by ilikeithot6308
An awesome and moving story about real people. Keep up the great work, and please write a sequel.
Not every story needs to turn into a series but I would love to see these characters continue to develop. Please continue this.
Not a lot of build-up, but pretty hot. A good, simple sexy tale. If you write another chapter, please continue to avoid unnecessary melodrama.
This was fun, and I'd like to read more, if you're willing. Maybe Kelly has some hot college friends that she'd like to introduce to Todd, for some group activities ;)
I don't award many stories five stars, but this one really earned them all.
Scotsman69
You need to write one or three more chapters, for now keep out others, let thier love grow, and maybe have todd bring the girl to him for the weekends. And have end up together.
This was a fantastic story. No pretentious build up. Just a real nice read. 5-stars all the way.
The story was well-written, and erotic enough to keep my attention. The question you have to ask yourself is if you can keep the story going. Too vanilla, and your readers might lose interest, too much too fast and you run the risk of "jumping the shark".
I look forward to seeing what you decide.
I like these characters as people. I want them to be happy and fuck a lot. Maybe a bit more actual romance and dating and flirting.
More romance. More detail eating her pussy. More detail all the way around. Good Story
Great story, Great Pace. Loved the character depth. It was an awesome read, from beginning to end. Thank you for sharing
more of this story!!! You have a way with words and telling the whole story can't wait for more.
This is absolutely a great story. I hope that there are many more chapters to come.
This was an impeccable piece of prose! Don't leave us waiting for the sequel!
Although the language does not flow evenly, the story does. It is like a guy from Newark talking to a guy from Brooklyn, sometimes the words do not fit together correctly. These people do, and if the story continues at this pace, this should be an excellent series.
Great story! I was a bit surprised by how fast she came on to him, would have helped the realism if there were more testing the waters from his end.
Great story beginning, good lead in and it didn't drag like so many do. Wonderful story line too.... can't wait to read the rest!!!
Easily one of the best stories I've read on here. I will be reading the rest of your work, as soon as my schedule permits it. Thanks for sharing your talent and imagination with us here at Literotica!
Great story. I enjoyed the back story and the hints throughout. Well developed. I enjoyed the way Kelly was comfortable with her body. Perfect imagery.
You could write stories all the way to the little one went off college or more.
Here's a perfect example of why posting comments under the Anonymous label isn't a good idea. This reader may not realize that I didn't stop writing.... In fact there are three more chapters, with more to come.... yet I can't even send them a message to let them know.
Oh well.
I enjoyed the entire story and enjoyed reading it. Not boring at all. Nicely written and made plenty of sense. It is nice to read a story that has feeling and not a lot of grunts and groans and every other word is profanity. Words come to mind like adult, educated, believable, realistic, sincere passion with responsibility and enjoyable. Keep up the good work and looking forward to more.
It's all here folks. This story is a pleasant departure from the usual error-riddled first draft masquerading as a completed work!!!!
Well done! You did a great job building the characters and actually having a quality story. As mentioned in the title, please make this a series, I'd love to follow it!
Excellent story. Reads like a New York Times bestseller. Congratulations.
Congratulations. The story is exciting from the start and your narrative voice is exactly right. I Would like to read more about Kelly and Todd and how their love deepens as it matures. Thanks for sharing.
A beautiful story about the mysterious and magical ways that serendipity comes into our lives. Simply Wonderful!
Exceptionally well done. Excellent characters, completely believable scenario and hot sex. What else could we ask for?
asianToy
Great story, well written, and highly believable. Hope this story continues even though it makes me wish I had kids and had found a sitter like her.
Very well written. I can't wait for pt2. Will they get together permanently I mean after all, a child of 2 does need a woman around, so does dad ( I think). Great story and easy to follow. Keep it up
When I was a kid I had a crush on the older teen guy that lived next door.His family moved away but I ran into him years later when I was all growned and filled out and we ended up dating.This story kind of reminded me of that crush and the fantasies I got to live out.
To be impressed with the changes in a young woman whom he'd known before, and not just physically.
To be able to get back to living life again, after such a tragedy.
Some things are just meant to be.
We should all be as fortunate.
5 Stars, of course.
Just the kind of story I like best. I would not be happy if they became swingers or some thing. I have been a widower just over a year now. I want to find what he has found. My problem is she just became engaged and doesn't love the man. I'll just have to wait.
You wrote such a sweet, loving story! I just loved it. Looking forward to the rest of the parts.
Thanks so much.
..... and this story as well as other works. Only would disagree with author's thing with huge breasts in all stories -- being an ass/leg man myself. Can certainly live with it but still think more than a handful is a waste.
Taking advantage of the opportunity and making it work can be wonderful.
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You're a very good writer. The situation and how you chose to write about it surely increase the romantic erotism for me. Looking for the next chapter in this story.
The pure joy with the lust, compassion, desire and caring - all in one story! You certainly wrote from the heart with this one! More please
Looking forward to reading the other chapters. I am in love with Kelly too. Went straight to my favorite authors list. I like the humor in it...made me laugh more than once.
I like that they're a little closer in age than the usual babysitter story. Very well written.
I agree with the first comment, liked the subtle age difference. Please continue with a part two.
You've set up a situation that desperately calls for chapter 2 at a minimum! I love that you have created 3 characters that are all lifelike (when out of bed), and the sex is top notch.
Please write more.
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More please you cannot just leave us hanging 1 maybe 2 or more. I have a good idea where this is going
Ron. AKA. cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
Great story well told, really good descriptions of sex and characters.
SCHWING-!!
LOVE this-thoroughly enjoyable characters, dialogue, doesn't seem at all forced, and know there's more than one following, and rated even higher...oh boy!
And doesn't hurt he's packing, AND she's built like the proverbial outbuilding made of earthen building materials...with sky-high libido at what...19? and she "..doesn't do guys her age anymore..."-!?
Loved this story. Loved how you give a brief overview to set the stage but then jumped into the actual story.
You have to keep going with this story! Very hot and great characters. 5 Stars!
""Todd, can I ask an extremely personal question?" she giggled, lifting her head to look at me. I nodded. "How many women have you been with?""
No, you cannot.
This is an easy fail for relationships, and should be an easy avoid for writers.
Think about it just a little bit:
Without lying (and here we have the woman stating that her list or sexual partners is exactly one lower than the man she just questioned, and that statement has a lot of doubt to go along with it), the partners are left with the following choices:
If they say a number that is perceived as being too low, they are a loser. If they say a number that is perceived as being too high, they are a slut. They have no idea what number is acceptable to their partner, so they have no way to guess how their number will be received, regardless of whether it is a true number or a lie.
I've been asked this question by a few lovers, and my response has always been the same as I expressed above:
If they say a number that is perceived as being too low, they are a loser. If they say a number that is perceived as being too high, they are a slut.
And so after that explanation I always refuse to state a number. My past is my past. Her past is her past. Any current lover who is unable to accept this explanation is welcome to move on.
Oberon
Cute story. I liked the way Kdlly knew Todd from a summer at the farm.
Thank you for a great story. I am grateful znd I am sure other readers are similarly grateful.
5 stars 🌟. You had me totally hooked. I only wish that I had thought of this plot line and wrote it. Lynn bonded well to Kelly. I hope that Todd marries her.
OH GOD, IT WAS GREAT! WHAT HAPPENS? MARRIAGE I HOPE? TAKE US TO THE HONEYMOON SCENE!
Nothing made my day more than seeing a 2nd part to this story. It was erotic and also made my heart swell, gives me hope to find something like this.
WONDERFUL. Lynn needs a mommy. Todd needs a loving wife and mother to Lynn and Kelly needs her lifelong friend for her husband and that little girl to call her mommy
So,what does Kelly do for a living?.She has a car pays rent,but where does the mone come from and how can she look after Lynn for the length of time he will be away.?
What did Kelly do for a job?She doesn't appear to work yet she runs a car and contributes to a flat share.
Romantic, sweet, and sexy. It really painted a great picture of a fantastic woman. A loving, friendly, naked woman holding your child is so hot.
Nice writing, and from a non-misogynistic perspective, unlike many stories on this site. The car-accident part is kind of cliché and lazy, everything else is the 5* i'm rating this.. tx
I'm reading this for around the 5th time. It's always a fun read. Thanks