All Comments on 'Nos Faux Ratu Ch. 08'

I had been geting a little miffed that I had to wait so long for a new story from you. No longer.

When the stories you give us are as good as this one is, you feel free to take all the time you need to write them. Thank you.

I have got to say that this is definitely one of your best stories, and that is saying something considering im a huge fan of your other stories:). keep up the good writing ive had you bookmarked for ages just so i know when you write something new.

I am thrilled with this years installment. Loved the characters, also the ending felt nicely wrapt up. Hopefully you can think of some more adventures for these characters (I would like a story with Lawrence as the main character) but am looking forward to your next endeavour, regardless of who (or what) is in it. If there is somewhere you have stories which contents do not fit this websites profile, I would very much like to know. I would love to read them as well.

A spectacular success. I enjoyed every word... even the proof reading errors.

<smile>

A wonderful story about people that end up good in spite of the world.

Thanks

simply love it. this is one of your best story yet. Love the characters and the plot. and i really like the way you ended it. As always thank you for sharing you stories and i look forward to more. Mechmanas@aol.com

ANOTHER TREMENDOUS STORY. YOUR STORY'S JUST SEEM TO GET BETTER AND BETTER KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK. I ALREADY CAN'T WAIT FOR YOUR NEXT STORY.

this story was great and i waited for its every chapter. there are characters in it that could have their own stories that would stand alone ( i really hope you if you do its with avery and annbella, with a visit from nessie) i await your next story with great anticipation

Your silhouette should be the logo of this site. I love your stories, just good sexy fun.

By far one of the best stories I've ever read on the site! And definitely one of the best stories I've read in general in quite some time. Fantastic characters, great universe, strong compelling story, and did I mention fantastic characters. I particularly loved how you managed to make very powerful characters still seem vulnerable and human. You are a truly gifted writer, and I definitely look forward to reading your next piece.

This has got to be one of the best, stories EVER posted to this site. Wow! You take my breath away!

anticlimactic chapter after all this buildup. Puzzling. Is there more to come or did you run out of steam?

You drug me into Chapter 1, and i got lost for hours there and commented on that to you. And since then, i have been lost within the realm of this ABSOLUTELY AMAZING story of yours! The depth of your descriptions within the story had me right there, in that building; watching as if a fly on the wall, (a hidden wall, not used for wolves or vamps to jump off of) the hell that Marcus and Jenna were creating as they powered their way thru. You are THE BEST! Can't wait for another one similiar, with as much dragging power as this.

Damn it man, you write some really good stuff. This the fourth of your stories that just hooked in me in Ch. 1 and dragged me al through the rest in one wash! You should publish something. You got reall talent for this stuff.

Once again, you write and we read. Another great story by one of the best writers on Lit.

You've created a very rich and wonderful world as well as a great series of characters. It's nice to know that you're running out of archetypes, in that there were a number of parallels between characters in this story and your others. Of course I probably only noticed because I've been reading them since the first of the month. I hope you make us wait a year for your next one.

Thank You.

Holy freaking cow, you are good. Very, very good. Wonderfully written, fully fleshed out characters, a fantastic story line. I almost rushed through the naughty bits to get back to the story! Almost.

As someone else already said, I found myself skipping the erotic scenes to get back to the story (I mean that in a good way). You should seriously look into getting published. Your stories are better than most published sci fi novels I've read. Who needs Twilight when Evil Alpaca is here :)

Loved it like all your stories. The characters and plot are just amazing...now just waiting for the next one! :D

Your stories are really good and i defiantly skip most of the erotic scenes keep it up and you could defiantly get published

You're really a great writer. It's a very good story. Looking forward for your next story.

it was a very good story. i also found myself skipping the erotic parts to continue following the actual storyline. you just made a few mistakes? like at the end, the adoptive family's surname is suddenly moore instead of monroe? and a few times you mixed nessa and jenna up...but i really enjoyed the story. get yourself a publisher, or a producer!

I do that too, lol, I skip some of the parts that are just sex because the story is just so good and I can't wait to see what happens next, not that you aren't very good at writing erotic parts as well.

i have read this, and better it gets every time, i do think that some characters could be explored more, and to see what reprecussions happen from the battles

I've really liked all of your stories that i've read. This one is now one of my favorites.

Simply Fantastic, EvilAlpaca! I can't help but be impressed, you make it looks so damned easy (when it's anything but). Your world building, characters and dialogue are top flight!

And the sex? Well, that's just gravy. Although I must admit, I too found myself speed reading the sex to get back to your awesomely addictive storyline.

And just like some other reviewers, I found myself wishing to know more about Jenna & Nessa and this universe you've created (you've got fab characters -all the ladies were awesome and Marcus and Shinmato were also fab; I'd love to know more about Nessa's brood). The ending felt a bit rushed considering it's buildup, so that gives me some hope that we haven't heard the last of the lovely ladies.

Well Done, EA! Don't be a stranger!

seriously you have a gift and i would very much like you to post more stories

Wouldn't mind seeing a sequel to this if one doesn't exist already.

Keep up the good work.

I don't think I can say anything here that hasn't already been said by others before me, but I just wanted to add my heartfelt thanks for writing yet another awesome story!

Your plotlines are always so well thought (and fleshed) out, that I end up getting dragged into reading the whole thing in one sitting. You really should consider this as a career (if you don't write professionally already!)

Many thanks again & keep up the good work.

Loved it. Read the whole series in one shot. Loved all the chapters. 5-star stuff. The fight sequences and the dialogues were the best.

Btw, there are a lot of minor grammar mistakes, especially prepositions.

Keep writing. ;)

Tc,

Div

Really, really good!

It has cost me three sleepless night, but I am finally at the end of this story.

I wanted to thank you for the thrill, the excitement, the lust, the warmth.

It is an excellent story, and I am ever so glad you sat down and wrote it.

Kudos.

what does the title mean?

I find myself rereading the stories and they don't lose there appeal. So good very few others are even in the same league as Evil Alpaca.

@anon basically it's a word play on "nosferatu" which is a synonym for vampire. Faux means fake in french, so the title basically says "fake vampire"

Are you going to write an extension set of stories for this piece or is this the final writings for this subject

Well, I finally got around to reading this for a second time. I feel bad for not reviewing the first time through. I remember thinking that I was going to like Shinmatsu the first time through, and then very quickly realizing I was right :) Once again, very well done, and I hope we all get to see something new from you soon :)

for 2011?

Please Evil Alpaca Please!! I love ALL your stories,your style is unique erotic,hilarious and emotional Please give us another story! Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays:)

I loved that comment "Don't be silly, Nessie hasn'lived in the Loch for a few hundred years. It got crowded." That made my day :)

Great stuff as always.

I've read all of your stories and wanted to say that I think they are amazing. I love reading them, and hope to see more some time. I have a hard time deciding which I enjoy the most

^

Very well written and extremely original premise.

I have read this story like six or seven times and loved it each time. First time I read it, I was late to work because I was up reading all night!. Very original and would love to see it become a book.

I can't believe that a story on here can be so good!

That wasn't story material! That was Top Class Novel material! Incredible, i have read many many series on literotica and this is the best written one i have found so far(with a few grammatical errors but not bad). i look forward to reading the rest of this authors series!

WOW...and WOW again. So have you sold the movie rights to Hollywood? I sure hope so.

LOVED IT!!! :D i could seriously read your stories all day long and i just did literally lol your awesome. keep up the amasing writing (:

Keep up the great work. Thank you for sharing with us

Aside from Williams parents suddenly being named Moore instead of Monroe at the end this story was epic!

So well constructed and written. Real "people". Masterful.

Wonderful story.

Loved Shinmatsu ;-)

Awesome story and very good writing

and well worth the 3 am hour to finish... ;)

I miss Evil Alpaca. His stories are so good.

Anyone know why EA doesn't write here anymore?

Yeah, the sex is hot and sweet, but the action, and the dialog, and the family stuff, and the tear-jerking... Really good fiction. Thanks, Evil Al!

Re reading for the 3rd time

EA doesn't write anymore because he passed away

I think i read it in comments on one of his stories a while back

I did wonder if evil alpaca passed away. such amazing stories, perhaps the best ever.

did EA have other writings?

EA's bio page was updated as recently as 9.2016, so I'm not sure about the report of his/her demise.

If someone else had access, and updated it, woudn't they add something about their death?

It's not the first time a situation like this has arisen, it would be nice if Lit had a procedure for a contibutor's death. I don't have any ideas, but if anyone else does, pass it on to admin.

I could be wrong about EA's passing i have a horrible memory (great for re-reading stories) and it was some time ago i thought i read it. I may be mistaken for another author. I havent been able to find where i read it

Write more!

Is there by any chance, a potential sequel in the making of this beautiful story. I may not have an account on this site but I can definitely think of a few things for a potential sequel. I mean. With Jenna just literally opening up, she could’ve only discovered part of her sexuality. The possibilities are truly endless.

It's difficult to top that Dick Cheney joke this story starts out with, we should just be happy with what was shared and not beg for more.

I actually thought it would be a lot more light-hearted when I started reading it only to find out it was all, government assassins and creatures of the night! And I think that says a lot about the only thing I think is wrong with this story, the title. Now I enjoy a good pun like the next guy and alluding to 'fake vampires' although apt for the story just doesn't conjure the right air for the story. It's a story who's initial impression shouldn't be a play on words, however clever it might be. If you ever have the opportunity, change the title to something with a little more weight behind it, as it's the only thing I would change.

I have read your work repeatedly over the years, still amazing stuff. I want more stuff set in these sci fi universes you have created!

You picked a great spot to end this. You didn't drag it on, and you pointed to the future well. Nice job.

After all this years and many reads: what tough, great story!

Don't know where Evil Alpaca is, I hope he / she found piece. You will not be forgotten.

AWESOME!

MASTERPIECE ....... Ten stars hundred stars are not enough ....... That was so impressive, a tale to remember for long long time ....... Exyraordinary ...... Thank you for sharing such creative art here

Just such a great, great story.

5/5

J

I agree

Outstanding story!!! Loved every minute of it. Great job.

I offer my congratulations on a well-written fiction novel! It was good to watch a somewhat fractured anti-hero become whole again. Great work all around.

Truly outstanding, the World Vision you’ve built, plus the entire Night Breed Society, along with the emotion that’s clearly evident all the way through make this a very special piece of work indeed. Fwiw I also loved the idea that the “Bad Guys” didn’t just wait or queue up to be killed in the traditional way, their plans had contingencies and fail safes, as a good military mind would have done, it’s very easy for a writer to dumb down their villains to enhance their heroes actions, that’s a lazy way of writing and is all too common in film and book as well as here on Lit.

Great piece of work from Evil Alpaca, many thanks for writing and posting here on Lit, cheers, Ppfzz. 5⭐️

Others have said it. All I can do is repeat. Wonderful, fantastic imagination.

Thankyou.

The product of a wonderful mind.