All Comments on 'Pretty Boy and The Beast'

I am not sure how to rate this story. But 50 is probably about right ,I think! Anyway well written, whatever it is.

I had a lot of fun with this one. Thank you author.

Just my opinion, but I thought it was great.

Thank you

This was really good, enjoyed it, tongue-in-cheek & humorous. thanks, you should keep on writing like this.

it read like you had written it in one day,,,sorta,,,kinda.

I do not know whether I liked it or not. It was different, I give you that. I guess a 50 conveys my sentiment.

I think about every emotion was covered in this story. Really serious at times to down right funny. Outrageous sex to gentle love was described through out the story as well.Thank You for the very good work......Rich

I chortled. I snickered, and then I blew coffee all over my monitor. Way to go … CS. You are forgiven for taking a day away from Sophia. Just don’t let it happen again.

Nice good read, fun and sad at times a bit tongue in cheek, I'll call this cheeky!

great story, funny and serious at the same time. . . i guess i identified with Steve a bit. good work :)

Nice funny story, liked it a lot. No, I LOVED it and I usually can't stand infidelity stories. There were some wrong word usage and typos, but beyond that was a well written story.

fun reading the story. very enjoyable. especially the women's thoughts.

I enjoyed it, thanks!

I very seldom laugh out loud while reading a story .. I did

for this one...several times . Please continue. Where is Sophia??

Really it was absurdly pleasant, a comment on our social

structure and a teenager's fantasy all at the same time.

Thanks!

But, not bad.

Another good and funny story the ending was better at the end .

Pat

Atlanta

After three pages of repetitive self promotion (the beast the beauty the stamina and on and on) and snail paced plot I was exhausted. Don't mind me though, the majority seems to like it.

Is a 75% to go with the 50% I gave you at the start of the comments. That's 125% I have given you now.

Such an enjoyable story. This is the first read for me of any of your stories listed in literotica, but certainly not my last.

This is a very enjoyable story. I can't tell you how much it imporved my afternoon. I don't see any reason that this level of writing shouldn't be published. Have you approached any magazines? It is certainly better then many things that I have seen. Keep up this caliber of writing and your fan base will become huge. anon jerry

Dry wit, sophmoric humor, slapstick, and erotica! You've covered the gamut. The women were the best part of it for me, especially Rosemary. Thank you for brigtening my whole day!

complete bollocks, fun and enjoyable but definitely bollocks

<p>This story is completly original as far as i can tell.</p>

<p>It is well written; with sex, humor, cheating, revenge and redemption --- all the things, that is, that make life worth living.</p>

<p> It's a long story but well worth the time investment. </p>

I had more fun reading it than I have in a long time. Thank you so much for your story. It looks like I'll have to add another one to my list of favorites.

I have not enjoyed a story this much in a long time. Damn I have a smile on my face a mile wide!! "Thank You"

I LOVED IT!! This has to be one of the Best stories I've read in FOREVER!

IT Was SO Enjoyable to READ! Nice Guys don't always finish Last!@

Silly, fun, erotic and well written. What's not to like?

Thanks for the funny, cheery, well written quickie.

Was fun to read and I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Oh, to have Steve's problems. A sex drive that won't stop and a stable of women who are only too eager to feed it. It makes it even funnier that the women are all "ugly" and Steve could not care less. And then he starts agonizing over not respecting the women as they push him more and more into a hotter sex life. What a harem he has and oh,BTW, he and his wife are in charge of an extremely successful company. I know it's all a goof but these women and Steve are completely devoted to each other, as silly as it is written at times. Isn't that what would really make the best possible relationship we could want? Someone totally in love with and committed to us? An extremely pleasurable read.

Funny and interesting story with lots of humanity. That's something missing in too many LW stories. It hasn't been so long that this was posted and I hope you've been gently guided to work on your grammar and writing skills. You could eliminate 3/4 of your commas to good effect and make your sentences flow better.

I loved it. I don't care, that was funny as hell. Maybe you need to write more of this stuff and we'll create a new section.....Erotic Comedy???? LOL

THANK YOU....

First, let me say I enjoyed the story a lot. It was funny, full of gratuitous sex (what other kind is there?), and the characters were totally unbelievable.

But it looked, like you got, ill at some point and, vomited all, over the manuscript. You must have, eaten, at least a, quart of commas the previous, night and they, stuck to the, sentences in the strangest, places. It made your, sentences look awkward and, difficult to read, smoothly.

Ya know what I mean?

Oh what a fun, fun, read! Thanks a lot.

I enjoyed this very much, normally I am not into multiple relationships but you did this story very well and made it a real hoot to read. R.T.

A most significant entertainment of a decade?

Superbly written and executed. Well worth 5* and more!

This would be a VERY hilarious replacement for that venerable old movie script. We'd all be dying laughing in the aisles. I'd be in line for the first ticket.

good job.....humorous story, loved bob the beast.

Hi...... This is a great story. Like obviously many others, I have thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It seems a shame you have not written for so long. I look forward to reading a new story from you soon. Many thanks.

so much fun to read. love it!

Hillarious, pretty funny story. Guess things did work out for him in the end.

Please Sir! May we have another?

I for one miss his work.

Auto accident, I think I read somewhere.

Greensomething

I read the comment below regarding the authors possible death. I pray that isn't the case. Love your work.

It is good to be king. It is good to be Steve.

I actually enjoyed this story..... A lot ! The only thing I didn't care for was shelia the ex slut wife. I think it's a mistake having sex with her, if she really enjoyed her & Steve's fucking why did she cheat? It makes no sense to bring the trash back into the house. I would've left the slut on the door steps that night she poped her dirty ass over there--- but hey I'm not a man .

You said …

"if she really enjoyed her & Steve's fucking why did she cheat?"

My take on that is that his sexual prowess increased once the beast had been released and catching her cheating triggered the release, so perhaps their former sex life wasn't so energetic?

As for why let the ex-wife back - at the time he viewed her as Mother of his children rather than cheating slut. Its the only reason there could be.

Well that's my take on your questions.

His name is Fred. He wants to talk to Bob to get some tips. He says I do not let him out to play.... LOL!!! Great story

Bob, Rex and Fluffy.

Hmmmmmm...

Sounds like play time :-D

Thx!

Not a big moral lesson, or even vaguely realitic. Just funny. That's enough to get five stars.

I went really well for 4+ pages - even realistic enough in it's own way -

THEN wham right turn to just plain bullshit FUN!!

Beyond the harem dream - right to the primal me man! want you! you woman! you want me - NOW!! and all with mostly functional, intelligent adults LOL

Loved it, it never took itself seriously for one second, and just had a ball! More, please!

Definitely 5 stars, you rock!

I liked the hell out of it. Five Stars!

the title says it all

I am so glad I stumbled on to this story gotta love the rare Harem LW stories

Give me $350,000 in any settlement and see how long and well i can live on it,and not run back to that man,lol,,,,it was cute,had to laugh as it progressed actually,,,but a good read,

the lawyer heather misses her chance to be in the harem :)

but then it got to be TOO tongue in cheek...

Fun and cheerful at the midpoint to the end. It got crazy in the ending and Bob and the Beast were phenomenal touches.

Loved it! This one was about as kickass as you can get! :D

5 HUGE Stars!

Makes my day. If you would only write again .

...and it still brings a big smile to my face. Just the right touch of humor and serious.

I can say that this is one of the few that I really enjoyed. Very good story, kept me at the edge of my seat. I Loved it. Please Keep up the good work.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Very entertaining from violent to vengeful to sexy to amusing.

Just a whirlwind of a story,totally fun just what I needed after

reading the way most of the caught cheating stories end.

Bravo looking forward to reading more of your work,Thanks.

Loved the story! Was a very nice ride, and I really enjoyed it.

It started out as a realistic and poignant story of a man who seriously cared about his family but devolved into utter silliness. An insecure, betrayed husband becomes a super stud (cyborg) who has a harem?

And, if he is suppose to be so pretty, who do all the women in his life have to be ugly?

One other bone to pick. I lost respect for him during this segment:

" . . . Only problem is, while I can eat you all day. I'm not fond of tasting my own semen. Would you mind washing yourself out?"

What a jerk! It is OK for him to get oral but she has to "wash" herself out before he will return the favor? Come on pretty boy, grow a pair.

I think the story doesn't fit in Loving Wives all that well, because it clearly doesn't take itself very serious. That said, I enjoyed the read, as little substance as it had.

This is a story that no serious reader ought to miss...if only to get the seriousness off his/her face and replace it with a smile, a laugh and some very wonderful fun. A laughing out loud great story. The descriptions of the sex with Rosemary are as enjoyable as could be!!!!!!!

Silly? Maybe.

Fun? Will be some time before I lose the smile now adorning my face.

Just about perfect, this had a little of everything a good tale should, hatred, revenge, suspense ( sort of) but most important some really good hearted humour. Well done it was a very enjoyable read.

Rightbank, you were correct, some men just can't stand to taste their own semen. I have always said to those that would not kiss a woman who had just sucked their dick to completion that they were foolish and non-thinking. While it has never been my favorite thing I love eating pussy and unless it smells like dead fish (and I have met a few, some so bad that the smell clung to you for 48 hours) I was glad to do it. Don't condemn a man who is a little squeamish, probably has something to do with his early training. (Not meaning to be highly critical, Rightbank.)

Author, while unrealistic at times, I loved your story. I have no criticism, it was delightful at the end. Thank you for writing. Lamar

Hilarious! Five stars.

It is Not a one way street. Personal hygiene also works both ways.

I love bringing the love of my life to her ultimate satisfaction by any and all means at my disposal. I took three years of massage classes so I could bring her to a level of serenity she had never before experienced. Those classes also taught me to pay attention to her physical response to my ministrations. Her pleasure brings me my happiness.

I cannot imagine asking her to rid herself of any remnant of me before bringing her to the heights of passion.

paraphrasing Forest Gump:

happiness is like a box of chocolates

maybe I am being a bit greedy, but . . .

please may I have your cream filling?

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Like a KID in a candy store.

This story is preposterous. I didn, t stop reading until I finished. shophia is a equally as crazyI recomend it highly if you have sometime. Including the ending written by northlander

Thank you

I thought I had read all kinds of stories on this site...BUT... I have just read one of the most fun reads in a long, long time. This story brought a very big grin to my face. It really entertained me. At the beginning, I thought it was a normal 'loving wives' tale but was I surprised. Thank You for writing a highly entertaining and amusing tale.

Almost unreadable. You really should learn how to use commas, cause you just seem to put them randomly. Needs editing. Badly.

can't you tell us who is telling the story when the pov changes?

Best read in ages. Just about every cliche from every LW tale ever told. 5*

take themselves far too seriously. I just read all the comments. Lighten up people. Think satire. Think Beauty and the Beast. The author had a lot of fun writing it. Just enjoy!

I found this story to be hysterical - my favorite was renaming the Beast and calling him Bob. Of course he'd like his new name.

Thanks for sharing!

I enjoyed this very much thank you.

something in his mind snapped when he caught his now ex wife cheating poor guy is having a rough time with his life

Thanks for the giggle :)

I liked it ...alot

and can be a perfect gentleman. We have the renaissance man redux. TK U MLJ LV NV

CastleStone had to have an incredible amount of fun writing this. Aside from having the top fall off the comma shaker it was a tremendous tour de force in demonstrative carnality.

Since it was apparently written in one sitting it didn't seem to get the benefit of a lengthy overall editing. Sometimes it was difficult to understand who we were following in the narrative. It is worth the effort to track who is talking/narrating as there are several levels of information/communication going on, all of them fun.

This is one of the best story's on this site! I can only imagine myself in his place for surely he has found heaven on earth!!!

5*

I couldn't stop grinning throughout the last half. Thank you for a fun story.

Chimo1961

After a crazy frustrating work day, this read granted me the laugh I so needed!

Great story

.....totally insane piece of fiction..

Kinda a downer that he's apparently only attracted to ugly women, but as a piece of comedy it's pretty funny to see the harem being built.

please get an editor to sort out the excessive and incorrect use of commas - it made the flow of the sentences difficult and had me re-reading some to understand what you were actually trying to say. Small point I know, but it would have the made an enjoyable story even more enjoyable to read.

Still really liked it though because it made me laugh.

this was a way to begin a personal harem and not Procul. TK U MLJ LV NV

Okay, to all the annoying annon commentators, This is fiction, and in NOT REAL, as in a comedy! It's not supposed to be real, it's supposed to be FUNNY. The author even stated such at the beginning of the story. I mean you can sit there and complain about the editing, but what about the fact you can't read the introduction? Oh and by the way this is FREE entertainment so you got your moneys worth, so quit your bitchin!

Now to the author. As an author myself, I say yes you have an issue with run on sentences and the use of the comma over the period to break up the sentence structure. But like one of my mentors once told me, "it is hard to write funny" the rest is just mechanics. You can learn mechanics but it takes talent to write humor. So, keep up the good words.

Myhands316

Too think I wasted my time reading this crap

and then turned into crap. You completely fucked up the stry from the moment you brought Sheila back into his life and the whole harem storyline was absolutely dumb.

You write like a horny teenager

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Your advice is about commas is correct but ill timed. CastleStone has been dead for quite some time. And, I believe, still missed. (And look at those commas! Straight from Strunk and White's Style Manual.) This could have been split into two stories: a serious cheating/divorce story and the harem farce. I enjoyed it anyway! JPR

What a delightfully crazy story!

So glad my fellow commentators

have a healty humour.

Top ratings.

A nice short.

4-stars.