All Comments on 'Paul's Lucky Day'

tell more like this its great

You have good detail. I feel you could go into more detail. What each one was feeling. For example "The warm, moist pussy gliding over Paul's firm, smooth cock" and etc. However you can run into going into too much detail. You have a good story. Waiting for more of your stories.

ditto with detail and i think he should still fuck both sisters.

more plz

I rather enjoyed this story much more than any other I have come across on this site before. Very well written and great detail to keeping the reader enthralled on the situation. 5 out of 5 from me.

One of the best I've read!

this is one of the best out there!!

Got me so turned on. I wish i could be on a situation like this, but not with my sister

If this is an American tale, why all the Anglicism's, and if it's set in England, why all the jarring American slang and word usage? Also, you keep changing the point of view of who's telling the story; it keeps going from "Paul said, Paul did" to "I said, I did". Sort all this kind of stuff out before you post, otherwise it just comes across as rushed and slapdash form a lazy writer

I gave up after a while. sat 20 feet away and could see the colour of her eyes, but couldn't tell the colour of her panties, you gave her name before you knew it, just couldn't read any more

Just couldn't get into it. Then the mention of spanking and role play, it was crash and burn.

Very enjoyable story.