explore the world of writing. Their stories suck, of course, but it’s nice they get a chance to try.
Really enjoyed this story but not so sure about the ending. I would have liked the storyline to veer towards a mutually agreed sharing situation. However, both the hubby & wife seam to have got what they wanted but now they also have a family to think about. The story is well told and deserves 5*
This seriously sick individual finally stopped writing. Ray, so they really have wimp ass cucks in New Zealand?
Another perverted story about a wimpy and sick husband and a stupid slutty wife. Hope these aren't your neighbors or anywhere that they could inflict anyone with their BS and horrible morals.
Good afternoon sexy lady, I hope you are well. I think your hubby is a very lucky man indeed xx :X
Well I stopped after that first paragraph, so let me guess the useless whore has someone elses brat and the pathetic hubby is happy to raise it.
He gets the occasional handjob or has to do it himself.
By this point in time you would be newlydivorced if this were real and if it were, you'd be looking for a really busy street to go play in.
There is ‘past’ and there is ‘passed!’ Learn the difference…and ‘here’ and ‘hear!’
Why would anyone fantasize about your wife no longer having sex with you? Seriously you are one messed up person who needs massive amounts of therapy and testosterone injections.