All Comments on 'Picked the Wrong Woman'

This is a very good story. The plot is realistic. This is a good read!!

Not the usual lit. drivel, I don't find forced sex erotic, in real life the women who are raped don't find it exciting either, Thanks.

I am not sure I would allow my wife to be raped even if it meant the rapist would go down for it. But apart from that I liked the story. I will of course say that in the middle east if a thief steals something they get their hands cut off. I would apply that logic to rapists. If a man rapes a woman his dick should be cut off. Or failing that the victim should be given a rusty pair of pliers and the rapeist tied down and the woman then let loose on the man. He probably wouldn't do it again.

What happenned to you? This story was just way too dumb to be believable. A "Smart" woman falls for the "Hubby in Trouble" line, with no checking, no hint before hand. Also, no one could hide the evidence, it was already filed. Also, a predator like him would not place himself in such a tenous position. Lastly, no cop I know would have allowed a rape, just too stupid for words - your stories are usually much better - Ttom

The dumbest story I've read lately.

Maybe take a break from the site and try to get a grasp of how reality works in your time away.

the only thing right with this tale is the title

<p>I'm at a loss here.</p>

<p>I noticed some folks telling you well written as always, and I have no right to tell them they can't think that, but I don't really understand why they say that</p>

<p>Lets take a quick look here</p>

<p>First the wife is of below average intelligence. Why do I say that? Lets reverse the roles a second. You, the husband get called into a male bosses office. You don't know he's gay, but he tells you that if you blow him about 25 times he'll not send your wife to prison for stealing from the company. Do you do it? The average hetro male doesn't. The <i>average person</i> wants more info before they leap off the pier not knowing if their is water down there or not. It's not a question of if they love their mate, its a question of trust. Do they trust their mate enough to believe in them, or do they take the word of someone they barely know that their mate is dirty. See, she wasn't very bright, or she could have called her husband verified this, and there wouldn't have been the need for 3 blowjobs.</p>

<p>The husband wasn't very bright either. Instead of talking to his wife he sat on the info. And he knew that his wife probably had sex in "some" form with this man after being in his office for over 3 hours alone, he acts pretty casual about it. Then after she confesses about the blow jobs, and the pretty thin reasoning for why she did it, he decides to make war on him. Ok, the problem I have is the wife put up "Zero" resistance, and the husband rewards her with a kiss and cuddles? And by the way, if the wife was vomiting I find it hard to believe they got any DNA from his sperm mixed with stomach acid. Sue me I watch a lot of Court TV (Real TV now).</p>

<p>Then there is where the police tell her to "go along" with what ever he ask her to do, and even though they are downstairs, they give him time to start having sex with her before they come in. Huh? That's not like stealing a cookie, or some form of petty theft. Sexual battery had already taken place the day before. They don't need him to be in the act to arrest him or even for her to go the extra mile and get "prepared" for him again. Again, Court TV is something I like, and all they needed was him on the telephone talking about how he was going to blackmail her into sex, and him telling her get her pantyhose off or else. It seems that was thrown in for purely stroke</p>

<p>Then the parting words of the wife as he was arrested. And that's all it took for her to feel vindicated and better about what he did? Lets see, "EVERYONE" knows she pulled a 3 hour run in his office the day before. They may not know what she did, but they know she was in there. And after he was arrested, it wouldn't be to hard to guess why she was there for 3 hours. She was in his office again today, and when the police come in, she's bent over his desk as he's pounding away at her. And that wasn't awkward for her to get, and hold, his job "after" he's arrested for her sexual battery? See it's not rape if he's blackmailing her and she has to make up her mind if she's willing to do it. But it is sexual battery and/or sexual assault. And was there no one in the office who didn't think she let herself get used to get ahead? I know that is what I would have been thinking as soon as she was awarded his job.</p>

<p>And the matter of fact way that her husband took it seemed off. Lets see, she still has enough of her bosses DNA in her mouth for a swab, but that doesn't turn the husband off, he can't wait to hold, kiss, cuddle, and tell her how it will be all better soon. She's bent over a desk getting more "proof" he's a blackmailing perv, but through all of this he's talking about how much she must loves him to be willing to have sex with another man to protect him. He sounds pretty delusional to me. The only thing that would have completed the picture would be if she gave him $20 and told him she was forced to have sex with various men at the office and this is what they paid her and she did it so they wouldn't beat him up as he left work.</p>

<p>While you often have some really great stories, this just wasn't one of them. Sorry =(</p>

-Risq

the story was weaker than usual. Still enjoyable. To commentor Risq below. A story can be well written and yet have story weaknesses.

<p>While that may be true, for me it kills the "immersion" factor when a story is weak and really doesn't follow believability.</p>

<p>If a story is written in the Star Trek universe it basically will follow some laws to fit (Warp drives, Phasers, Starfleet, etc) but when you bring in an X-Wing and Tie fighters to battle Star fleet, it doesn't matter how well a story is written if it's full of plot holes that don't connect the dots. While I enjoy both universes if its not a parody story, meaning it's semi-serious work, then merge those universes to create a story doesn't work.</p>

<p>You can't have a character vomiting one minute then giving DNA swabs from their mouths to the police hours after the event the next. You can't have the wife saying in one breath how she is so scared to be raped, then have her lay on the desk and disengage her mind while she's being assaulted, only to yell and make fun of the guy who assaulted her by saying things like: "Have a nice trip. Don't forget to write", it doesn't fit the mold of early "victim". First she's traumatized, now she making fun of him as he's lead away? Not to mention she didn't care when the police rushed in she was bent over the desk with her dress up, no panties, and being ridden by the guy? She's all, Take him away boys. Now I'm heading to Disney world after a hard days work? Sorry, that's a few of the too many plot holes all over the place for me to enjoy the story.</p>

<p>That's why I said it was disjointed. I don't have a problem with the writing. It was clear, it was understandable, and it got the point across. What I have a problem with is how the story was all over the place on the characters emotional table.</p>

-Risq

better if the husband was the one to go into Halls office while the police went to the bathroom? NYMINUS

To Lancewm

04/27/09 by Risq_001

While that may be true, for me it kills the "immersion" factor when a story is weak and really doesn't follow believability.

If a story is written in the Star Trek universe it basically will follow some laws to fit (Warp drives, Phasers, Starfleet, etc) but when you bring in an X-Wing and Tie fighters to battle Star fleet, it doesn't matter how well a story is written if it's full of plot holes that don't connect the dots. While I enjoy both universes if its not a parody story, meaning it's semi-serious work, then merge those universes to create a story doesn't work.

this story was crap. im sorry, but even the writing seemed stale and wtf was with the cops and social workers? they wanted her to have full on penetration because it would mean better evidence in the trial? i suppose it would also be better if it was an actual murder instead of attempted murder, ya know, dead body, murder weapon, it all makes great evidence. that was retarded and the husbands not mad at his wife but in fact is blown away at how much she loves him, that is, loves him enough to blow a guy 3 times and allow him to stick his condom less dick inside her just so hed get a few yrs in jail. right, sure. i will agmit that im glad she immediately confessed what she did, but alas, she cant get dna after throwing up repeatedly and then washing out her mouth probably followed by a drink of somekind to get the taste out of her mouth.strike one and strike two was that the cops didnt immediately arrest or at least take into custody for questioning her boss. strike three was that they both were so horny for each other they almost had passionate sex after what most people would consider a horrifying ordeal. i would to say you can do better, but a lot of your stories come off wrong, if not the writing then the actual story.

You, your wife and the police supposedly trick/ENTRAP a man into committing or recommitting a crime by her giving voluntary, knowing consent to have intercourse with him because she was stupid enough to be tricked into giving the guy oral sex by allegedly falling for a story sooooo implausible that only a complete fool or mental defective would buy into it. Can't you just see the courtroom scene,"You Honor, Mrs Peterson couldn't consent to any of the sex because she's obviously a moron or nuts, but that's OK, you can trust in everything she says here today." But, "... outside the door the police were waiting. It would strengthen the case a lot when he actually stuck his cock into her." Exactly what case is that? Surely not rape or sexual assault for her voluntarily agreeing to have sex with him. And I thought all they needed was a hair from a brush in the toilet? How do you jump from that to the husband and wife agreeing to the police having his wife screw the guy in the office? Don't judges and police ask if its OK for some guy to screw your wife for the good of the community? Happens all the time in my town. And if every guy who got his way with some girl because he handed her some implausible story or line, that if she'd had one brain cell in her head to check it out would find it false, went to jail for rape, 90% of the guys in the country would be in jail, probably including the idiot judge that supposedly would have authorized all this.

You, your wife and the police supposedly trick/ENTRAP a man into committing or recommitting a crime by her giving voluntary, knowing consent to have intercourse with him because she was stupid enough to be tricked into giving the guy oral sex by allegedly falling for a story sooooo implausible that only a complete fool or mental defective would buy into it. Can't you just see the courtroom scene,"You Honor, Mrs Peterson couldn't consent to any of the sex because she's obviously a moron or nuts, but that's OK, you can trust in everything she says here today." But, "... outside the door the police were waiting. It would strengthen the case a lot when he actually stuck his cock into her." Exactly what case is that? Surely not rape or sexual assault for her voluntarily agreeing to have sex with him. And I thought all they needed was a hair from a brush in the toilet? How do you jump from that to the husband and wife agreeing to the police having his wife screw the guy in the office? Don't judges and police ask if its OK for some guy to screw your wife for the good of the community? Happens all the time in my town. And if every guy who got his way with some girl because he handed her some implausible story or line, that if she'd had one brain cell in her head to check it out would find it false, went to jail for rape, 90% of the guys in the country would be in jail, probably including the idiot judge that supposedly would have authorized all this.

Well written. At least you didn't have her do something really stupid like try to hide it from him. Keep up the good work.

The good guys win and all of that kind of stuff. Well worth reading, Thanks ......Rich

You made the boss’s scheme quite lame, and the wife's character turns into brain challenged for buying it at the spot. After all the years together she has no clue who her husband is and some bizarre story from a new boss which requires her cooperation (on her knees) never raise any suspicions??? <P>

How about: 'excuse me for a second while I go to the bathroom' and then calling hubby to share with him the cooking of the books revelations BEFORE exchanging body fluids...

When did this story happen? It must have been 1907 or something! You mean your dumb ass would let a man stick his dick in your wife under survelience knowing that just verbal harrassment is worth 100,000 and you let her get fucked for the same amount? U must stay at home STUPID while she works. How can she show up for work and all of her subordinates know that she sucks dick good enough for ex-boss to nutin her mouth 3 times a day! There is no erotica here and you are a DUMB FUCK!

How da FUCK did this dumb bitch get tto be CEO, and how long will the company survive with her IGNORANT ASS in charge?

I read all the comments and changed the story. All comments before this one are for a story no longer here. Thanks to all the "constructive comments" on the prior version. I read them. I paid attention. Again, Thanks.

Liked the story and sex. The early plot is a bit weak; why does hubby not tell her what he'd heard, and why would she spend 8 hours alone in new supervisors office at work ?

for what I thought was a pretty good story. My only comment is in reference to some of the comments in the story, 'jesus god of America,' 'Moses and the prophets,' do people actually talk like that when excited or cumming? Whoda thought it.

I like the story and would enjoy a follow up. I liked how you seemed to tie it to one of your older stories with the flashback of their trip and the catamaran. I still had a little bit of struggle with rape being believable. Everything we learn about the wife says she wouldn't have caved without more proof but whatever, it still got us to the cabin.

You draw the line between what's legally right and what's morally right. The difference between rape and adultry. In some countries it's not against the law to have sex with women against their will but that doesn't make it right. Of course women have no rights in these countries. Pretty much like Brad didn't have a choice in his wife's adultry. Obviously, she didn't respect him enough to talk to him first before she allowed her sister and her husband (the lead characters) to help turn her into an adulteress which is also a crime in some countries. They justify it by painting Brad as a prude when it comes to sex. The title should be "We Screw Brad Over While He Works to Pay the Bills" It's hard to tell who's the bad guy in this story. The lying, scheming, adulterous lowlifes or Mr. Hall.

I liked the characters and felt good about how Mr Hall was dealth with, however, the way Brad was treated was just plain bad. Just because Sandy and her husband have an open marriage does not make it right for Donna to join that relationship while married to Brad...Brad may have been screwed up, but he still married Donna in good faith and she rewarded his trust by screwing her sister and brother-in-law. So.....lots of hypocrisy in this story! Divorce first, then get together, not the other way around.

Your writing is very good though a little rushed. There were too many subplots going on. What was the main theme. You had almost a half dozen different things going on. You could have written three stories out the information you were supplying the readers. The "open marriage" introduction really killed it for me and the statement that Mr. Hall could have joined the fun if he done it right destroyed it for me but I did read the whole story.

You may have changed 80% of the story, but the basic problems still stayed with it.

Sometimes I read a story, and then later go back and re-read something by an author and forget I've read that story before. I re-read this one because I didn't recognize it, but it wasn't until I read your comments below that I realized that I had left comments to it before and you changed it "completely" from what I commented about.

Your underlying problem of the wife being this, uhhm forgive me, stupid is still there. The husband's detachment to what she did, is still there.

The original premise of the wife being willing to give a strange man sex so that he wouldn't have her husband jailed is still flimsy at best, but now you re-wrote it as them being swingers and really just being pissed off more about the fact that her boss "forced" her to have sex with him, "instead" of him "just" asking like a normal person would.

The way it was worded was that she more than likely would have slept with him if he had approached her differently. If that was the case why did he even care if the other person called him and told him that his wife would soon be cheating on him? That still is an emotional disconnect that was never fixed.

Then you threw in them having sex the wife's sister because her husband was an uptight prude who thought sex was for babies only (I have yet to meet a man like that myself. Most of us are complaining how little we get it (^_^)) and the sister in-law is now so sex crazed, that she's entertaining three new men in the same day on a boat as soon she gets sex with someone (her brother in-law) who not her husband?

So basically you switched it from a weird story where the wife claims rape, but seems to be chomping at the bit to do it again so everyone can see the man having sex with her, to a "Group sex/orgy/Swinger" story to make this as something that they normally enjoyed when not forced to do it?

*Sigh*

Oh well your story, not mine. Still not a slam at you, but you might want to change the category it belongs in because of the fact its not even the same story you originally posted.

-Risq

Really bad

I see the comments from Risq_001. I did not see this story previously. However, I do like the twist on this one as it stands now. Only thing I would have liked to know is who was giving him the anonymous tips??

I felt this story had a bit of false advertising. TECHNICALLY it was a 'loving wife' story. I can handle blackmail as a loving wife motive.

But you treated that story arch very shabbily. There was an anonymous phone call. From whom? For what? Male or female? The narrator certainly didn't care, not did the story teller. Something happened. Barely discussed.

Exit supposed premise of story and enter into polyamourous wet dream (which I frankly skimmed through drastically)

Raped wife doesn't retreat into the loving embrace of her husband, seeking reinforcement that he still really loves her and doesn't look at her as damaged goods. Nope, she immediately decides her sister (!!!) needs to share her husband and they need to do something (I was really skimming at that point!) with a realtor.

Enter strawman Brad who embodies frankly ludicrous characteristics and then, in the final 5 seconds, clear up that whole tedious cheating/rape thing that was the excuse to have some poly incest porn while hacking at anyone sexually more conservative then you.

Now for the the nice things: Grammar, sentence structure, dialogue etc all worked. Spelling was good. It wasn't poorly written, just poorly paced, bad emphasis and frankly put in the wrong category.

It is not realistic.

What you critics forget is that this story (and all others) are written to meet the needs (whims) of the author. You don't need to have every fact explained, the protagonist never knew the name of the caller, why should YOU know any more? As long as I am entertained I do not want to know every boring detail. The characters in this story no doubt had bowel movements, according to your reasoning they should all be described. Get real and quit trying to be soooo critical just to show how smart you think you are. Loved the story, Scorpio, please keep writing.

great story. expected a bit more. will you be following up with a sequel? this story screams for one. expected more about the would be rapist. know people into the lifestyle. what's right for them isn't necceraly right for everyone. they are happy and he is secure in his manhood. like he said as long as it's done on the up and up then it's not cheating. this is what works for them. as for Brad there should have been more about him or not. up to you. just mho.

what a waste of time. get real

What is it with you and lesbo incest.

T standing and I love lesbo incest.

interesting story. But, did Mr. Hall previously work in St. Louis or Kansas City?

This might be the worst story you ever wrote. Blackmail, cheating, threesomes, foursomes and done by the worst hypocritical characters I've ever seen. I'm actually surprised that it was written by an accomplished author as yourself. Oh well, nobody's perfect. Fuck it.

Did they operate your brain somehow? How cab you write crap like this? Usually you are by classes better. What happened??

Not your best work, man.

2 Stars

I can't believe I read all of that garbage.

I read this story with expectations of something else because of my experience reading other stories by you. I must say that this was either hijacked or plagurized because it is out of character for your writing themes and styles. Although extremely well written, it was not my cup of tea.

a pick in time saves nine times as lady. TK U MLJ LV NV

So it's bad that she basically gets raped at work by her superior. They get even for that. But then you throw in all this cheating slut/willing cuckold/swapping crap. That ruined the story for me. And you just piled on by adding the sister. Lit needs to make a separate section for stories about idiots and stop ruining LW. I'm sorry I wasted my time reading this sorry tale.

If the husband is fine with other men screwing his wife then he shouldn't have a problem with her superior screwing her. The willing-cuckold-swinger-husband subplot ruined the story. His anger or jealously made him seems like a drama queen in light of his fetish. 1 Star.

The husband's problem with Mr Hall wasn't that the man wanted to have sex with his wife - clearly the couple had an open marriage. Maybe real open marriages aren't like this one was but we're interested in THIS couple's open marriage not every one...

No, his problem was that the man effectively threatened his wife (by threatening her husband basically) in order to coerce her into having sex with him... that the sex wasn't about BOTH of them enjoying themselves but only Mr Hall.

I'm not saying I'd be too keen on an open marriage but I do recognize if I wad it would involve consent by my spouse not force.

Add to this the dealing with Brad was classy - pointing out how just because he wasn't good for her doesn't mean he's bad and, as such, didn't deserve to be dumped on in addition to being dumped.

wasted time and space with BS of so called tell. must be written by a fairy cuck

1*

go away

but there must be more codicils included in the pre nup. TK U MLJ LV NV

One could have been good if the author had stuck to it.

The other, not so much. Wasn't needed.

The unnecessary secondary subplot detracted from, rather than adding anything to, the overall story making the experience muddled and confused.

A lot of people picking it apart, but I found it entertaining and arousing. Would love to get hold of the two sisters!

fun story , well written , sadly the depth & meaning seems to be lost on those looking for a BTB tale .

all you bleeding hearts are always talking about how if you love your spouse, you should trust them and tell them the truth. Scorpio44a has said that in at least three of his stories. Now all of a sudden, she loved me enough that she fucked him to save him from going to jail. Is that the sum of it. You change according to what the problem is. The problem is he's married to and whore and life goes on.

The whole premise is that a stranger tells the wife that hubby is in trouble with the IRS, or whatever, and she IMMEDIATELY spreads her legs to 'save' him?

She believes the stranger without question, doesn't ask her husband, or investigate the matter any further than "Your husband will go to jail, but I will save him for you. Now strip 'em and spread'em!"

Only after she fucks 'The villain' two dozen times, and only after she is caught by hubby, does she explain that "It was all for you, dear husband!"

So let's recap, shall we? Stranger tells her that her husband is a criminal. She believes it without hesitation, doesn't defend him or ask him, doesn't trust him, just assumes that the man she has shared her life with, the man she has been married to for years, is guilty with zero evidence. And, in order to keep him out of trouble, the only thing she is apparently capable of doing to 'save her family', is to IMMEDIATELY become a prostitute, again, no hesitation? All without EVER saying a word to her husband about his supposed criminal dealings, until confronted? Ridiculous!

As they say in some parts, "That dog just won't hunt!"

There are dozens of similar stories on this site, and NONE of them work, because the starting premise is idiotic!

Is that this couple plays with others with each other's consent. Neither of them need to go behind the other's back to have sex with another person; all they has to do is meet over drinks and work out the arrangements together.

She is, however, rather naive and gullible to believe the blackmail story.

My only problem with how this works out in the end is that the blackmailing boss ends up getting off way too easy with his plea bargain. One they met, the husbands of the victims should have arranged for something more extreme to happen to him on top of his legal troubles.

function on her own is that stupid. But, evidently so. Now, we know that she fucks other men, I guess with her husband's consent, so I wouldn't think she would have a problem fucking someone behind his back and then coming up with the lamest excuse in the world to justify it. He coerced her? I don't think so. I think he suggested it and she jumped in with both feet. Hard to sympathize with hubby because he allows that shit already. So, shitty story line, good writing. Equal out to about a 2 on the ratings meter. Too bad, could have been a fairly decent story idea, but I guess not.

While I agree that she was foolish to believe that her husband could be guilty of anything that he needed protection from, there was NOTHING in the story to indicate that Hall DIDN'T try to use that scheme to blackmail her into an affair.

I would have never thought this story was going this way when I started. Cool story, good job.

i dont like poly-amory .

he also should have divorced wifey-poo .

Are people so obtuse they can't see how an open marriage theme takes the tension from the story of a wife who gets a fuck from her boss? She's already been fucking god knows how many men (and her own sister, forchrissakes), and the reader is supposed to get their dander up because she takes another one in the tail? What the hell is wrong with this picture? Are you English or just thick?

Men who are creative enough to keep their wives interested and faithful understand these questions.

But this protagonist is slobbering all over his own wife directly after her assignations with her boss - a known STD-carrier....? Are you fucking nuts?

Please get help.

thru thick, thin or any turmoil. TK U MLJ LV NV

The repeated theme that has a wife giving in to blackmail about something her husband has done wrong is ludicrous. Any half-wit would at least stall until talking to husband.

Hey if a group of people are in to polyamory have at it.

Pity the guy when their cycles cync up as some studies state they do. Unless guy has a getaway cabin imagine living between four walls as only male while three middle aged females go through PMS-their monthly visit-then the postms.

Buy stock in and stock up on Midol.

Yep I know that is sexist remark to some, but I have aged enough and heard more than one conversation between females where they admit to their behavior and moods during menstruation.

Personally I believe it is bloating and water retention that pisses them off the most. Even in this age where voluptuous females are finally being revered and males are once again seeking out fuller figured women, gaining ten pounds overnight and clothes not fitting would dampen anyone's mood.

I only wish Lane Bryant would have two hour long lingerie specials run the same night and time against victoria secrets angels. Pretty sure LB would destroy vs in ratings

read this before he was really stupid

He gets pissed because someone conned his wife into sex, but has no problem handing her out for swaps or cuckolding his brother in law. A brother in law whose wife never told him that she needed incest and swapping to orgasm.

The ONLY sympathetic character in this story is one we never see, Brad. Thank God his slut decided to GTFO while he still can find a woman who isn't a fucking liar and cheat.

Nothing to like about anyone in this stupid and I do mean stupid farce! Learn about characters and the real world then try again! Gave it a 1.

Wow, in the beginning he should divorce her for her stupidity alone that she believed that kind of hare-brained blackmail.

Though that she apparently immediately was convinced that her husband could be guilty of tax evasion, shows her lack of trust, it is reason enough for the marriage to be on its last legs.

Not that the husband wasn't an idiot either, since he didn't tell her about the phone call in order to warn her about Hall.

It's simply the kind of thing people in a good marriage would do.

For another WIMP story.

Here cucky, cucky cucky........

They are swingers and swappers. She was raped and that is/was wrong but don't then have them be swingers or have an open marriage to garner sympathy. I had none at that point and was bored by the story thereafter. Could have been a very important conversation of the torment it caused the couple, her especially. But you chose a silly route to pursue. 3***. Mostly for taking the time to write it.

Boss gets punished sufficient

No more

They break up a marriage of his sister. What great human self centered human beings. Guess you can justify anything in your own mind. He soon to be x is going to be great full down the road when he really finds a woman who will go be a shit about his feelings. One that will put his feelings first instead of hers. The brother in law and two sisters are so shallow minded it’s pathetic. You don’t know what you got till it’s gone. Sex can only carry you so far. It’s a shallow relationship with only sex

Can't stand swinging an swapping, destroyed the story.

Not my cup of tea-sharing- but good reading. 👍🧐😉

I'm not sure about sharing the woman I love with other men!! I'd be afraid she would start having feelings for the other man. Besides; what if he was BIGGER or more experienced, or had Gene Simmons tongue??!!

With that lifestyle would be hard to ever convict on rape. Unless proven conversion as in this case and even then maybe.

She has the Morales of a alleyway in heat. Maybe she cried rape only because husband found out.I

Given the almost guaranteed divorce amongst cheaters that way the swing of share just didn't make the story fun. Depressing really but writing was great.

Swingers and they get mad about wife fucking around. Lame.

I lost interest, soon as the wife was raped then in the next paragraph the husband and wife are talking about going back to the island to swing again and bring her sister along as well. Tell me on what planet that a rape victim just hours after being raped is then able to talk about fucking other men in a swing situation. The stupidity of it, forced me to stop reading. Come on literotica make the authors at least write to a standard, even if only basic ⭐️

What an utter piece of garbage. Self righteous hypocritical writing with stereotypical remarks. The author is an egoist with a power trip. He is the actual Mr Hall here.

Wow what a stupid story

sorry this only rate a three in my book . every thing was just too perfect the world dosent even come close to that

Not even worth giving a score. Adolescent fantasy...a guy that can satisfy 3 women as his own private harem.

Biggest fault line in the whole story: they are already swingers so what's the big deal with speaking to his wife as soon as he got that first message and putting her on her guard?

TRAILER PARK TRASH, SANDY AND DONNA!! HUSBAND IS A CUCK!

SKANK SANDY MUST HAVE GIVEN HER BOSS A DISEASE

Thanks! Easy, enjoyable reading. Opinion: some the other comments seem to be a little critical. I get enough reality in everyday life, this was good !

Warning!!! Open, swinging marriage. Worthless trash.

Next t time please pick a lane. Either she’s a molested housewife or a frustrated swinger. Trying to fit too much into one tale is irritating

This story meanders grotesquely.

Is this an LW, or Erotic coupling story?

The start of the story was ok. Seemed like it might have potential.

It went off the rails quickly after Sandy fucked her boss.

Between huge plot holes and the fact that the author seemed to throw multiple LW cliches against the wall to see what would stick.

Kinda hate that I spent the time to read this one.

This is a good turn of a story nicely twisted

Fucking ridiculous ⭐️

What a load of shit!