All Comments on 'Off the Bus Ch. 02'

And a lovely plot it appears to be. Thank You. Ronnie W.

You like to leave us hanging, don't you? Hurry up and give us more of these two. I want to know how they know each other.

Please please please write more. You always leave us hanging. I love this story and I can't wait to see what happens next. Please write the next chapter soon.

why start a story that you don't finish.

OMG YOU LEFT US HANGING AGAIN......ARRRRRRRGGGG LOL PLEASE PLEASE HURRY WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER, AND IF IT TAKES A LITTLE LONGER CAUSE YOU DID 2 THAT WOULD BE AWESOME AS WELL.

Why must you tease us so?!?!?!?!? I shall be anxiously awaiting another installment. Great Job by the way!

The interaction between the characters is playful and doesn't feel forced or burdened with stereotypes. This is so absolutely refreshing to read. Great plot and again, YOU ROCK!

I am totally loving it...glad that I discovered you and that you have quite a few stories for me to read...I should be doing my reading for class, but that's going to have to wait...

and the plot thickens!

Now we're getting to it. This was so very entertaining. Loved the light banter between them and the flow. I don't sense she is as brash as she would have him think. The veneer is thin hiding some deep shit on her part. Well........... we shall see; won't we?

No, she's not typical but cautious. Good description of Jolie and David and of their inner thoughts. The description of Jolie's sweater, and David's reaction was classic.

A trainer who cooks and serves good wine is a nice combination. Jolie's thought's with her buzz was well done as was her move to his lap and removal of her sweater was rousing. The change of mind, in this situation, was a perfect way to keep the story moving and tugging at the readers emotions. It's only a second until I read chapter three.

A man could get dizzy with her change in attitude, but leaves the door open for further development. A well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next chapter. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memory?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.