by m_storyman_x
Only one thing (other than stamina) might get in the way of reality--they would need to wear life vests...
I love this series of stories. You do a nice job mixing in enough details about the outdoors to set the scene and give the reader a strong sense of the narrator's comfort in these outdoor settings. That confidence is clearly sexy to all of these women, and your stories are stronger because the reader gets to see it too.
My favorite thing in your writing is your ability to describe the seduction of a reluctant (or at least hesitant) man without reducing that man to a pathetic weakling. It lends itself to both richer characterization and some very hot scenes. I actually thought you did that better in the earlier chapters of this sequence with the hiking chapters, and in other stories like Wiring Problems--this story really jumped right into the sex, the women were a little too forward and self-assured to be believable.
Tina was the most interesting character in this story since she exhibited some reluctance, she required some buildup (Teresa may have been shy but she was willing to masturbate in public from the get-go). Your ability to have women lead the action but still throw up enough obstacles for both women & man that teasing, build-up, and even coincidence is required--that's what makes you one of my favorite authors on this site.
do please work on the editing. A desert is a geographical area with very little moisture. A dessert is a treat for after meals. Not the same thing, and while pussy makes a great dessert, referring to it as a desert could get you in serious trouble.
This was the first story of yours that I didn't like the guy in, I mean seriously he was mad and spun out his tires and spun the car out. I thought it seemed that he was quite childish.
It is unfortunate for your readers that you leave so many stories, like this one, unfinished and hanging. You are an amazing writer!! I just wish you would stop producing half finished stories and finalize some of your older ones.