by JukeboxEMCSA
I gave it a good rating because I grew up when the Cure was first making a splash on the scene, and anything that mock's Robert Smith is okay with me. Favorite T-shirt: "Meat is Murder...tasty, tasty murder." On a slightly different note, this story was more erotic than many of your current efforts, but that may just be genre fatigue on my part, not really being big into hypno-fetish.
It was ok but there should have been more details on the sex part.
This is one of the best stories I've seen. The sparcity of detail in the sex action makes it! Any more and it would have lost its appeal. For me anyway.
Mm, delicious. Rachel went from a bleach-blonde bitch to a goth rug-muncher from a bit of facepaint. This story really didn't need that much sex, the brainwashing and conversion were pretty hot on their own.
As others have said, this was a great piece that has me wanting much more of this despite the lack of overt sex, something that was a great decision on your part.
need to continue with the story as they turn others including rachel's friend keep it coming please
Loved this story. I read it on the Erotic Mind Control Story Archives, and I love seeing it here as well. Now, time to look into continuing this tale. Find another girl, and turn her into one as well. Have a lesbian Goth trio!
i can never decide what it is about mind control that gets me off- the one who is controlling or the one who is controlled! both!
Interesting story, I like how Rachel is slowly changed from a " bleach-blonde bimbo" as you put it into a goth girl, changing both her mental and physical condition. Not only that but you left it open for a potential sequel where they go after the birthday-girl, something I wouldn't mind reading if you have some time.
I would love a sequel to this either were they get the birthday girl or just them being lovers
I have read this entry at least three times. It gets better each time. I like the fact that you donβt do sequels very often. This perfectly stands alone, allowing the reader to imagine any number of possible scenarios. That is part of your genius.