All Comments on 'Quincunx Ch. 01'

Good start want more

Great story you should write more ^_^

There have been at least 20 moments in the story where the protagonist could have incapacitated both of the girls if he really wanted to get free.

It's obvious the author has a series of events they want the story to progress down, but the protagonist being captured and then let use of his hands while handling BOILING WATER and other implements that could be quickly turned to weapons, is just a bit of a stretch and contradictory to the character as presented.

I like the description at the start etc, but as said in other comments some effort to explain away or limit the main character is needed...if he has so many ways to escape why does he not even notice them...while good language does make a story more engaging to read the little (and not so little) details are needed to plug all the holes.That said its a good start =]

This is a very well written piece of literature, I honestly cannot come up with words to describe how good it was written. Thank you for this form of art you have published for us to view.

Don't mean to be mean I like the Mage thing but how he Get captured and everything after that just sucks ass

Bullshit it doesn't add up