by nighttimestories
Love your story. You are building to one hell of a climax, with lots of fun along the way.
This "writer" doesn't have one -- an imagination, that is. Every scene, every sentence, every thought in this "story" has appeared in the hundreds of other "vacation" stories on this website. I gave this a "zero" above simply because there are no negative numbers on the scale.
Great story - wonderful story line to build tension - and then ending it with anal - of course! Nicely done.