All Comments on 'One Summer Night'

The story line for this series is likeable but your spelling and grammar are really quite poor and sentence construction is execrable in many paragraphs.

If you don't want to use an editor, at least read through what you have written and try to see it from a reader's perspective. You will discover more of your errors which will make our enjoyment of your story so much greater.

.... the content and creativity of the work is exceptional. You presentation of the ambiance of scene, the flow of the events, the power of the writing was highly enjoyable. The reader can do self editing during the reading but cannot create. If the story has silly characters, no detail or an unrealistic plot, then perfect grammar won't save it. I don't know if this is a one-off or additional chapters are planned I will gladly read them! 5* for my vote.

Thanks for the comments and the point about the grammar/editing is accurate. Publishing the stories has helped - a few people volunteered to help with the grammar/editing, based on reading the stories. This is great and I welcome it! In contrast - a post asking the same in the Editor Forum or trying to contact a VE did not result in a positive contact (bare 1). So - to be continued and I hope it will result in a better reader-experience. Gr.Sailorsix

Please don't stop, this tale has so many possibilities.

I have read all 4, now 5. Please continue. Would love to see follow up chapters

You paint such lovely pictures with words, and from the female perspective, too. We are swept up and carried along in the loving scene you've created. Please keep writing!

I meant to give you 5 *'s, but my fat finger pushed the wrong damn button! I loved this story. Please keep writing, I plan on following your stories!!

You write in a fabulously erotic manner.

Never mind any linguistic errors -- as a non-English native speaker myself, I'm still impressed. But I can understand and accept that for native speakers lots of errors and deviances distract from the erotic flow, The most important factors, though, is content and style -- and there you excel.

However, you regrettably manage to put into your stories also some content errors like in this one:

"A child that had blossomed into a stunning, tall young girl of nineteen years old, four years between me and her and five years between her and Jasper." AND

"He hadn't protested when I, as his older and responsible sister, had suggested that I would drive us home."

Contrary to linguistic errors that just tells us something about the skill level of the author, (and may be irritating), such content errors are of a more fundamental character because they threaten the credibility of the story. A good author, like yourself, has the ability to make the reader live into the story -- to some extent the story becomes REAL to the reader -- it feels like it is happening -- or at least like it could be or have been happening to the reader. Encountering content errors, though, such reader's illusion gets broken -- you are as a reader reminded that the story is not real, it's made up, FAKE,

So, have somebody else --even if they're not jn command of perfect English -- read through stories before posting..

Point taken. No excuse there.

(Though the story was read and edited by someone else.)

Thanks for taking the time to comment!

Sailorsix