All Comments on 'On the Beach'

... and I liked it a lot. Nice job.

Finally, one of your stories that I didn't care for at all. This is just a short vignette about geriatric cheating. Kept looking for the humor, didn't find any.

. . . I didn’t finish the story, but it’s just a vignette, a quick fantasy, and I ended it where I wanted. During the writing of this, I contemplated an ending in which Sonya walked back down the beach the next night, and discovered that Michael had pulled up stakes, abandoned his beach rental and headed back home, never to be seen by her again, but chose to put that as a comment rather than as part of the story.

Now i know what happens to all of the young cheating slut wives in these lw stories. They just grow older but remain cheating sluts.

If not for the cheating this would be a nice romance and very well in mature.

Not sure why you chose to have a 60 something wife cheat just because her husband watches football. Oh, and now she will do anal? At least you didnt throw in the obligatory huge monster cock or make him black.

Sonya's husband had decided it was "cheaper to keep her", after catching his wife cheating a few years earlier. At his age, getting a divorce was just too much hassle... and the current situation suited him just fine.

They hadn't slept together in years, but she still cooked and cleaned for him, so he'd started thinking of her as the housemaid. He wasn't crazy enough to fuck Sonya, even using a condom... not with all the STDs the old slut had picked up.

Fortunately, the nice young blonde in apartment 4b cleaned his pipes twice a week in exchange for free rent. He'd met her perky BFF earlier that afternoon, the bright-eyed brunette giving him a coy smile as he showed her around apartment 4c. Retiring near the beach and buying an apartment complex had been Sonya's best idea ever!

Hey, we old people can have fantasies too!

This vignette wasn’t meant to be anything serious, just a quick little fantasy. There’s no particular moral to the story, unless it’s don’t neglect your wife.

...fortunately, I was WITH my wife waiting for Dorian in West Palm Beach.

Naughty fun little interlude. I smiled. Thanks

typical the only rough part of the story was the verse if you are a Broncos supporter,

great vignette Reed liked it a lot.

I'm hoping she never went home and the Avon lady nextdoor moved in with her husband.

Horny old dude lays in wait behind sand dune in the darkness.

Accosts aged woman, surprising her in the darkness.

He makes inappropriate sexual remarks and propositions her, then jumps on her and has his way with her. Then he takes her into his nearby shack and sodomized her.

Husband later tells police, "I didn't hear anything, too busy watching the Broncos lose."

Good short story.

hope there is apart 2

My dick and my testosterone have been ruling my life since my preteen years. I was hoping that at least when I'm in my 60's I can start getting control back over my life once again.

Fucking depressing!!!

Nice to see REAL characters. Or maybe you just forgot to mention she is a former supermodel and he an emeritus navy seal. Bronco Bob consults with CIA security between rounds of golf and cribbage. Well done.

Buck the Broncos. Or better yet their fan's wives.

Nice little tale, Reed. I'm sure you were not thinking of the 'Times Best Seller List' when you wrote it, but from some of the comments I'm afraid many readers may have expected prize winning fiction, or at the very least a 'How to have a SUCCESSFUL MARRIAGE' book, all for free.

Folks, Reed wrote this thing for fun--just an attempt to bring a smile to a otherwise dreary day. It's F.I.C.T.I.O.N. Nothing happens in this little slice of the world that Reed didn't say happened--no STD, no divorce, no nothing! And no, this world is nothing like real life, but what the heck? We face real life most hours of our day; it's nice to escape for just a few minutes. Thanks Reed. cd

Just a few short days ago (9-10-19), the Raiders beat the Broncos 24-16.

Sand and salt just doesn't wipe off your hands very easily

It really happens like that sometimes. Thanks for sharing.

Cleaning sand out of your vagina, not so much.

Not that I have a vagina.

KB

Nuff said. Thanks for writing!

Disgusting! No story where Broncos lose to the Clark County Raiders is worth any more than a 3. Those are the rules.

R.

The date and results of the game are real. Carolina Beach is real, and correctly described. Even the tide and the phase of the moon are accurate.

Good story, but the comments, as they so often are, are more entertaining than the story itself. ReedRichards, thanks for your stories. They are always interesting and the varied, good and bad, comments prove that. Tanglosax

I liked it - five stars

I am amused by the comments that insist on a bad ending for Sonya - even going so far as imagining her husband entertaining himself with some fresh young stuff - if this was a different category and Sonya was a widow it would have gotten the 4.50+ it deserves

There now. Finishing the story wasn’t too bad, was it?

Two piece of shit people