All Comments on 'Owen Becomes a Man'

There is only one minor thing and its only my opinion,take longer over the sex scenes,describe the act of intercourse more.

I loved this! Well written and very exzciting! Great work!

I loved this! Well written and very exzciting! Great work!

This story needs another chapter or two. I think that sometime in the next chapter. You should have the sister get pregnate, because unless the pills are much stronger in the UK women are not protected from pregnatcy for atleast a month, as the pill needs to build up the woman's hormone levels. So I think that the Mom would know this as it is in all that papers that you get when you start taking the pill, that she wants a Grandbaby from both kids at once.

I loved your story and believed most of it to be true . If you've got room for 1 more I'll be there in a flash . Great story .

What a pleasure to read a story with some build up to it for a change , even though you could see where the story was leading , it was well written and even better thought out please continue this story with other chapters because i as a fellow brit will read them ,well done Nickola

I hope you will carry on with owen and his mother and sister. I do believe you should have owen nocking up his sister and them doing more together as a threesome.

This is a very good written story but the love scene is a little shy in discription.

First, a very important point -- you can buy a National Lottery ticket at 16, not 18 :-)

I think this is OK, but a bit self-consciously written, perhaps. You seem to be thinking "I am writing a story", instead of just talking to the reader naturally. I would try to avoid descriptions about 5'6" and 154 lbs., etc -- you may think this adds authenticity, but it actually has the opposite effect. Better to pick on some personal detail or other to make the reader able to get a real sense of the person.

This is from a british author,this site could do with many more,the story is very erotic and very believable.In fact I know a family where this is reality and all three of them are very happy. I hope you write more chapters there is plenty of scope and you certainly have the talent.

This is one of my favorites! I love the buildup and the lust of it all. Of course I had a reaction that needed to be taken care of after but I asked for it by reading your story! I would like to know more of the background for your story too.

Your ability to describe your feelings and the action so the reader (me) can almost feel like I watched it all happen is great! Thanks.

Please write more stories.

Loved the build up and the details you put in to show they were a loving family. Would like a bit more detail in the love scenes but leaving some things to the imagination is good too.

This was an amazing story, one of the best I've ever read. I think that a picture of owen's mom in the black dress and them "fucking" would have made this a little steamier. Great job, a sequal with Owen and his sister or a threesome would be great.

I enjoyed reading this story and was hard for most of it. I hope we get to read of Owen fucking Chloe while she wears her school uniform or mum and Chloe enjoying exploring each others bodies while the two of them with Owen would be good. I have one complaint though and that is the glossing over of details when they have sex.

One of the best. Simple,clear and straight forward. Not clustered with exxagerations. Though one knows where the story was going,it was sheer delight. The Britishness comes out loud and clear and enhance the story.Well done.

In a way, you have to feel sorry for Owen -- he probably thinks he did this all on his own and never realized he was a pawn in the game and never stood a chance! I hope Nicola Nickerless posts again. Soon!

You Wrote: "Owen, my son, and his twin sister, Chloe, have recently turned eighteen and will both be going to Teacher Training College in September, so they are still at school at present, as is Owen's girl-friend, although there seems nothing serious there as yet -- they simply go out together when it suits them both, and it is expected to fizzle out when he goes to University." --- HOLY SHIT!! That has to be the largest run-on sentence I've ever tried to parse out. Do you actualy think like this? If so, you NEED to know that most folks DON'T! How many readers did you lose after the fifth comma? God alone knows and the real pity is that it turned out to be a very good storyline. Try this: read your MS out loud to yourself; if it stumbles, then it's a run-on. Best of luck to you, you do have talent.

Hot story, written by a hot woman. More please. Thanks for using British English correctly! You're an inspiration to budding writers everywhere. Andrewxx

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I enjoyed the story greatly but I enjoyed even more the ability of the author to write the Queen's english.....not always evident on this site. Keep going and let's have more from your sexy mind, Knickerless!!!!

Wow! I wish you had been my mum when I was younger! Tom x

Love reading about sons giving pleasure to their mothers. Mom will have a nice hard cock to keep her company for a long time if she really presses her son for commitment to only her. Thanks for the good story....Rich

A good story with good back ground to make the characters believable. Well done and thanks for the post.

This is a wonderful story and with a bit of editing could have been so much better. Oh, how I wish I would have had the opportunity to have edited it. Nevertheless, a wicked imagination makes for a hot story, and nothing is hotter than a mother allowing her son to ease down between her legs and push himself in. It is so exciting when she wraps her legs around him then begins to ease her hips to him in a slow rhythm. He is usually young and inexperienced, but it doesn't take him long to understand what she wants. A very sweet story. Thank you. Gayle

Good story, Owen's a very lucky boy to have such a hot milf for a mother, he couldn't have had a better first fuck than his slutty mum. The icing on the cake is he gets to fuck his slut sister too, I'm so fucking jealous!

This is not a run-on sentence: "Owen, my son, and his twin sister, Chloe, have recently turned eighteen and will both be going to Teacher Training College in September, so they are still at school at present, as is Owen's girl-friend, although there seems nothing serious there as yet -- they simply go out together when it suits them both, and it is expected to fizzle out when he goes to University."

The anonymous responder who made this comment obviously enjoys a diet restricted to simple sentences and that is OK; however, while a simple sentence is useful in altering the rhythm of a piece of writing that contains complex and compound sentences, and by so doing conjures a sense of freshness in the reader, long, complicated sentences like yours quoted above manage to convey a delightful abundance of information that enables one to get the setting and background information sorted out quickly in one's mind before settling into the world of the story in order to lose oneself in the sexually charged atmosphere that will eventually be relieved by a complete surrender, on the part of the main characters, to the carnal forces this author is recreating for the enjoyment of her readers. Your original sentence is grammatically flawless.

I enjoy the brevity of your sex scenes—another cause for complaint by some of your admirers. The joy that I derive from your stories is a result of the sexually charged atmosphere that you create. By the time flesh meets flesh in an all-out fuck I have been in a state of arousal for so long it is a relief to arrive at the climax without further delay. Long drawn out anatomical detail would just be boring at that point. The sensuality and intense heat is well established and thoroughly enjoyed long before the fucking starts.

Thank you for sharing your private thoughts, fantasies and experiences. You've lovingly captured a favorite fantasy of mine and I was thrilled reading it. Well done!

Fucking hot story Nicola, love it when a slutty mum gives in to her cunts desires and fucks her hung son! Well written and fucking horny!!

xx Ken

What a deliciously cock-hardening story. Mum's dirty thoughts about Owen are erotically expressed, and I love the hint that she's going to give Damian some tuition to make sure he's giving Chloe a proper fucking!

Very well written, capturing a time of closeness. Please write more

LET US HEAR MORE OF THERE NEW ADVENTURES, NOW THAT ALL HAVE BECOME LOVERS. I LIKED THIS STORY. YOU ARE ANOTHER ONE WITH A GREAT SKILL WHO STOPS WRITING. AFTER ONLY A FEW STORIES. IT'S BEEN FIVE YEARS SINCE YOUR LAST POSTING, PLEASE COME BACK, WE NEED WRITERS LIKE YOU. I'AM SURE YOU WILL HAVE A GREAT FOLLOWING. SO WITH PEN IN HAND PLEASE COME BACK TO US........ A WOULD BE FAN........... LAROC OF AGES

The only drawback is that it'll make him impatient with inferior cunts. After all, when a boy's stiff young prick is accustomed to his own mother's mommy-hole, that wonderful hole between his mother's legs that he came into the world from, he won't be satisfied with any other twat. Why blow his balls up any other slit, when his mommy's twat is perfectly suited for all the big doses of creamy sperm his young balls are constantly producing? Up his own mother's cunt is where a boy's rich warm semen belongs.

I do like to see writers using different words and coming to the same conclusion, we are all dirty minded b's

The interchange between English and American subtleties is such a good intellectual exercise.

Keep up the good work with your own language.

What an excellent, well written story. I enjoyed this very much, and I note there's plenty of room for follow-up chapters. Good work, thank you.

Well paced, no grammar errors, excellent vocabulary usage, believable description of clothing and locations. Very well done.

A really well told and erotic story x Look forward to reading more from your talented mind x

I usually like stories with a British flair, but not this time. Is 6'154# considered "big and strapping"?

"That has to be the largest run-on sentence I've ever tried to parse out"

It's not a run-on sentence. It's certainly too long to avoid awkwardness, and it ought to be shortened, but the punctuation is perfectly logical.

BTW I guess we can assume that you meant "parse".

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