All Comments on 'New Girl in Town Pt. 04'

Long wait for two pages

Great story but I hate cliffhangers gave you five stars anyway lol. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for taking the time to write especially when people bitch about your work.

Good things are worth the wait! Thanks for writing!

I still like this story and i'm hoping for more

I like your writing, but maybe change the prefix to state just skip the entire chapter if you don't like football. It was worded to make you think that something does actually happen beyond the football, but it doesn't.

Love your work please finish he story to long a wait

This is an amazing series. Needs many more pages and chapters to make it EPIC!

but the football here is extremely good. Who needs sex when you can butt heads, right?

Should be tagged under Non-Erotic.

good writing but to long between postings. chapters should contain some personal interaction of characters.

Two pages! You are killing me. Great five stars!

Dick

Although it's really short, it's another good read.

keep em coming.

Great chapter can't wait to see what happens in chapter 5 I hope Jamie gets kicked off the team and Patrick gets demoted.

Your killn me here.....

If this is the end of the story then there was no point in starting it at all

good story but the two pages, and the long wait period is killing me

Love this story. Can't wait for next chapter. Your doing great. Keep it coming

Please don't leave it too long for the next chapter

Please get more pages and start the interaction of sex

Don’t mind the no sex, just need more story.

What no sex, it's okay enjoying the story, but don't forget the name of the site

you know your football. great series so far

I'm loving this story. So disappointed when I realised that there wasn't any more to read! Like others, not bothered about the no sex - it didn't even cross my mind....I just want to know what happens and how that idiot gets his comeuppance!

Five stars all the way through! (As long as we don't have to wait too long!)

What coach would be so blind to what was going on? Quarterbacks wear red vests when playing against their own team.. Any player hitting like that would be immediately benched and possibly thrown off the team.

Remember, they're teammates, even if they hate on another.

Also, If our hero knew about the halfback toss and the coach didn't, he's a bad coach.

That wrecked this chapter for me.

Too much unnecessary sport. Better if you had actually extended the story. Problem is you are writing fairly well and keeping your characters consistent. Always a good thing.

Don't listen to the naysayers. The football is a part of the story. Love the characters and the flow of the story. I will continue to read and finish the story.

This is a great story. If you don’t like sports then there are lots of other stories.

Still enjoying the story!

Very clearly the author never played any contact sport. All that bantering and "strategizing" would not be very useful on the pitch. Just underlines how football players are idolized in American culture, while the rest of the world laughs at them behind their back.

For anonymous talking about “contact “ sport and then referring to the field as a “pitch” shows he hasn’t played real contact sports. Soccer is a great game but at the upper levels the flopping to try to get a penalty draws naughtier worldwide. Soccer in no way is a contact sport being about as rough as high school girl’s basketball

A minor point a protein bar right before a game is nothing as it takes hours to digest. A Snickers bar or a Payday 30 minutes before the game starts hitting the bloodstream right about game time.

I've been loving the story, but one thing is starting to bother me. The way Jake is acting with Jessica. I don't care what happened with his girlfriend last year (sounds like she cheated on Jake and fucked Patrick) he behaves as if he honestly doesn't think Jessica is into him at all. I mean, he said as much to himself as he left her house that night. Jake is a bright guy and Jessica is doing everything but throwing herself at him. And, if Jake truly was that dense, his cousin Shelly or one of the other girls would have pulled him aside by now and said, "What the fuck is your problem? You're clearly into her but you're acting like you want to make sure nothing can happen between you. You're intentionally ruining your chances with her. Why?" I really hope it doesn't stay like this for too much longer or I know I'll get pissed off and quit reading it. I don't want to. I have a feeling some crazy shit lies ahead and I want to see what it is...but I can only take so much.