by Varian P
Pretty graphic visuals...I wish you had gone for actually having a dialogue instead of just telling about the dialogue but you have style.
Very talented writing. This story grabs you with the first sentence and doesn't let go until the story is finished. Absolutely loved the way this story was written. LL
Very awesome, best read for me in a long time. And I can honestly say this is only my second comment ever on lit. Great write and while I do agree the dialog 'could' have been done differently, it was no less amazing and after all, you're right...
The kids' words, or one of their own...?
While it 'seemed' like rape it really wasn't, it was more like blackmail. They both chose to accept his desires than go to jail. They'd probably STILL rob houses after that's over-not to mention become interested in incest-after all the cop was being gentle and sensual. What I don't understand is why he was so afraid they'd talk when they were clearly in the wrong there. I think this is definitely worth five stars.
I Like this storey, Its title is fitting, it got me pretty hot,
Keep up the good work!
Loved this story. Got me so wet. Its a real thrill to read a story that you captivated and eager to read more. I usually skim over most of the stories here... but this one really had me feeling every word you wrote!! Brilliant darling.
Your story read like a true crime story, all from the point of view of the cop. Great writing, not quite "Lost" level, but very nicely done. Knowing his power, working the odds, getting what he wanted. Incest, and their fear of revealing it, was his greatest defense preventing them from going to the cops. I think rape and false imprisonment would be the crimes he could have been charged with.