All Comments on 'Niece's Wedding Pt. 09'

I hope this does not end . How can he be so cold to her?

This is the first one of these stories I have actively disliked. The tonal shift between the previous stories and this one is jarring, and frankly, unpleasant. Yeah, the actions of the main character have been sketchy in the past, but there seemed to be a well-defined reluctant consent. the first of the two "punishment" scenes in this one does away with that reluctance altogether. That was just a flat-out violent rape. The casual dismissal ending, while less violent, is equally jarring and unpleasant. In all honesty, my recommendation would be to pull this story down and take another crack at it. If you want to end this particular dynamic between these characters and move on to others, that's fine, but the characters, and your readers, deserve better here.

I really wish this story would continue.