All Comments on 'Plans Change Ch. 01'

Or maybe I should say a new editor who knows the difference between waste and waist. A good editor will also know the difference between than and then. There were just too many of those type errors to be higher than 3 stars.

Don't worry about the "anonymous" coward honey, I gave you 5 and would have given you more if it was possible. I hope Chris and his mom are happy together and find it possible to marry each other. I know my father and I did and had a long happy life together before cancer took him from me. The world may frown on incest romance, but it is the best love I have found that is humanly possible, don't regret it at all, I didn't or I should say, Chris and his mom shouldn't. I think anonymous should not be allowed to make comments negative or otherwise. It's not fair, you can't respond to them properly. Thank you for your story and I hope you continue.

It may seem petty, but the use of 'waste' for 'waist' is really an off-putting error. Nevertheless, you have a fine story. Thank you!

Your story was so erotic and romantic - a tough combo to pull off, but you did it. Thank you. The spectacular ending of mom being impregnated by her loving son made me even harder. Please continue this story and let your fans know how day-to-day living together (did they marry?) works out.

MrPervey46 does you no favors when he advises you that it is not important to edit, improve, etc. (If that is not what Pervey meant, then I apologize). You should always try to "write up." Having said that, I don't see any problems in what you wrote that are of sufficient gravity to put anyone off the story. I've noted that some of the reviewers on the site are too quick to unfairly find fault with a writer and very often, as Pervey accurately points out, they are anonymous and, as he also points out, that is pretty unfair. You are a good writer and this is a good, sweet, tender love story about emotional healing and about the love between a wounded, vulnerable woman and a young man who wants to shield her from hurt and who wants to help her mend her crushed spirit and who wants her to be happy. Women who are Mom's age sometimes need reassurance that they are wanted and accepted, that they have value as a person and a woman and these women are very fragile. Mom was emotionally injured in a rather brutal way by her husband, and in this sweet story her son takes Dad's place as her source of strength and reassurance and also as her lover. She began to come alive again when he filled her sweet Mommy tummy full of his seed. It was what they both needed. (You can tell that I am really into this story.) Please write another chapter. AnHoa Rifleman

There were a dozen obvious mistakes

your editor missed. However it didn't

stop this story from being really damn good.

Sweet love and sex between him and his mother was very nicely done and a pleasure to read.

Thanks for the very good story

Great story about how you both found what you needed with each other. One question though, did I miss the part where she got pregnant, or is that coming in the next chapter?

But... like some of the other noted, you need a good editor or pay attention to grammer and spelling. It is jarring and impedes the flow.

You certainly have great potential IMHO, hope your stories improve...

Venus

I've read most of your stories and found them entertaining, this one and this may sound ridlculous I found touching.. A true love story..

"As i held my arm around her WASTE? Does she work for the council?

loved the storyline.

YOUNG MAN, YOU HAVE A WAY WITH WORDS. SOME TIMES MISSPELLED BUT YOU GET YOUR POINT ACROSS. I'VE READ MOST OF YOUR STORIES. THIS IS ONE YOU SHOULD KEEP GOING. YOU HAVE A FAN LAROC OF AGES

A comment on 06/24/2012 by, what else...Anonymous, suggested "spell check"; I must say, "dumb ass", in defense of he author, spell check is mostly suggesting the word is misspelled, not that it is incorrectly missused. If, Dumb Ass, you're going to criticize at least make a suggestive correction, which is the word should have been "waist" instead of "waste". Now, THAT is constructive criticism!!

The author does have an excellent command of saying the right words to detail and describe characters, scenes and dialogue of the characters, Mother and Son. It is a very well, very thoughtful and thought-provoking story of mutual love, respect, endearment and total compassion, all from one to the other.

Mother and son faced crises' and they both needed comfort from someone that could understand them and console them accordingly. Mom deftly and with love consoled her son after the loss of his young wife and mother of their very young daughter.

Later Chris, her son, was equal to the challenge as he consoled and redeemed his Mother's life with his understanding and frankness of his mom's dilemma and dogma of her husband's, Chris' father, drunkedness, meanderings and sudden change to lavish child-like behaviors.

Their lives and their stations in life made them destined to be the perfect companion, the perfect soul-mate to spend the remainder os their lives together. They came together due to unforeseen challenges, comforted each other and, their Garden of Eden, Heaven on Earth developed around them, their nearness, their love for each other as man and woman, as husband and wife, and their willingness, their desire, their need to be together, seemingly forever.

A beautiful, sensual and a most heart-felt love story; it just so happens the participants, the characters, the male and female, just happened to be a Mother and her Son!!!

Beautiful story! You have a wonderful imagination and a tremendous gift for storytelling. Your grammar and syntax, on the other hand, are atrocious. I'd be more than happy to edit for you.

your misuse of language kept me laughing so hard I almost missed the story. As many others have pointed out, spell check only tells you if the word you chose is spelled correctly, not if you chose the correct word. Maybe you should resubmit in the humor/satire category.

great sex but in a nice romantic story setting thanks

Wish it was longer. Have seen something similar but your's was much better.

Thank you very much

DKP

This is a terrific story of hot motherfucking by a gifted author. Chris's experience when he fucked his mother for the first time is typical of young guys who get to stick their cock up between their mother's legs, as Chris does. For lots of boys,the ones who're lucky enough to do it, nothing ever feels as good to their cock as their own mother's warm wet loving cunt. His mother's cunt seems to draw out all the creamy semen in a boy's young balls, it's a cum-magnet for her boy's semen. I'm glad that Chris and his mom stayed together, of course they did. Chris found the one perfect cunt for him, and his mom found the perfect cock.

This is a wonderful story. About joy and disaster and mother and son finding each other. It is believable. As a writer, I'll have to agree with another commentator. You really need to learn the meanings of words before you use them. If you have trouble, get a person to proofread for you. I agree, do not rely upon 'spellcheck' or any word processor program. They cannot tell you the differences between words that sound alike but have different meanings. For example 'boarder' vs. 'border'. One is a person paying rent, the other is an imaginary line on a map - do you know the difference? You need to. There is much on Literotica about pushing 'borders', or boundarys. I see on Literotica where many confuse 'to' with 'too' and fail to learn the differences in 'they, their, they're, etc. Hone your craft. Pay close attention to punctuation. Too many writers here misplace quotation marks and/or totally forget that commas exist.

great story awesome buildup to the sex was worth waiting for maybe some more chapters can be added to this story that would be great keep up the awesome work

It truly is a wonderful story about something beautiful salvaged from sad situations.

You now have both, a mother and a lover whilst your daughter has both a grandm and a mother. It's a win win for all except your dad.

I do agree with one of the comments. Your use of words gets in the way. The most noticable for me in your story was the use of waste instead of waist. There were a few places where it was used correctly which makes you wonder why it was misused so often. A spell checker will always pass both as both are spelled correctly and only a good grammar checker will pick it up.

As a reader pointed out, a proof reader would help limit such mistakes and make an awesome story.

Thank you so much for sharing with us and do keep up the writing as it only gets better.

Regards

Debb

ok seriously, there are these things called a dictionary, you might want to look up the following words: waste, waist, there, their, woman, women.

go ahead i have a minute.

as for the story, well i felt the sex was rushed, not enough meat. no pun intended.

seriously, get a dictionary and use it.

learn the diff between then and than...

It’s very good, though the ending felt a bit rushed! Thank you for sharing your story with us!

I liked how the two of you each had important parts in helping the other overcome dark times and you ended up together. More about the sex would be nice!

The only love that could replace, his dead wife

was MOTHER. Well done, nice read.

...THANKS...

An awesome story! thank you

Another excellent story from you. Thanks.

5 stars. You didn't write ch 2 but it wasn't needed. Keep writing

Beautiful story. 5 stars. The safety, security and pure love mother and son felt for each other was wonderful. Only in fiction do we find people so psychologically, psychiatrically and emotionally stable that they can readily accept love without shame, guilt, self-recrimination or self-loathing. They realize love has no boundaries, Only humans have boundaries. As someone who, in real life, has no problems with mutually consensual incest, this story perfectly depicts now such a couple could/would live and thrive. I hope some day you will continue this story.

Nicely done. Bittersweet.