All Comments on 'Off the Clock'

You use whatever is at hand!

5

Discreet, loved it! 5*

Greatest love story ever told. Soon. thanks

Nice. No disrespect. Just fun between two adults.

The line about "a bank robbery going on across the street, and this whole area is in lockdown." goes beyond the believable and really isn't needed.

The story as a whole is sweet and holds together well.

Now that's a fun day at work! Good luck in the contest. Cheers. Frankie

It was okay but they were getting ready to go home. No-one robs a bank when it's closing or already closed.

I, for one, didn’t mind the lockdown angle. Nice to see a little taste of reality thrown into the fantasy, makes it seem more plausible.

Clever and well done, as always. People who nit-pick about tiny details on stories that they're reading for free are a little annoying at times.

Fun story, S&F, and a really nice fit with the theme (and with him!). Sounds like a nice setup for something longer term between them too!

Nice story easy read.

Cheers SAGE

NOT bad... outside of the reference to "packing behind his fly" but not "looking up to HIS face"!

I stopped there.