All Comments on 'Next of Kin Ch. 01'

This certainly promises to be a very hot story and I hope you will not keep us waiting too long for subsequent chapters. Well done

this could be fun read

Can't wait for more!

More please.

I’m loving the setup. Atmospheric setting. Unusual characters. 5 stars. A longer chapter would have been better though.

There has been similar stories in the past, so we'll see where you take us. 4* for now...

well done setup. How old are the characters? I am guessing middle age or so unless the old man was old when he fathered them. Plus Veronica's hair is silver? hope the rest of the story is as good. make the chapters a little longer.

1. Good start on a potentially great story.

2. MORE!

Interesting premise, but you didn't really give us much to hang onto for now.

I love the "story" being developed before it justs gets down to the 'action'. Too many writers fail to take the time. Also, few take the time to read a 10 page story in this format. Please, continue!

Give the older brother Ren a splash of sexy hair for his manly muscular chest. Something for his sisters to stare at, caress, lick, cuddle, etc.

Not much to get into here. Hoping for better in the next chapter.

more of this story please

Great start. Looking forward to much more.

Well written and intriguing. I am looking forward to more.

Can't wait for the next chapter! Promises to be very good

Interesting idea, developing nicely. I'm ready for Chapter 2. Soon, please

Very interesting, well-written, teasing start. Next part, please!

more ,starting to get good

Excellent start, will be on the lookout for more chapters to see how it develops.

I hope it is a long,long story.

Scores 5/5

I like where the story may be going. I wish I had a few more subtle hints. I’m looking forward to the next chapter.

Nice start. The hook is set. Looking forward to the next installment.

The use of "most alien geometries" in describing the kitchen makes it sound like the author is an avid reader of Lovecraft and similar writers.

Keep going. Interesting start.

nice read, i like where it may go. 10/10, continue

Repeat of previous post

Really looking forward to Ch. 2

Obviously I have many questions which I hope will be answered in future installments, but by far the most pressing is this: is the narrator's name literally Ren? Or is that a nickname used by his father and sisters? If it be his real name, it will be the first time I have been aware of a character being named for the kidney. (I should note that I wouldn't/don't have a problem with that if it be the case; it's just that the question is going to keep bugging me if we go forward without some disambiguation.)

Looking forward to more!

Cant wait for the next part

When is the next chapter coming?

Ok so where's the rest of the story? Started off real good

Unfinished stories get one * from me even if they are as good as this one. If your game is just to tease the readers you will have no more readers left.

Why is there no follow up!

After all, this Part was Posted 14 months ago!

Is there a follow up? Not funny.. !!!!

So, hopefully someone working in the medical field, and got bogged down to much to write, or a victim of the human mandate going around the last few years?