All Comments on 'New Horizons for Nick'

So hot! Nick is such a cutie. When do we get to *ahem* meet the mother? :3

What a mess of a story.

'She had just given Nick a pair of her panties, pink, lacy, the crotch wet with her juices, and smeared with Paul's cum as it had seaped from her pussy for twenty minutes or so. She wondered what Nick would do with a pair of her panties, the crotch soaking wet from her juices, made even wetter by the load of Paul's cum. '

You just repeated yourself. In the next chapter the panties were black. No continuity.

Do you just write what pops into your head?

'She had dark short hair ' Wouldn't it have read easier if she had short dark hair?