All Comments on 'Please, Not Another Picnic'

did I say wow?

wowsers even.

Nice light frothy concoction more reminiscent of hot whipped cocoa by the fireplace than enjoying the sunshine, but I digress.

You used your powers well. I could feel the heat, and the smiles.

Short but sweet. Nice! Good luck in the contest...

Too short...........

Beautifully constructed. Loved the hints of 'noire' too.

in a sensual setting. Wonderful imagery and the sex was hawt! Fine work Cerise. Good luck in the contest.

this is the first piece of your work that I've read, I look forward to reading more

Thoroughly enjoyable little story. I'll have to seek out more of your stuff.

You have a way with imagery! :)

Selena

Have to agree with the comments about your imagery - and the heat ;) Well done, and good luck!

I really enjoyed this one. A nice blend of humour and heat. It's a great story.

A good way to convert people into loving nature! Good luck in the contest.

Takes me back to picnics more than 50 years ago – such happy memories! Well done, Pete.