All Comments on 'Nice Guy Ch. 01'

Great story, thanks for sharing it with us.

Left in midstream. What happens after the divorce..and what happens to the cheating wife. Good tale, though.

. . . this seems like the start to what will become a well told tale. I'm guessing that there are problems with the legal part of the story, problems in the details being across state lines. I find something like that inconsequential to the story. The instantaneous reversal of a thirty year loving relationship by Jan isn't fully explained by an intimate relationship thirty years ago and compassion for close friends. I don't think one turns into that much of a shrew that quickly without somehing external going on, and that external is much more than sex. Those are things that can be smoothed in future chapters. This story has a lot of possibility with the neighbor lady playing wise sage. I want to see where all the tale leads. As the saying goes, lead on, write some more good chapters.

really. Not even close. The wife stealing well over $140,000 with no one at the credit Union asking ANY questions? Its 2011 not 1961.

Once this happens this Nice is too fucking stupid to be believed. Has he called mand talked to HER family ?

Her friends ?

The husband kissing and making out with Gail on the front here was HUGGGGGE mistake. That car that drove by may have been some PI in it tgaking pictures.

This woman has stolen almost 150,000... she has made up bogus charges. Every phone call is shrieking and screaming.

of course she would hire a PI ..with HIS Money no less !!!!

Can we spell clueless? Did not like it.

The wife turned into a bitch overnight ? No warning ? Whatever . It's not my story, This wasn't horrible but the author took shortcuts & a potentially very good story is the lesser for it .

Very intriguing concept, wife gone rogue ! The author dealt with best part of story only in minimallist manner . Three stars for a four star story , deducting one for shirking duty as good storyteller.

Even for a story that can be considered erotica, it ended mid-blowjob.

As much as he was devastated, bewildered and hurt there is No Way he should ever reconcile...NO WAY!!!

Her betrayal, lies and then absolute disrespect, sneaking, lying and verbal abuse...not a chance.

Actually, he has a chance to find a good and honest women while he is still young enough to enjoy her. I would never want Jan back or anywhere near me or the house!

And great execution. I hope this is all written and posted on consecutive days. I don't want to wait long. I especially want to see the fallout when the friend finds out on his deathbed that Jan had the wool over everyone's eyes. I hope the friend skewers her, and it pierces to the core.

That brings up an intreresting question--why has the friend not called. For a thank you if not to verify Jan's story. Is he complicit? There are many avenues this could take, and I look forward to seeing where it goes.

Wulf

the husband hasn't tried harder to get the true story to the dying friend. It would be easy to arrange for someone to hand-deliver him a letter.

But then maybe we wouldn't have the story! So keep it coming, and let us enjoy where you're goin g to take it.

Could one man load, transport, unload and stack three cords of wood in oone hour?

Pretty good writing and a good concept for a story. The old lady (Gail) is right. Some people do act different when someone close to them dies or is dying. I think it makes people step back and review their life. Like I said it's a good start but I have a feeling that this is your idea of a complete story. I understand. It's easy to start a story but difficult to end one so a lot of people just stop. Notice I didn't say writers. I hope you continue, if not, oh well

The wife changed too quickly. Why wouldn't Greg have offered to have Robert, his friend too, to move down to live with them? Greg doesn't seem too curious for a guy who thought he had the perfect wife. Looking forward to the next chapter.

To the commenters who complained about it ending too soon: Check the title, doesn't it say something about chapter 1?

Harry....does anything make you happy?

until he went to bed with Gail and now he is just another cheating spouse. 1* for the down turn in the story.

I hope part 2 is as good as part 1. Thanks for sharing.

Yet I submit the three star rating for four star writing is still valid . The installment of this story is too short ( barely one page ) . The author is free to drag his feet in telling his story & I am free to dock him a star for that action . Two pages or close to it is acceptable .

No good restaurant gets over just serving appetizers which from a reader standpoint is the equivalent of a one page submission . I give five star ratings pretty freely and I try to accentuate the positive in commenting. My blind spot is however short installments on serial stories . It honestly brings out the worst in me.

For what it's worth I like much of what I see from this author & am keeping an open mind - hoping to award full marks on his future work . He's raw in some crucial facets but has that uncut diamond potential .

I just hope that he gets retribution for the way his 'loving" wife treeted him. So she is living with a friend of her husbands (who probably does'nt know that the the husband didn't agree with the idea) and expects to continue her loving marriage with her husband as soon as the other guy dies. I hope that the husband gets everything and the friend finds out that she lied abd he dumps her with nowhere left to go. I just hope that she has to pay back the savings that they had and DOES go to jail for perjury.

She's been screwing the friend for years.

I hope you come up with a creative and nasty way to dispose of the filthy cunt, like her being gang banged to death by the oakland raiders.

but being a good guy covers all bases. TK U MLJ LV NV

off in the woods in Humboldt county on the way back, they will treat her as a trespasser, end of problem. I would be pissed about the money, torture her until she talks first. A hand held propane torch is recommended, she would talk immediately. Someone else was right about the wood, around here a cord fills a pickup. He could use his hard earned wood to burn her like a witch. More porn than story so far. Bark my little bitch dog.

1. It is right we male people dye earlier and there is surplus of females among the elders. Good example is this story.

2. It is not good to be sad long time because it will shorten the life because the immun system will be weak. He was lucky with Gail, his immun system will be intact and she will help him to find a second mate/wife.

3. Good story 5 stars.

still needs a creampie

not enough humiliation for the likes of RandomHardon, DWhuecuck, poopchootkaboose, cuckeye0007 - amp up the hubby humiliation and those wannabe cucks will amp up the jizz-o-meter

She painted herself in a corner with the restraining order, clearing out the bank account and threatening to put him in jail.

You don't take her back after all that, you just don't.

But then we'll see.

My little bitch dog barks on command again, we are ready for the next phase of training. I would bet our little anon queers are part of the Penn state football program. They were so pissed they could no longer suck the dicks their father figures that they destroyed parts of the campus. Fuckin' waterboys.

The wild reaction of his wife when she was asked if she was fucking ratcheted up the tension. Of course, it is full of things difficult to believe, but it is a good story.

One of the less real ideas is having a restraining order against his trying to communicate issued in California against a guy in Washington... It is definitely illegal and the judge which issued it would soon be off the bench. But we will just treat it like enjoyable fantasy...

The trouble is the husband has done exactly what the bitch wife was accused of, he should have waited until he was divorced.

This is a really good start and looking for more.

I really liked this one. Don't keep us waiting too long.

With Chapter 1 finished, there are some areas to explore. For example, is the friend in Berkeley really dying or does Jan simply enjoying her renewed romance? Was the death of the wife in fact accidental? Is Jan in love with the Berkeley friend and wants Greg out of her life? if so, why did she react so negatively on receiving the divorce papers?

Since Chapter 1 leaves a lot of questions requiring answers, I think one can regard this to be a strong beginning to the story. Don't keep your readers waiting for chapter 2.

You're obviously a very screwed up and sad man, and I can't help feeling a little sorry for you. But all this advocating violence against women is disturbing, which is why I have reported you to the authorities. I hope you can get the help you need.

thanks for the 'jizz-o-meter' idea, too funny. not big on the violence aspect (only a dickless pussy hurts women) but you're still making hay and leading the way for cucks and want-to-be cucks, wtg!

When are you going to finish this Story it seems like it could have a Few more Chapters to get to the End.

I sure hope you are working in subsequent chapters. Perhaps furture chapters will adequately answer why he is just sitting up there waiting for....what? His wife to come back? Is he going to keep the farm and work till he is 65? Would like to peer into his brain and see what he is planning for his future. Yes, he has started divorce proceedinds, but as soon as she shows up and says she loves him, will he revert to character? It only seems logical he would be pondering these things...

Looking forward to Chapter 2.

Interesting story premise. So after 30 years, Greg does not get on a plane and attend the memorial service ? He does not get face to face with his wife to discuss how and why once he learns about the terminal illness ?

I sense the wife took the money for leverage.

Anxious to read the next chapters, please continue.

Thanks for the effort.

Aside from the idiot commenting about 'torture the bitch' there are numerous different ways this could go. Want to see how he handles the situation as it develops.

why the headache,tell her bye and move on.

This was horrible. Considering that he doesn't attend the funeral of his good friends wife, nor does he try to reconcile why she suddenly goes from a loving and devoted wife of 30 years to batshit crazy...plus all of the other irregularities, it makes no fucking sense. Add in the geriatric sex and all I can think of is scouring my brain with bleach.

Good foundation for the main characters to build on, and the storyline has a lot of possibilities and different avenues which it could follow.

I like that he took maters in hand, and didn't just roll over to the whim of his cheating wife.

He would be crazy to ever take his wife back, since she rejected every thing their marriage meant and the years that they had spent together.

She must have been ready to move on, even before all of the mess in Berkley had started, to so quickly give up on her husband and their marriage.

Thanks for the good start.

Another vote for making hubby have more common sense than most LW authors do. Why do the males almost never call the couple's friends about what's going on? Why desolation and depression without finding out the whole story?

If hubby cared so much he'd have gone down to find out in person.

Too many commenters want to do the author's job by rewriting the story. Not their job. Comments and editing comments are appropriate. Only one "r" in Monterey, CA.

The question is... what's next? I will read Ch 2.

his head whistles in a cross wind

I had one myself. It is very easy operation. (relatively speaking). Aortal walls swell and if you are unlucky they burst. Then you have 3 minutes to live.

Whole story is inept and full of bull shit. One of the worst.

What the fuck was in Janice's' head? I will read on...

Nice to have support while your life falls apart around you -

The actions of Sweetie are intriguing (at least from outside...Hubby feels differently, I'm sure!). Looks promising!

Well written and very intriguing. Thanks.

When he found out that she was sleeping with Robert, why wouldn't he have called Robert immediately? Why wait? Since he was angry, he would have called and had he not gotten a hold of Robert, he would have called his son. That fact alone puts a giant hole in this story and makes it all seem so implausible.

An area of a circle fifty miles in diameter is 7853 miles of space.

The area of Rhode Island is only 1240 square miles. It is more than one tenth of the area of Washington State (66582).

If Robert and Janice each moved 50 miles away from each other from the center of the state, they would almost cover the entire North South axis of the state, leaving a mere 20 miles on each side.

Does that seem a tad...excessive?

but close to finish..Mr Hyde appears. TK U MLJ LV NV

Whoa there pardner! There ain't no way one man can move three cords of wood in an hour. He'd be damn hard pressed to move one. A cord being four feet high, four feet wide, and eight feet long. Three cords at twelve feet wide, eight feet long, and four feet high. More like a day and a half to two days, what with loading and unloading and transporting. Story line is good reading. Cheers!

The writer may be used to face cords instead of true cords, a face cord is 4 feet high and 8 feet long but can be any depth. (a way for wood sellers to cheat you)

If you cut your own firewood you would use cords not face cords.

Average weight of a true cord of wood is over two tons.

Most pickup trucks can haul half a cord in one trip.

She cleans out a retirement account of over $100K, and bitches about closed credit cards?

But there is no way in hell any sitting Judge gives his wife a restraining order keeping him from talking to Robert or his family. Just doesn't happen like that. And I think he called Robert right after his wife hung up. And told Robert in no uncertain terms that he didn't agree to his wife staying with him. And then I think he called his son and told him what was going on. Which kills the rest of your story.

plot holes, absurd actions and reactions, standard Katmai crap. 1*

Don't bother reading any further, it goes full prostitute cuck in the end.

She could have gotten a restraining order preventing him from contacting HER, but no Judge anywhere prevents him from contacting the family. That was just stupid. And he could have filed an alienation of affection suit and had Robert served. That wouldn't have violated the TRO and it would have let Robert and his family know that he wasn't approving of her actions. Then the Courts would have required her to replace the money in the account so that it could be split under the Courts supervision according to the provisions of the divorce. So this whole mess just doesn't fly.

Janice seems to have a screw loose. That's why she stayed with the friend. Husband is just acting on instinct. Let's see what happens...

Always the same crap!! She cheats and he is a cuckold!! Normal men would not react like your idiots!! Its far away of reality!!! Even a fantasy has to be recognizable at reality. If not it`s unbelievable and only laughable!!!

another illiterate WHORE posting cuck shit.

How you can try and convince anybody that what you write is meaningful is beyond me. Why do you write if you trash everything in part 3. 1*

Karen was a good friend for both him and his wife. There was no way that he would not go down and stay for the funeral. You don't ignore the funeral of a good friend". This was bullshit!

Looking forward to reading the next chapter.

Perhaps you missed the part about her infidelity?

But there's simply no way a Judge gives her a restraining order covering Robert and his family.. There's no legal reason to include him or his family. So that really kinda ruined that idea and he would have called Robert BEFORE the legal notice anyway considering what his wife was doing. As in first thing he did when his wife hung up on him. I can hear the conversation now - "Hey Robert, why are you screwing my wife"?

So you've got a large hole in your plot.

This may need a wimp tag. Hope I'm wrong.

If he can fetch three cords and stack them in one hour

Something wrong here, Janice went nuts over night.

First chapter had a unique plot but we could really do without our hero bedding the old lady next door. At least not for a few months.

First of all, men diagnosed with inoperable aortic aneurysms aren't having sex. They're not doing much of anything, as both strenuous activities which increase blood pressure and moving around the way one would during sex increases the likelihood of rupture. Unless you want to go out that way...

Second, she drained $140k from a joint account without a co-signer?

Third, a 50-mile restraining order? Short of the "Nice Guy" being Pol Pot, Hitler and Mao's love child, wtf did he do? Is he committing genocide in the Bay Area? A genocide of 1? Are these those crazy Cali judges we hear about? And based on abuse? With what evidence?

Fourth, and the good friend went ahead with this plan without talking with the Nice Guy? What planet are these people from?

Finally, she got divorce papers ready, filed and him served 2 states away in 2 days? I'd love for government to be that efficient.

Oh, I'm looking forward to part 2 already...

Firstly, there is no such thing as a 50 mile restraining order. Thats just ridiculous. Hell, there's not even a 50 mile exclusion zone around Chernobyl!! Not even if he was a proven serial killer. Not even if he had chopped off her arm!

Secondly, in NO jurisdiction can anyone take out a restraining order on behalf of someone else, unless they are a minor, or deemed mentally unfit to take care of themselves. No one can file a restraining order on behalf of a competent adult. So there is no way she could file an order including Robert and his adult children.

These stories. Sex makes everything ok. Her absolute betrayal and sex with her and Gail it's all good again. Not! Stupid ending to this story. The reason I am posting here ? There are no comments after the last chapter.

"An hour later, Gail had three more cords in her wood pile..."

If Mr. Nice Guy can load 3 cords in a pickup, drive down the road, unload it, and stack it in an hour, then all that other legal stuff makes total sense. I am of an age that makes the context and storyline of interest. A wife of retirement age getting caught up in helping her friends way off in another state is realistic. Having the stay be extended several times is possible. Having one or more of those friends being assholes is highly probable. All of the exaggerated circumstances are unnecessary. There's still a good story in there somewhere.

LWlurker

The story becomes a cuck-out by the MC, with a helping of polyamory thrown in just to please the childish element here.

Will follow to see where this goes

Will follow to see where this goes

Will follow to see where this goes

You can sure tell this here author is a city feller says can move and stack three cord all alone in an hour with a pick up truck.

Different strokes for diferent folks.

That butter part gave me a chuckle.

Initially, the wife stupidity seems to far fetched even if a fictional character.

However, death changes the people of the deceased on neurological and physical.

I've had relatives who immediately

Succumbed to Alzheimer's after the death of loves ones.

Others were young and had severe physiological and psychological disorders all because of someone hey loved died.

Gail understood this.

Good writing

Except for the restraining order part it was okay. No way possible for her to get a comprehensive order like that in that short a time.