All Comments on 'Once Upon a Fantasy Ch. 15-16'

very nice story. Well written, great characters, stable plot line. Just a good feeling story. And very real. Thanks for sharing....

would have liked to read more.

I really enjoyed these chapters

Sorry to see “Once Upon a Fantasy” end, but you set the stage for life to continue unencumbered. Another great read. I hope you’ll keep them coming and again, thank you.

My guess is that after her first affair, she figured Norm would find out and dump her so she had to find someone else to go to when it all fell apart. She didn't choose wisely.

As usual, another great story!

Boyd Percy

We still don't have the answer to why Andrea went off hunting for strange. As Norm found out, Kurt wasn't her first....

Still a fine novella with some sweet, loving sex scenes with Norm & Kim. May their family continue to grow and their lives be filled with love and joy.

I could not get enough of this story... well written, great plot

I have liked your other work much more than this one. It is good but does not rate the normal 5 stars that I like to give your work. Sorry just did not gel with me this time.

“I couldn't let her become abused or destitute” - How destitute is she going to be? Won’t she be getting alimony from Kurt?

“I would continue the monthly profit-share payments to her” - Nitpick; doesn’t he mean restart, since they would have stopped when she married Kurt?

Thanks for the offering.

Totally fantastic. Thank you.

Keep writting.

as usual with your stories a good strong plot line

I totally enjoyed it - please keep writing

Interesting characters which were well developed. Good plotline tieing it around

a store. As usual the details of the operation and its development over the years held me focused on the story.

no she would not get alimony from someone who is in jail/prison.

We still don't know why she cheated

An enjoyable story, but Andrea needed fleshing out a bit more. I'm guessing she had the affair through boredom? She was a housewife and the kids were getting older. After she had the first affair, she probably got off on the excitement of doing something illicit, but it would have been nice to hear it from her.

The story was good but way to long - about 3-4 chapters too long - so long that I found myself keyword reading paragraphs to keep the story moving. I've read a number C2's stories and I find them overly verbose to the point of boring the reader. (And I'm not the typical L-lecher I do not read for the sex, as I find 'less is more'.)

C2's endings just do not tie up existing story sub-plots / loose-ends.

Like how many years in prison did Kurt get for the TWO assaults? Did Andrea divorce Kurt's ass while he was doing time? Did Kurt become a prison bitch?

Being that Norm owned this store that supplied the construction industry - he had connections. Why didn't he (or Walter) arrange for Kurt to get some hurt? Norm might be kind heart'ed but there is a line that Kurt went way over. In such a small community even the local law enforcement look after good people (that gave special blue deals) remember Lou was dating a Detective.

Was there friction/resentment/jealousy between Andrea and Kim after the marriage adding to this is Kim by extension now became Norm's co-partner/boss?

The full reason for Andrea's (at least twice) cheating never really came out.

How many laps was Norm swimming with the new pool (for therapy)? Did they ever christen the hot tub with Kim wearing her honeymoon bikini? So many lil things that could have made the story so much richer were left inside the keyboard.

Your family values are showing quite strong in this chapter. Bravo to you. My only problem is with the ex. She was guilty of carrying on at least 2 affairs that he knew of. Had no problems with destroying her family, leaving the kids etc. I could understand a midlife crisis of sorts, but none of that really explained her actions. Your explanation of her motives where shaky at best.

Have you not heard the song "He ain't heavy, he's my brother"? Andrea was his wife and the children's mother..that counts for something. Too bad it was lost on the Snarks.

First, she needs a full medical checkup in case hormone changes started affecting her mental processes. It's a very real thing that happens at key points in humans' lives: hormones raging in our youth, during pregnancy, post-partum, later in middle years, pre-menopausal (and male variation), another burst 15 to 20 years later -- challenging but true. Follow up with psych eval and therapy. Her ex had it right when he said that she went from one bad decision to another, not much thinking involved.

How did she get to having affairs?

We are told that he was bothered a great deal by what he did wrong to lose her. Surely, after all he did for her he could ask her for an explanation. As a woman, she might well give him a sanitized version that minimized her responsibility, but she'd give him something.

All we get is a hint that she was submissive to the asshole. Okay, how the hell did that happen?

I see the store getting a little heavy in the employment of family. A nice statement would be in Brandon getting the training, then opening in another location; this giving opportunity to spread the business to all of the family. While I usually am opposed to nepotism, this case justifies it.

What a wonderful story about deceit, love and family. I was amazed how forgiving Kurt was to Andrea, not many men would be that kind. I was glad to see that the emerging family found a happily ever after. Well written story with great characters. Another great Coaster2 tale, well done, 5 stars

It didn't take me long to get caught up into it. Never really did discover why Andrea wanted to cheat. Maybe I missed it. Thanks for making me believe that this really happened. That's what makes you a great writer. ....SlickM

It was goood story, touching in parts and positive feels in others. That said it was maybe a bit placid and the mains were a bit too benign(for my taste).

Another Five Star story from the master.

Well done, Coaster2.

We miss you.

Excellent story. I really enjoyed it. Thanks

Ignore the snarky remarks. I just say, Thank YOU

3 stars and it was way too convoluted for my liking.

Liked it but felt alil long.. Glad this was not a RAAC and that he got his happy ending which is always a plus when the spouse gets cheated on.