All Comments on 'Painting the Bathroom'

This work has been posted on here before by another author.

story but still better then the sickos stories.

glad that she stuck to her guns, she only wanted her husband but his dumb ass was to fucked to see ut. 5 stars

I realy love it when some pussy blows his brains out for being a dumb ass. I love it when people write stories that sound like they could realy happen. Death happens all the time, wether it's natural causes or by someones hand. So for all the TURN THE OTHER CHEEK people that don't realize that these stories are for entertainment, and are NOT a guidline on how to handle real life. Srew you. Damn good story. Gave it five stars. Always nice to read about death destruction and mayhem every once in a while, helps keep things fresh.

and closure she wanted and was successful. TK U MLJ LV NV

whats the point?

Did ben think that even though they were divorced for over a year that the wife would 1) NEVER remarry and 2) NEVER had kids?

if not then whast the big deal?

Is the author ACTUALLY arguing that whenever a divorced spouse remarries and has kids that the other ex spouse is somehow traumuatzied and should kill themselves? or often thinks about killing themselves..?

Did ben ever try an contact the wife? did Ben ever try and talk to the wife's parents ?

The BEN character comes across as strong good looking man that has great sex skills and has a kinky side to him. Why is guy like that sitting alone for over a year and NOT moving on? he has to know there are a lot of hot women would love to have him in their bed.

a pretty dumb story

She claims to be in this amazing loving relationship with a wonderful husband but is inhumanly cruel to her ex, albeit her ex was a deeply flawed person. People are who they are. She would not be such a cruel bitch and be able to have this wonderful marriage. How long does this marriage last once hubby sees what a vindictive cruel harpy she is?If she is like this to her ex, you know she is a vicious bitch to present hubby. None of it makes sense but this is loving wives.

I choose a better, more consistent ending. She is cruel to him. He sits at home and wanks his pud in ectasy at her viciousness, pays women to beat him, and later becomes an internet sensation for writing deranged stories about Jacksonville, land of 48DD chested women on every corner with that are a cross between Hanibal Lecter and porn stars.

I don't know why she felt bad over sending the letter to good ole Ben. Yes, he apparently took it badly, but then again he must have figured out that she took being offered to another man rather badly. I suppose she felt it was mean to add the picture, but if he had contacted her Mother and he most likely did, he would have known she was married with a daughter from the new marriage.

The author could have used any number of devices to deliver the message to the former husband and the conclusion would have been equally as acceptable. All in all a nicely written short story about lack of communication in a marriage and one party moving on while the other resided in an empty house with the ghosts of his marriage.

If I could offer one criticism, it would be that the newspaper article would not have been nearly as descriptive, as the police would never release all those details There would never be any comment about blood on the walls, or it being a macabre scene. A nice touch, but just a bit over the top.

Five stars.

Read this a year or so ago, but can't remember the authors name. It was just as bad then as it is now.

is that he never finished the bathroom.

I was the guy in the shower!

tom anon

He wanted her to be a cheating wife. She wants to be faithful. She leaves and finds happiness. He blows his brains out.

If the genders had been reversed, HIV would have loved it. But there's just no fun in faithful wives and asshole husbands, is there?

guess she's happy now

he fucked up, and she made sure he paid

hope her second husband doesn't do anything stupid

Good story, a sad story of a man that did not talk to his wife about his sexual kink. It's nice to have a wife with brains and one that isn't a slut, thanks for the story, 5 stars all the way. Keep the stories coming.

And just so readers know look at the writers profile page he states what his old username used to be.

My main issue is that she broke her promise to contact him in a few days. Since she retained her anger for over three years, that contact would not be likely to change anything.

I agree with those who doubt that Old Hubby would have offed himself because of the letter. It is unlikely his ties to her were as deep as here's were to him. If he had become a recluse pining away for a lost love, he would have lost his job AND the house years before...without her salary, it is unlikely he could have retained the house in any event.

Also, there was no gun available during the assault! Either he bought a pistol sometime shortly after she left, or after he got the letter...either is implausible.

VERY unlikely she would include New Hubby in the photo. Maybe herself, probably not (since she wouldn't want him to notice any changes in her appearance)!

All in all, a very powerful tale! 5*

Not sure what the author's intention is,

Are we supposed to feel sorry for Ben? I don't. He tried to force something on his wife without her approval. That's a big problem. She left the moron. So she is still pissed and writes him a letter to blow off steam. It wasn't even that nasty. In her opinion, Ben has a problem. The fact that he committed suicide shows she was right. A stable person doesn't commit suicide because his ex tells him off.

It's too bad Ben was such a screwup.

What's with all these repostings. Write something new or fuck off. 2*

Pointer for you: Pick a tense and STAY WITH IT! Flopping between tenses is just stupidity.

Also, no newspaper article would ever read like that.

Get an editor, at least.

If he thought of her as a piece of meat as she says then why would he kill himself and if she really loved him she would have talked it out, went to therapy, and maybe worked it out. Im not sure I would believe that either one of them truely loved the other.

My perception is that for some reason, stories told from the woman’s point of view, where she is the wronged party; don’t go over as well with the audience as those with male victims.

In this story I succumbed to an old prejudice. The wife, having moved on from the marriage just could not let it go. I first thought, what a typical woman.

Years later she still had to write a letter whose purpose escaped me. That act showed she needed counseling as well as that idiot first husband. She owed the fool no separate talk, save that which was said when she left. The divorce seemed entirely justifiable. But to rub salt into an old wound years later was cruel and violated some implied statute of limitations for such outrage.

Even so, I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It raised a number of issues and that’s what I expect from a good story.

Gues the dunbass fucked up big time

writer should bendover and take it like a man. To wordy and just plain crap.

Still a good read. Thanks for sharing.

With a fitting ending.

Stop micro-analyzing the shit out of it and enjoy it for what it is.

well done. sharp and crisp - not too long and to the point. it was good she sent the letter - and better he offed himself. 5X5 liked two out of three of your stories that is batting 660 - pretty good average.

...simply for the message about how she perceived his fantasy. However she owed her marriage much and ran.Death should ensue.

x_JohnDoe_x have a story, where the main character's Second Chance was a willing cuckold's young wife, who abandoned and divorced her first husband for the main character. Difference is to this story they had 2 children............

This one's a 5, and I loved it!

She was succesfull and she found a Second Chance. However the letter was a stupid steps, to injury sombody years later is mistake. The revenge is work at once well and later only the Romantic Revence could work. To rub salt in the scar is cruelty and it is not Romantic Revenge. The Author wrote the main character POV, who told that, her action with the letter was evil action, according to the main character as well. She has selfknowledge. I do not like suicide, because it is a stupid step and rarly it gives any solution and the survivels will move on their lfe. The exwife will forget her evil action with a second children.

BTW Generaly that persons who attempts suicide that suffers from deep depression and the modern serotonin level increasing antidepressants decreased the suicide problem. He did not detect he was depressed seriously and he avoided the physiciants...........and the modern antidepressants.

BTW 5 stars story. I think a story is not only good, if the characters are 100% sound people who do total exact steps in the stories. The stories may be good if the main characters make smaller mistakes in the stories. Some posters would like Platon's ideas for the characters and for the authors and the smaller character mistake does not forgive to the Authors. Japanes society wishes from the children the hard learning in the school from the youth. The "result" is the high level children suicide......

I think the 100% sound characters from the Authors as a requirements from the readers is similar as the Japan sociaty's requiremants.........

We never got to know what was in Ben's head. At first I thought they might have been related. Look alike cousins maybe and they were switching off but that was not the case. A ch. 2 from Ben's standpoint might clear things up. We'll see...

In real life the wife would have been replaced in three months with some woman more amendable to Ben's dicey kink. Say what you like - the guy was good looking , owned his own home, worked hard & made excellent money . Those are desirable qualities to posses in today's economically uncertain times.

" men have died & worms have eaten them but not for love" - Rosalind : ' As You Like It ".

If somebody's brain works on low serotonin level he/she will be on deep depression and only the modern antidepressant medicines will help him/her. At a young man the family doctor will not recognize a deep depression easily, so against good job he will not find a second chance. (According to the story he got suicide and this is almost 100% sure he was ill with deep depression. The deep depression is serious illness and the root couse of the 90% of the suicide.)

Somebody will not be deep depression for his/her all life, because his/her brain works with high serotonin level, but others will have potential for deep depression in his/her older years. Sometime a traumatic event can accelerate the low serotonin level switch in the brain at younger ages and the family doctors will not recognize well at a young male the deep depression. A young deep depression ill patient will be more dangerous for him/herself as a slower older do. So it may be he was ill and a deep depression will not help to find a newer girlfriend, but the (young) patient could work at his/her job.

The modern antidepressant medicines could prevent this suicide...........................

A sad story but a story with a purpose. Ben did not know Sara well enough to marry her. He certainly wasn't mature enough to be in an adult relationship. Some might say Sara should have spoken to Ben but given the situation the outcome would have been the same. Ben stayed in the incomplete home waiting for Sara to return to him. When she moved on he could not take it. Sara married a pretty boy not a man. How, a husband can invite a total stranger into his home and leave her with him naked makes no sense. I am surprised she did not have him charged with attempted rape. What challenges credibilty is that he did not figure out how much he hurt her.

You are engaged in self diagnosis. Unintelligible to the general public. Just to your cadre of fellow psychobabblers do you speak.

That was the bit where it became unnecessarily vengeful.

Interesting name - Ben Dover. That, along with Phil McCavity, are often used as derogatory terms for gay males.

it was a great story and husband was a fucker. you did the characters well.

Plus...my take was that wife considered him a pretty toyboy from the beginning. Like...how dare the wimpy man pick out another man for her without her permission! Oh well...whatever. Like Harry said... What does a wimp cuck do when his Dom wife dumps him for good? Hmmmm?

Keep writing dude, got some good story ideas....bill

She regrets the letter OK I get that but it was not that bad - he was what she said and did what she said so why would that cause him to kill himself - it did not -

He killed himself because he was a half assed man with a shitty self image who could not cope with his own life and actions - she had finally given him permission to leave since there was no way he would ever get her back - so he did.

She could not have known how he would react.

Perfect ending the sick bastard got what all freaks deserve

Stopped reading when I saw you named the guy Ben Dover. What, are you in middle school?!!

She only did one thing I disagree with. The letter. I agree with her in writing it. I agree with her in what she said in it. I agree with her in sending it. What I disagree with is her regretting it! In her regret, she allows her loser, wimp, piece of shit ex husband win. His suicide allowed him to pass his guilt onto her, and the only way to combat that, is to piss on his grave, and throw a party! Men that get off by watching other men fuck their wives are defective and deficient, they are not normal, despite what they would have you believe.

Great story, well written. Pathetic names ruined it for me. Also that was just an incredibly stupid ending. The first husband was a selfish bastard and would never have killed himself and sending that photo was unrealistic. She wanted closure but the photo of her child was too precious to share with a pervert ex husband. You need to consider your plot much more carefully. I meant to give you three stars but a quirk of the keyboard prevented it.....

Sara is amazing and Ben is a sick fuck.....I for one am glad the freak blew his brains out and suggest that all other want to be cuckies do the same.

You really drew in this reader, capturing my attention and keeping me anxious for the climactic conclusion. Nicely done, very enjoyable story.

Thank you and please keep writing!

Too bad for poor Ben, NO means NO, Great ending

Didn't see that one coming. 5 star story telling.

This woman did the right thing by getting away from the wacko she was married to. Read a lot of stories like this from the man's point of view with a cheating wife but very few from the woman's point-of-view. This woman had her act together and was smart enough to leave. Thank you for a very thought provoking story.

Ben shot himself. So what? Too bad.

He got what he deserved,

This is in fact a sex story website. You know...sexual tones, exciting scenes and themes. Your story belongs in the non-erotic section

Ben was an idiot to the end. He should have learned from his stupidity and moved on. Do better next time. But no he was selfish to the end. Suicide can be a very selfish act, punishing everyone left behind with sorrow.

Sara should put it behind her quickly and just focus on her family and not the dead idiot.

While it might be construed as being vengeful by sending that letter Sara had no way of knowing he was unstable enough to kill himself. That is not her fault. Ben needed to know what he fucked up by not listening to her when she said no. He was a coward through and through and he did the only thing cowards do when they don't want to face their issues head-on.

Called being in love and knowing you well and truly fucked it all up for kinky sex she repeatedly told you she would not do.

As for handsome, rich, great in sack but still alone after number of years....incomprehensible to you.

Story is Frank Sinatra went into depression after losing love of his life Ava Gardner...given she supposedly said when he married Mia Farrow, that she always knew Frank wanted a boy with tits obviously blue eyes did something she found incredibly repugnant.

I dare say Frank could have easily filled his bed but instead went into funk...

Look at it this way harry...imagine you lose your right hanf...you still have left but you just cannot bring yourself off

Your anon supporter might lend you his...

Lewdslummydoodoo can't help you...he needs one for magnifying glass and other for coated tweezers...what would he know about good looking guy with sex skills-oops forgot he has those binoculars

WRITING!!!

Loved wife thought hubby stupid

But I can empathize with his depression.

As college sophmore I had 5' 11'' inch girlfriend. Small town ranch girl who was freshman - perfectly toned 138 lbs from bucking bales...great looking but more important had that IT FACTOR. She was virgin, I went slow but loved using my lips and tongue on her as she eagerly let me. Met at beer party did not think I was in her league but was asked to get her home safely by mutual friend. We had been talking for a bit when she turned and told me ''You can kiss me if you want'' I wanted spent night in bed cuddling.

Me-I was couple inches shorter but had great physique good looks smart and charming and numerous girls had told their friends I was best kisser they ever knew

More than a little shy though.

For next month called her every night took long walks on campus but was afraid to ask her out. First date hayride spent hours making out ended up in dorm room where I tasted her telling her she could trust me and while she was naked I remained dressed.

Absolutely no breasts...on her back nothing to cup but nipples i slid fingers around. Months later she told me I could fuck her if I wanted...pregancy scare led to pills led to C cups and oh what a beautiful set of tanlines.

When first meeting her roommate that girl told me now I get it-asked for explanation-was told first two weeks on campus my girl went out with 16 different guys and then she met me-complete stoppage of other guys-turning down numerous requests. Her roomy had been confused until she met me she said but now seeing me she got it-I asked her what she meant-she thought i was fishing for compliment-i wasn't- roommate proceeded to tell me how good-looking and well built she thought i was

Summer break 3 weeks before return Monday night long distance phone conversation she loved me always and forever and wanted to go back a week early and find place to live together-1971 was kind of new concept

Wednesday mail she broke up in letter

Stunned

Went bought first car spending college funds hoping to

win her back

Went back early found out from friend she was already in town had apartment had told him of break up and my good buddy immediately asked her out.

Guy was part of inner circle for two years and year before her...one by one everyone on my wing the prior year and all my ''friends'' asked her out and she accepted...same as freshman year dates every night with different guy.

Lots of girls who flirted with me prior year showed interest.

Funny thing-guy has no gf other girls pay him no attention-once he gets gf same girls start chasing

I felt betrayed by friends and became depressed over break-up

Had never done pot or speed or coke or acid-hated druggies...then I became one.

Out drinking might find some girl have hot make-out session but never called them-could not have relationship

Six months later was going to bar bathroom and looked up as I passed jukebox and there stood six girls all staring at me-i had had steamy make out sessions with everyone - one night two-three hours-could not believe they all knew each other-perhaps word got round and they had formed club

Long boring comment explaining that great looking sexy guys can lose their way and interest in dating after break up

Took three years and dropping out of college before i dated again.

Good thing Butte Montana had great brothels...almost married a working girl

death is not erotic.

And well written.

The moral of the story:

Listen to your partner.

Nice to see a story this well

done, with reverse roles.

Sadly though, in stories here,

a guilty man is usually punished

worse than a guilty woman.

I wonder why that is.

Anyway, a great story.

Top ratings from me.

I am in love with Sara! What a wonderful woman. Ben should have pulled the trigger a year sooner. Guess she didn't want to swing.

The fact that she feels regret for the aftermath of her 'Evil' letter shows her good character. Like the macabre nature of the euphemism "Painting" the bathroom w/ his suicide.

He could take that picture to a lawyer and sue her ass for mental cruelty lol

The author has written a character that reflects what mentally healthy women really think, and it is well expressed. Obviously the cuck-fucks on the site have voted it down, but this is wonderfully contrarian in comparison to the crap that is typically posted.

Good story, but I'd like to see more detail and there is plenty of room for that. Try not telling us how the main character is feeling, but showing us. You can do that also with the antagonist. The feeling of anger has so many physical attributes, it's easy to describe, as does the feeling of arousal and happiness. Let the reader feel where your're coming from, instead of just telling them. So many readers just comment on their view of the story's theme in this arena, but if you make them feel what the character's feel, then you can gain some sympathy for the character, and that is what we, as writers, really want. It's not about getting reader to like us, sometimes it's quite the opposite. Yes the story will be much longer, but it will be so much more evolved. Nice job.

The letter is the answer to so many dumb wife sharing stories here. It is the ugly truth those authors try to sweep under the rug and imagine does not exist. Well done!

This was an excellent story, I like what she did. 5 stars.

A very unusual,very good story. Not all loving wives are whores, but a lot of men are fools.

She got her revenge and it will haunt her and eat away at her for the rest of her life. She may act happy in public but alone or at night in bed in the dark what she did will torment her and probably destroy her.

The fact Sara felt the need to write such a letter to Ben after so much time had passed says far more about her own psychopathology than his. She remains terribly,

bitterly angry with him. It is not logical for her to still be so angered by his disloyalty to her since she now has a new loving husband and a beautiful daughter. in fact sending the letter is an insult to her new husband. Im doubt he would be pleased to know she still has such a fixation on her ex.

Her anger remains so intemse because it is being fed by the yearnings of her surpressed slut self. Ben's desire to share her awakened passions and lust within her that both frighten and fascinate her. She did not trust herself to handle those emotions and urges then and she still doesn't. It was easier for her to demonize and blame Ben than it was to face herself in the mirror as she longed for sex with other men.

Sucks to be her. She will either begin to cheat on her husband or will kill herself once her daughter has aged out of the parental home. Perhaps both.

Loved it but no remorse!

One less wimpy cuckold

I try to be reasonably forgiving etc But I would rather someone shoot me etc then be someone like that. Can't even imagine having fantasies I don't share!

One less would be cuck in the world. This.is an unusual LW story. I enjoyed it.

the ending was bad the letter was wrong after that much time

Dark.

Great woman for a change

Good riddance she dumped him

Good riddance to the cuck. One less in the world although they seem to be multiplying as the cucks wear the badge with honor and are hoping to make the word and lifestyle main stream. What no one gets is the overall economic chaos that civilization would undergo if this happens.

This was a very unusual story, and demonstrates faith in some women , rather than the narcissism and cruelty that so many women display against the mentally ill and low esteem men in their lives.

very, very interesting. In my favorites now, thanks

Why feel bad about the letter? It was nothing but the truth.

Yes, there was a flavour of “noir” to the story in her letter and his subsequent suicide. Should she have addressed it sooner as some have proposed? No, i believe she had to wait until she was capable and over her fury and grief. Ben’s actions coupled with is warped notion of their marriage, not her letter, ultimately sealed his fate. She deserved better, glad she found it.

Wonderful woman...good riddance to another cuckworm

No sympathy for Ben.

He was self-destructive and won't be missed

PPL here condone suicide. I find it disgusting. Her letter was not closure it was emotional "warfare". Doeas it help her? sadly we don't know if she knows he took his life. She should shoulder it, her wonderful woman "closure".

Like she said it's a mental illness; does it deserve death?

I don't find the letter evil

I don't condone suicide but I don't see it as her fault.

He was obviously mentality ill but why should she have to support him?

I'm not condoning suicide but this creature set his wife up for rape.

Non-consensual sex is rape.

Rapist doesn't deserve sympathy.

All she wanted was closure the fact that he couldn't live with how she views him is not her fault

This is a situation that got completely out of control by both sides

It should go in another catagory : Loving Husband who try to share and woman kicks him out. The suicide is just an easy way out for him. The letter did not say anything new to him. Blaming his suicide on her letter is not correct.

I don't condone suicide and I have spent a good portion of my professional life counseling those who attempted it or family members of its victims. BUT that being said if more of the cuck population as small as it is decided to take that route, it would be tragic..yes... But it would solve a lot of bullshit the rest of us have to deal with. Then again who am I to kink shame,I guess they can't help what they like, but their minority is so vocal, sheesh.