All Comments on 'Quantum Entanglement'

Even a good author submits a lemon now and then, still looking forward to next week tho

It wasn't as intense as some of your stories or as many LW stories are. Sam was not an excitable guy so everything was just dealt with except when he finds Chavonne getting fucked. Then he runs away, a cliché reaction. His generally calm reaction leads to my major criticism. Rigging the hot tub to kill his ex-wife is completely out of character for him. Alice was no real threat to Sam. Annoying, yes. Any significant trouble, no. Why would he lower himself to murder her or the gorilla? Sam is wealthy, well known and well respected, and he has a family that adores him. Why would he risk any of that to kill a couple people who are less than nothing to him. It was gratuitous violence and a major over reaction. Alice cheated on him once. She didn't try to hurt or humiliate him. He divorced her. That seems a fair response. The gorilla punched him twice because Sam was dumb enough to provoke a confrontation with someone much stronger than him. He already got revenge for that by dislocating the guy's elbow and knocking him out. <br><br>

But I liked the overall story. I liked the evolution of Sam from shabby clueless nerd to cool science guy. I loved Sammi, a very cool kid. Chavonne was a bit of a dope but a real loving wife. It was fun to see the hunted become the hunter. She finally got him. Alice was a bit of a problem because she was supposed to be smart. After all, he picked her for her intelligence. But then she acts like an over the top Bond villain. Too smart for her own good? Maybe. But she seems stupid.

Wow!! Chinese scientists proved that a photon can't exceed the speed of light! A photon is the smallest unit of light so essentially you were trying to impress us by saying that they proved light can't travel faster than light. Any rocket scientist or engineer knows that. Perhaps even the occasional auto mechanic. Besides, almost a century ago Eienstein established that light speed is not only constant, but the upper speed limit for anything. Moron!

Loved it.

keep writing your heading towards OHIO, DG HEAR, K.K. type status

I look forward to your stuff

Loved your getting Harry in VA into the story as an "expert" along with your usual Mustangs. To the brilliant anonymous who was so glad to criticize the technical parts of your story....to him I would say that I would be MUCH more impressed with his comments if he would proudly list his name, and define his education and credentials to offer expert comment to your story. Me, I couldn't begin to tell the difference between a black hole and a fishing hole, but I feel the author is allowed some leeway in the technical data a story is based on. And let's face it, it is doubtful one in a hundred of Stangstar06's readers have the necessary expertise to discuss the Physics topics mentioned in this story, nor do I think they care one way or the other. Give Stangstar06 a break Anonymous, for crying out loud we get a new, long story once a week. And now you want him to spend hours in the library making sure every technical detail is correct.....Sheesh! Thanks Stangstar06 for writing for us and sharing your gift. I for one am proud to say my name and tell you how much I appreciate reading each new story on Thursday! Keep up the exceptional work. Now if DSQ would just pump out another one.....sigh

with Dusty_Dingo..you are writing like K.K.Etc.

Good Story

thanks your stories amuse entertain and enlighten

keep writing

oh, very cute...

very very cute...

you've made quantum leaps of improvement in your writing...

one of your better ones for sure...

please keep up the good work...

If I'm not mistaken, Stang, in his character's reference to QE, Chinese scientists, and that photons can't travel faster than the speed of light, was simply adding some flavor based on a recent news item that supposedly dispels the notion of time travel being possible.

Chinese scientists in Hong Kong specifically stated they've proven that a "single" photon cannot exceed the speed of light as previously believed, thus information cannot be sent into the past (or the future), as some other researchers believed.

I know it sounds inane, after all, we all know that the speed of light is a constant and a absolute...right? Heheh

If anyone is interested in looking deeper into this, then do a search using "Los Angles Times + It's official: Time machines won't work"

Enjoy your stories, Stang...Keep it up!

SS hits hard and efficiently just like the new Sam. He is truly impressive!

Why argue about minor differences or such. It's the work of a great author with many great stories. Period. Congratulations Stang.

I was worried for a moment, you had the Prof looking like a big pussy, but you change him with time, and living life. Nice touch, and only a writer such as you could bump off the wife and make look smooth, Nice story,,,,25 stars

"Call me a wimp if you have to, but I still loved her." Okay; "You're A Wimp!"

Lemme 'splain it to you scientifically; When strange cock penetration occurs it will cause the twat (and the twit) to become contaminated. When the wimp penetrates the tainted twat it causes their dick to become fictitious and superfluous.

While still believing they are men, they don't noticed that they are starting to grow a vagina, and have in fact, become what we term as: “Non-Men!”

By marrying tainted twat, they become what we term as: "Looser!"

With continued sexual contact the balls will start to shrivel, and eventually fall off, while the penis takes on the characteristics of a clitoris.

Now, Chavonne may not be a black hole, but she’s definitely a hole with big tits, and I'm sure she would make a wonderful fuck buddy.

But no matter how long they manage to keep their legs together (and by Literotica/LW standards nine years is next to nothing. I recollect that one of our more esteemed wimp writers had one slut stay chaste for over fifty years. But anyway I digress), a sluts a slut!

As an up and coming esteemed semi-wimp writer I did decide to give you a two which is one more then I usually give wimp writers. I know, I know, you probably think ol zed0 is getting soft, but it was a compelling and somewhat enjoyable (albeit a little long) read, even after it became apparent that the story was headed towards a dismal wimp-out ending.

Face it, a real man with celebrity status, and with unlimited pussy at his disposal, would feel little or no need to actually get married, and if he did marry it certainly wouldn't be to some knocked-up slut from nine years ago.

I'm afraid you're going to have to change your name to something a little more appropriate, like Subaru-Stang, or Kia-Star, as Ford dealers will probably no longer want to sell you a Mustang.

he turned it around, I hate cheating slut as much as the next man. In this case I don't agree with you. And as far as StangStar goes, a kia please the dude can write, just because you have the writing skills of a lima and drive a Ugo there is no need to hate on the best writer since Joesephus. And he was the best slap a bitch down writer here.

StangStar is right there, so quit hating. Their are enough cuckold loving writers here to keep you busy.

An interesting and well written story as usual... 5 stars

The only problems is his choice of car!! A real stylish car would be better than just muscles - a Jag for instance! Cat is sleeker than pony! *****

99.9% of the stories in here are pure garbage. Then, there is yours! There needs to be a special category for you and the very few authors like you (maybe five or less). Wonderful.

Incidentally, I'm a physicist and I teach.

Telling us your character is smart....over and over again.....doesnt work when they dont ever really show it. Well, maybe he did a little, but knowing almost as much about black holes as a wikipedia page doesnt cut it.

Also, my grandma was an incredible woman whose friends were married to servicemen, and she once famously told one of those men (just coming home from being at sea for months) "Any woman who tells you she hasnt had sex in four months is lying, and any man who believes her deserves everything he gets." women are people, and people dont go ten years without sex unless they flat out dont like sex.

You don't write stories anymore, you write "Life".

FACT CHECK! What was built between 1973 and 2004 could not be called Mustangs ( personal opinion of course)

in an European marriage, spouses don't find it normal to cheat either. That remark in the story was blatant prejudice or racism.

the name of one reader,at least, who LOVED the story. My name. The tale was captivating and (even more importantly) lovely. Of course, the result of the quantum entanglement would be the creation of a new universe (or, perhaps, human being). One criticism, if I may: why in the world would you have the otherwise intelligent child. Samantha, utter the expletive, "You Betcha"? That expletive hardly conjures up a picture of intelligence, surely not competence.

Stangsta, you da gangsta! Fuck the facts, get to the truth. If your critics are so damn interested in theoretical physics, what are they doing here? This is FICTION--it isn't real! And it's a great story. So suspend your disbelief, trolls, and get with the program.

I've enjoyed it very much. A story mixing a novel sense of humour (I enjoyed it anyway even if some didn't seem to get it) with good dose of reminders that no matter what our IQ is, after all, we're just ... humans.

I am not a fan of the hero murdering two people he disliked, as tempting as it was. Heroes don't really do that, unless the level of betrayal involves death and injury to innocents. Jack Bauer knew when someone needed a lead pill. The other thing I notice is that once again the errant wife/lover is taken back after a period of years. Somehow, time seems to make all the difference to many readers. They both lost eight or nine years and he missed his daughter's birth and early childhood. The strong silent types that up and leave without some sort of closure are not really that strong. Good story, less than admirable characters, but that's human, isn't it?

Re. Anon comment about Europe. Having lived in Europe for many years, I can assure you that in some countries having a mistress or a lover is considered in some circles a "social must". It is even public knowledge and people don't make a big fuss about it. From the couple Jean Paul Sartre and Simone de Beauvoir to Francois Mitterand who had a mistress and a daughter while President of France.

There is absolutely nothing "racist" about those comments. It is a fact. For further reference, try this:

http://www.newstatesman.com/200103120016

I enjoyed you latest posting but then I usually enjoy your work. It was cool the way you got the Mustang into this story.

One little dislike on my part. I feel his actions with the hot tub were a bit extreme. There were better ways to handle it but then again when someone is trying to destroy you and your loved ones you will take steps that you might normally avoid.

Good story. Please keep writing and we'll keep reading.

Thanks for your hard work.

Woodmanone

What Zed0 said!!!

It's like... he was in my brain or somefink. I simply cannot refute his thesis. He spoke in absolutes. His theories are correct.

Good story thanks SS. As for 'sojoman' you believe all the smut and garbage trash newpapers and gossiping tv programmes all you want. Toyboys and mistresses are NOT common among the common people of Europe. And NOT accepted by the general public. The stars and celebs of the moment it might be but then live in fantasy land.

The good? Funny, extremely unique characters (I don't remember any other theoretical physicists in other LW stories), and a happy ending. Yes, a happy ending with daddy, mommy, and child all reunited.

The bad? Cliche on many, many levels. Let's see: bad guy murdered; good guy becomes martial arts expert; ex-wife dead; new wife absolutely celibate for 9 years to prove her fidelity; daddy, upon being betrayed, suddenly becomes hunky and good looking and famous and all that; daddy runs off and never knows he has a child who he now just adores and loves and doesn't feel too much pain or guilt about having abandoned because he didn't bother opening a single letter for nine years. Of course, I'd love to bitch about all of this, but I use many of these plot devices myself, and I still rarely manage to make the endings, or the ride there, nearly as enjoyable.

P.S. If he was still reading his mother's letters, why didn't she mention her new grandchild even once?

Why is this story line still being used? A guy's girlfriend/wife/ex-wife has his baby and never tells him. The kid grows up without a father. The guy never sees the kid as a baby, never holds the baby, never plays with the baby, never hears the first words, never sees the first steps, never worries about the fevers, about moving from a crib to a junior bed, never had to soothe night terrors, never did anything that any father knows is the MOST IMPORTANT THING in the world.

But it's okay. It's okay never to know you have a child because in this story line the girlfriend/ex-wife/wife was soooooooooo in love and soooooo ashamed/embarrassed to put four words on paper, to have 4 words relayed to him, to say 4 words on the phone: you have a child.

This story line is a crock of awfulness. It should be retired.

I know these stories are male fantasies but this isn't a fantasy; it's a nightmare. It's the worst thing in the world to miss your child's life for such a freaking stupid reason.

This is probably the best I've read on this site, nice work.

Okay, so the INTELLIGENT/etc in all caps became a bit tiring.

[And, not being a rocket scientist or physics professor, I presumed that "quantum entanglement" was a fabricated plot device. Until Google reflected 377,000 hits...]

Great story! And most definitely, an engaging storyline presented in a unique fasion.

Good work!

Actually, from the story, Chavonne may have tried to tell Sam about their daughter. Remember those unopened letters and cards she sent.

Great read, happy to see you on top of your game once again.

Damn good one Stang 'nuff said

is that I get pissed, even at my advanced and, supposedly, very intelligent years, with some of the really dumbass comments and don't have the time to respond to each of them individually on your behalf. BUT, you just keep right on writing them this good, and I WILL live through it.

D n D

Great to have you back here on Thursdays - the identifiable commentators (especially Harry in VA) add tremendously to the enjoyment of a story. I do wish one of them would enlighten us as to how the Angel of Death would have viewed the "danger" sign, even misspelled, as a complete defense or mitigating factor. The recent news item about the single particle speed limit may answer the question of whether you are writing at an astounding pace or dribbling out a stash of stories. Either way, thanks for writing.

Certainly some more than others, but this one is different! Perhaps it was just me and my limited and aging perspective, but I felt you were into a stereotype and your stories were, although well written and enjoyable, beginning to look very much alike. This one, for me at least, broke the pattern. Well conceived and well written. Thanks for all the time, energy and talent you put into entertaining your fans, among whom I'm pleased to be!

Tis is a kind story I like it but:

1. Dear StangStar06 Einstein is not Chinese: No material goes quiclier then the light in vakuum is from the special relativity.

2. Sometimes your characters get suiced or to kill others.

BTW 5 stars

the story was well written. the explanation of the perception of the"put down" by char. you took care of my "cheating wife" fetish and wrote a good story. thanks

<p>....my old mentor, Professor Harry in Va. several times and he'd tried again to teach me a few things. I think I understood some of them....</p>

<p>ROFL! I'm cleaning coffee out of my keyboard...</p>

...as well as Harry in VA is not a professor. Anons, don't you get the humor of this brilliant story? Leave the author alone with your out-of-place critics.

Once again an excellent work - thank you, Stang! I'm waiting for next Thursday!

5*

super story!!

Enjoyable. Although, I did get a bit ill when he vistied Virginia, and I felt as though I was a wanderer, perhaps in Denham Forest, when he finally realized he had a daughter.

Your story is well-told even if the plot has been done many times before. I do have a problem with your portrayal of our hero Sam. This passive-aggressive portrait bothers me. Chavonne is finally pardoned after nine years of sexual abstinence playing the virtuous "widow" while still being an absolute sexual bombshell and, oh yes, presenting him with the perfect adoring daughter who is his clone and comes complete with a DNA certificate! It must be nice for Sam whose conscience is completely clear after spending the last decade oblivious to any family matters at home while enjoying the benefit of his celebrityhood to screw around indiscriminately. As for Alice, hmm, well let's see: Sam married her even though he didn't love her and didn't find her attractive. So obviously the adultery was entirely her fault so let's make her a one-dimensional ogre for the rest of the story. Finally, let us hope that Chavonne and her daughter live happily ever after with their cold-blooded multiple murderer. He's not my hero.

You have significant talent as a story teller and are really good with dialogue. It's just the Sam character that bothers me here.

I enjoyed the references to Harry, and all of the physics jargon, and was captured by the real heart of the story which was undying love from Chavonne.

A happy ending always makes the story even better.

A well written and well edited story and a joy to read.

Thanks for the story

Didn't like the killing. Otherwise, a good story.

it was a good story - but then you had to add successful murder into it. it ruined it for me.

This hate is focused on Married Sluts mostly. Bottom line: for me this time it's okay. For one thing, their were not married and had never agreed to be exclusive. Now, there is little doubt he believed them to be exclusive but they were NOT.

In fact, one thing I did not like was the nine year delay in reconciliation. The kid needed a Dad.

The main objection I have to the story is the complete lack of surprise as to the reconciliation. The story telegraphed the ending from almost the beginning.

I thought the double homicide in the hot tube was a great twist.

The Ex and the gorilla deserved each other and it was good they could go out together.

Stang,

Nothing from Harry yet?

Yellow 01 convertable GT + this, + that, + Roush, + new spoiler just painted, again. Back to the read.

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Not the story concept, that was ok. But depicting Harry as intelligent? C'Mon Man that's just way too much!

Still as almost always, a good story.

I - love a cliche

what can I say - every Thursday

I love a cliche.

This - was better than most

Though patently pedantic - mainly didactic

Still better than most.

Stang - understands comfort food

At times I've a mood - for non-nutritious

Simply delicious comfort food.

So Thursdays are like mac & cheese

So gooey, so cheesy, at times even pleasing

Just like StangStar stories.

What a story. Gonna take a big channel lock to pull ss06's tongue out of his cheek.

at first I thought maybe this was some sort of clue that SS06 and HIV are the same person?

then I thought since this was fantasy making HIV to be super wise almost Zen like person was sting at Harry.

Now I dont know wnat to make of it, except that he has NOT responded yet, which stikes me as a little odd

Stang has been busy it seems with several new stories. His GILF one took the old cliches and added some new twists, but this one didn't really tread new ground.

I did see that there are signs that Stang is trying to add mroe character development in. This story definitely has Sam undergoing a number of changes through the story, and msot of them made sense. However, nine years away from his mother was very unrealistic. And while I can beleive some people might be able to keep a secret, this is one that would have come out if he was as visible a celebrity as you say. After all Greg had plenty of reason to hate him and a whisper campaign that he had abandoned his daughter Samantha would have hurt Sam's reputation in the media world. Yes, you had Greg wanting to be the father, but at some point he's would have taken some action.

Alice also comes in for the usual complete lack of development. She's not quite as insane as your femme fatale from Hostile Takeover, but the same obsessive stupidity reigned supreme in her. The truth is that she actually added nothing to the main plot line except for being a convenient foil and ally to Greg, who also wasn't that important.

It was the dance of Sam and Chavoone. You could have left the whole first marriage out and still had an interesting story.

And that's the flaw. This was predictable and cliched. Stang you are improving as a writer, and you are writing constantly which is the best way to improve. But you do need to put some thought into the plots and try to make them truly unique. This story was not that much different from hundreds of others, and you did nothing to make the characters draw in readers. Your regulars will enjoy this, but its not your best.

And for those who thought Sam was a "wimp". Why? For taking Chavonne back? As others pointed out there weren't "exclusive" yet, and its clear that she did want to be loyal to him. There is a risk she'll slip again, but some women do learn after getting caught, and I have a feeling that Chavonne wouldn't be one to cheat again. So I can accept this reconcillation as one where love did conquer the demons of lust and jealousy.

besides the 9 year gap (far to much) and the double murder. both would not have been needed and did not ad a bit to the story.

Sorry, But your stories have been getting worse, and worse. Seems forced. Not to mention the cheating was ridiculous, Made the story completely unplausable.

Well worth the five stars.

Would have been a better story without the murders.

Why is Harry in VA silent?

SS6 stolen story. I have read this story a couple of times on Lit. The serial number was filed off and the names changed to protect the inocent. The guy catches wife/girl friend with another man and takes off for ten years and comes back to find out he has a 9yr old daughter. Or how about the story of a car with a personality. And he has to use old TV show names for his characters. Or he steels characters from other Lit stories. When will he write something original???????????????

You're going to spoil us. Amazing work as usual.

Don't worry about the slurs tossed about by those who hide behind the veil of anonymity (even among usernames). The story was amusing and worthwhile read. As for the criticisms, obviously the most venomous "anon" hasn't done any real research on the number of readily available plotlines for tales, nor has he/she considered that every character has to be named something and the car in question certainly resembled no car with a personality from popular media, though it's a vehicle any muscle car afficianado would drool over. It is also noteworthy that hiding behind anonymity allows the critic to forego having to prove his literary mettle by posting his or her own story. Though I'm of a mind anyway to challenge them to do better. In other words, put up or shut up.

but this story was far below the usual Stangstar efforts. I have to agree with the person who said "phoned it in." This story is like a compilation of all the most tired "loving wives" cliches. And so many wildly unrealistic things. Like a professor leaving his university for NINE solid years! I don't care if he's fucking Einstein, that could never happen. Things like that show the author either didn't care to have any reality check or just didn't put much effort into polishing the story. I really hope this was just a rare lemon and we see the usual quality return. It's great that the author posts a new story once a week, but I would prefer quality over quantity if time pressure results in a story like this.

It is a great story like you always do. Thanks for doing it and I can't wait to read more of them

I have skipped the last several stories posted by StangStar because the last story I read by him was to JustPlainBob-ish for me. For some reason I thought I'd give this one a try and ended up disappointed.

I would have been triple pissed if she told me that after finding out she was pregnant with my kid that she would have sex with someone else and even more pissed when she tried to justify it with the excuse of pregnancy hormones and being stupid. Even a 10 year old knows that mommy or daddy shouldn't cheat on each other whether they understand sex or not. Chevonne is an untrust worthy dirty whore...plain and simple.

I dont have a problem giving this story a 5. Thanks. liked the story.

I thought it was very well written. Looking forward to the next one!!

The story overall was great 5 stars. Problem is there were some instances where the main character was doing deep thinking and did not have any resolution. 1. Should I tell her I have been having sex. 2. Why did she not contact him the whole time or at least the mother contact him. 3. The child is smart, why is she not in some specialized school. Those are a couple questions off the top of my head.

I had no trouble enjoying this it was erotic and a good read everything it should be;)

A very good story! I always like your work. You are a very talented writer indeed. I am thus looking forward to your next story with anticipation! Although I liked it, I have some minor quibbles with this story though…

1. The reference to “European morals” is blatantly untrue. Adultery is frowned upon as much in Europe as in the USA. But adultery happens everywhere, not only in Europe but also in the USA.

2. He doesn’t go home for over nine years? Not even meeting his mother during this period? That’s quite a stretch and not very believable… It would have been far more believable if the elapsed time period had been shorter. What I don’t understand is why his mother – who knew of and accepted her grandchild – never tried to communicate this little fact to him.

3. Chavonne is being made as if she is a beautiful dummy and some of her actions do warrant that description… but if she’s a dummy, then how did she ever manage to enter university in the first place? Her test scores or results from high school needed to be high enough to warrant that… and yet she’s depicted as a beautiful idiot… a bit too brutal and inconsequential methinks.

4. BTW How do you misspell “danger”? Ha Ha!

5. The killing at the end is a bit out of character and too extreme. On the one hand, the “conspirators” ignored a clear warning sign so they never should have entered the bath (they never should have entered an other man’s property in general), but on the other hand he explicitly created the circumstances leading to the electrocution on purpose… You should have found an other way to bring the bad guy and ex-wife down that didn’t involve murder.

Full disclosure: tenured physics faculty at a medium New England university. I have also worked at tier 1 research schools and ivies.

Of course the plot line isn't wholly original, but that's inevitable within such a narrow genre. One of the reasons I look forward to Stang's work is he puts his own spin on things and makes it interesting. (See, e.g., his GILF story.) However a danger with this is when the plot seems predictable the reader has time to notice other details and find inconsistencies.

One of the most annoying cliches is the man having a child and not knowing about it for years. This is so difficult to make plausible with current communication and Stang doesn't quite pull it off here. Sure he'll ditch letters from Chavonne, but why write "we need to talk!" on the outside? How about "YOU'RE A DADDY!" as an attention getter? Since she is obviously talking to the mother, how about having mom send a letter with a picture? He'd at least open the envelope. Or how about an official report from the DNA testing lab? People of that stature who travel that much often have people who open and track their snail mail for them. She could even get someone from the university to arrange for him to get the information, since from their POV it's a great human interest story. For that matter, if Chavonne is getting desperate, why no e-mails from her, mom, or the university? Just sayin'.

Now for some academic stuff. I realize that the story is not a treatise on academia or physics, but I found the following things distracting (and hence bad for the story).

The title "Dean of the Physics Department" is a Russian or eastern European usage. In the US universities have department chairs and deans run entire colleges or similar-sized divisions. And Alice should have been vying for "Associate Dean" and not "Assistant Dean." The assistant dean is basically a secretary, not a faculty member. (Yes, it's stupid but call almost any Associate Dean an Assistant Dean once and you'll never do it again.)

As for professor-student affairs, yes they occur but they are a HUGE liability for the school and the faculty member. Multimillion dollar lawsuits and bad publicity. Any flavor of sexual harassment is one of the few ways to end the career of tenured faculty. People will look the other way up to a point, but at the very least the department would move heaven and earth to at least switch her into someone else's lecture to protect the university from lawsuit. And if Sam's so practical, it should have been easy to convince him to let her switch classes or wait until the end of the semester to let her move in. Seriously, with this motivation the dean will force residence life to suddenly "find" a spot in the dorms for her.

You say "she was worried about how I'd take the news that she had failed my class." Um, wouldn't he know before she did since he's submitting the grade? Plus he couldn't convince the best tutor to take her on and help her pass?

While it is possible for an exceptional professor to take a leave of absence or sabbatical for an extended period of time, after three or four years you're basically a show piece and must support yourself (i.e., we'll keep you on the masthead but we won't pay you a big salary). This also means it is highly unlikely you would be offered a "nuts and bolts" job like chair rather than an endowed PR-centered position like Yale's "Sterling Professor of the Sciences."

Finally, you seem to be mixing disciplines within physics. I can forgive subtle misstatements (I'm used to it in TV and fiction) but saying "scientists have only studied QE in terms of single particles" is a howler. Forgive me, but it takes two to entangle. Almost all of the research in entanglement has been with pairs of discrete particles.

Again, overall it was a good presentation of a familiar plot and I realize that with Stang's rate of output he's not going to do that much research into academia and physics. A solid 4 out of 5 from me. Please keep it up!

Nice story. ok, maybe not realistic but what the hell, I liked it.

as other readers have pointed out there are some big issues as well.

For me, as for some of the others, the biggest problem is the 9-years-away issue. It's a very unconvincing plot device. As one reader above suggests, Chavonne could write "You are the father of our daughter!" on an envelope, and that would bring him home.

Or, for Chrissakes, his mother could find out where he's giving a talk and go to it, then catch him afterwards. With pictures.

In short, even angry betrayed husbands or lovers don't absent themselves for 9 years. Perhaps if they run away to South America or go underground--but this guy was a big frigging TV star.

As an author who struggles with my own plots and plot devices, I sympathize--but when you make your character do something wildly implausible, just to get the story where you want it to go, then for some readers at least the suspension of disbelief becomes impossible, which is what happened here for me.

(There are some other clichés here as well, but this one bothered me the most.)

So--thanks for letting me share my (I hope) constructive criticism. You write with feeling and often with wonderful humor. Keep posting your work for us!

Thanks, ohio

Fun on a bun well done! I love it when an author winks at the reader and your winks to me (alright and to everyone else on Literotica) with Harry and your winks with the Mustangs are so much fun to read! You, StangStar, create such a warm connection and affinity with the reader. It is utterly endearing with those winks. God I hope I am not sounding mawkish...I wanna be hawkish..."I wanna be adored, you adore me, you adore me" "He's already in me!". Anyway, this was a stimulating and enjoyable treat. Thank you!

He takes back the second woman who cheated on him because "He loves her." She'll do it again if she can find someone better than the purple pleaser. Also, the killing of the ex and Greg can never be justified to me in any way. As with most of your stories, you make it three-quarters of the way through, and then you do something to ruin the whole thing.

And, all it takes is to be as annoying as possible with your comments to earn cameo in a story? I know Harry in VA will NOT go away, even if ignored, but please don't give him any more encouragement. I fear you have given him a sense that someone actually reads what he has written.

This was an enjoyable read even though I’ve read similar plotlines in other stories. However, I’ve not read any where murder is so easily plotted and accomplished by the hero. That aspect seems almost a signature statement in your stories. Someone must die. Here, the deed is done as easily as one changes a channel on a TV.

There was an almost tongue-in-cheek aspect to some elements, for example, having Harry in Va as a character. Another, more minor character was named Wendy Hilliard. In K.K.’s classic “Wendy”, the title character is named Wendy Hillard (without the “I”). Was this merely a coincidence or is the author having fun with us?

too bad that such a promising story was defaced by

what was essentially an endorsement of and legitimization

of murder as a tool for solving problems

i would havethought you were more INTELLIGENT than that

4 -5 years ago I was at my dentist and I sat in the waiting room. Boring I started reading a English langauge magazin from Hungary, where the main editor wrote about his experiences in Hungary. He was American/English/Canadian I do not remember exactly. He came to Budapest in the 90s and he got Hungarian wife and children here. He wrote the positive and negative imprints as well. His one of the negatives was the Hungarian marital practice, for example he met a leader Hungarian business man whose car was the fotos of his family and his lover as well. There was a popular Hungarian TV anchor man (begining of the 90s) at his death bed in the Hospital the wife with the children and the lover came in shift time. A singer's death (at begining of the 2000s) is also very interesting because his weapon accidentali killed him when in the house there were the wife and other woman, he had 3 children, etc.. However I think the majority of the mariages do not start in my Homeland everybody after the honeymoon start looking for extramarital lovers. This is the lifestyle of a minority but this lifestyle is too represented in the our elite and the magazin editor often met them.

The divorce is a big problem a family because to find a second flat/hause is very difficult in Hungary and the member of the family tolerate more than the spouses do in the USA (I read it from the revenge stories here), one infedility event almost never causes divorce here, the spouses try to reconcile. However the serial cheaters destroy also the marriage here. (The divorce rate is similar high as in the USA,but the cruelty, alcoholizm are main causes) The DNA test is expensive to the average salary/wage and the exhusband has to pay the children support for that children which are not sired in Hungary. A (ex)husband can not start a law suit to get settlement from the biological father. What a pity, I hope the results of the modern science (DNA test) will arrive in the Hungarian law once.

Somebody finds his/her wife/husband in the marital bed with a lover very sedom event (A friend found his wife so) here. The cheaters try avoid the home flat/house becuese her/him children will find them instead the other spouse and very rarly the gangbang with wife here the 1/1 sex most often (but with the globalization it may be more later).

I am sure that a far more interesting and creative revenge was possible.

Hmm,.. That's "Scientific American". And one of the few faces on it lately was of a primitive homo sapien. (Sorry but I love that periodical.)

Very well done, thank you.

I happen to like that he could work pass the transgression. To error is human to forgive divine. She had not shown the same contempt that Alice did and had 9 years of trial by fire working in the dinner. And I guess he could anything he wants there but never did wanted Alice (1000 apologies to Mr. Guthrie).

Good example of what I see on campus all the time "you may be very intelligent but not very smart".

Loved this story! I have read all the storys you have published here on literotica and loved every one. Thanks for this 5 Star story as well.

this is a great story!! Loved every bit of it!

Another story. Less Mustang. Me likey.

The Samantha angle was a tad predictable. The revenge wasn't! I was shocked (pardon the pun).

She never called? She could find his address but not his phone number?

The anecdote you put in the story about the loose board is the same one the entire story is based on. Alice, the dowdy girl, trips over Greg's wood and gets tossed aside. Chavonne does the same and...and...? Riiighht! I assume it was intentional.

Still I always admire your writing even though you can't use quotes to save your life (Yes, I am an anal bastard. When I run into these things, it pulls me out of the story dammit!)

Still you've improved a great deal. Thanks again.

Sammi is right, and it's happening again! I enjoyed the story more than I thought I would and I thought I would from the beginning. Very cool. Thanks

As always, good tale. Yeah, 9 years was too long, and the murder at the end too convenient for getting rid of his 2 problems. It could have been 2-3 years and catching them doing something illegal.

But this is fiction and who cares? We all look for your next story each week. I loved the satire on Professor Harry in Va.

I am sure that Harry knows all about the Event Horizon as he lives near it. It sucks in all of his common sense every day... You don't have to encourage Harry. In fact I have yet to see anyone able to discourage him!

I still cannot believe that I am commenter 90 after one day! I looked for the story yesterday I thought. So...I do believe that news of one of Stang's stories can travel the speed of light!!!

Maybe a follow up on sammi years in the future? Just a suggestion.

SS, you never cease to amaze me with your writing. I still say O.I.N.D. is your best to date, but this one ranks right up there. From the first story you posted on Literotica to this one, your improvement as a writer has been 100 fold. Your character and plot development and everything else keeps on getting better. Your sense of humor has come out in some of your recent writings as little plot twists-'He wouldn't eat the mushrooms'--near the end. I love it!

when some of my favourite authors are posting comments on one of my favourite author's stories :D woodmanone, harddaysknight, ohio, scorpio44, rehnquist :) I loved this story, great humour, very twisted!

The only thing I didn't like about it was how the time flew in the writing, and the next thing I know it's 9 years later - what is that about?? I suppose it allows for forgiveness of a really stupid mistake ... maybe you are forcing me to realise that some people truly are stupid and still innocent at heart despite their mistakes(?). Wouldn't fly all the time with me but in this story ... I suppose ... anyway... why did he leave her his house? I guess it's a very complex question and it could change the entire story, so it was necessary to make the ending the way it became, and it was still enjoyable (for a humour story)

Like some of the others, I noted and loved the reference to Harry in VA. is he around? someone should notify him! :D Did I miss any other references??

You got mad skills, the only constant in your work seems to be the mustang aside from that fucking brilliant!!!!!!!

This was a wonderful story. I loved it even though it made me stay up past my bed time.

I don't know if I liked the story. Because she did not talk to him and did end up cheating on him! Should we the readers over look that? I am sorry but cheating is cheating. I think I will give this story 4 stars anyway. Thank you for sharing your work with us the readers.

I'm having trouble with the Professor's character. He murders his ex-wife and Greg so casually its almost without conscience. Who is really evil in this story? Minus this element, I enjoyed the story.

The Little one done did gud rofl -

Sammi is an awesome character and they are all just too believable - unfortunately - high intelligence does make for very stupid people often.

The question of who is evil is pretty much irrelevant to the story - high intelligence usually breads some level of contempt for the common morality and evil along with morality is a relative concept.

We see it as evil to allow a child to die from negligence but ancient Greeks reputedly left female children out to die from exposure rather than have too many non- male children survive and have to be supported in the community -= not evil but appropriate to them.

Context defines evil - revenge is something most of us find to be less than an optimal energy use but most still at least think about it when we are hurt.

Thanks for a really nice read -

Black holes only tangentially relating to quantum mechanics....now if the little girl had proposed new and interesting solutions to Schroedinger's equation.....

Nice read though...

I enjoyed the story and loved Sammi's character, I also loved the reconciliation between Chavonne and Sam. I'm not sociopathic normally but I see where the murder came from, I would likely do the same thing if I heard a cold hearted bitch trying to come up with a plan that could potentially endanger the woman I loved or my child and Greg was an ass

This story is FUN.

My favorite story, love it