All Comments on 'RABs Ch. 02'

Another good one. Keep writing. One small flaw right at the end. I would have never named my child after the whore who betrayed me

I had just finished reading part 1, and didn't have to wait. It's interesting to see that you gave Dana the compassionate death, versus the other alternative. I also must agree that there is NO WAY IN HELL that I would name my child after Dana. I just hope for the sake of humanity that the world is just nuked or hit by an asteroid if this were to become a real possibility.

another good one. only problem I had was the naming of the child after dana. why would you want to name a child conceived in love after a bitch like dana. as always THANK YOU

and I couldn't find a person to like or to hate. Writing is very good, as always.

As Usual.

Real great story but nobody that I could root for or connect with. No carrot this time and I liked that. I want to see a reconciliation story so bad I'm going Dana here.

Thanks for sharing.

After so much crap is published on this site, it really made my day to read this story. The moral of this story is that karma is a blessing and a bitch.

written by the big brother that gets all As in English.

I liked this one thoroughly. Thanks for sharing stang.

Great read. thanks for sharing.

Now THIS was an ending. These are the types of stories I love reading from you the most stang, please shoot us more with these types of characters.

you didn't wimp out. I usually don't pick nits, but some are just so annoying I can't let them go. Althoug I'm a gun guy, it doesn't appear that you are so I can excuse some, but not all things. The thought that Sandy, a gun girl, would leave her baby "lying around all over the place" is disgusting and sickening. You need to clean up those kinds of mistakes.

Kudos on a job well done.

you stop reading comic books and go on to something else? How about checking out internet porn?

but not very exciting.... No suspense. She gave it up in the first pages and that set up all that followed. Why do you have to use morally blind women in all your tales?? Thanks for all the hard work...

Thanks for keeping your word about seeing something different in 2013. Technically, the story was well written but part two just didn't hold my interest to give a 5.

Not sure I like the multiple week offering, but it was worth the wait. Let's see: a lesson learned is to NOT fuck with a sniper's Mom.

Haha....dana's demise was damn funny...hahaha.

Dont know where Stang gets these stories. This one was a really wild ride. Good work!

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I'm with SoloToro on the sniper rifle 'Just lying around.' Imagine a dirty Mustang with rust spots, and 25K miles between oil changes. Oh, yeah, and 15-20 lbs of pressure in the tires! Running on regular!

5*

Awesome job. I don't know about killing the slut though, I would've preferred she stay alive. The best revenge would've been her seeing how happy Jerry & sandy are & sandy's & Jerry's daughter. Yeah I know she completely lost her marbles-- but still It's no fun with the ex dead, it's more fun to rub your happiness in their faces. But I still enjoyed the story, it was pack with action, betrayal, a rapist & a slut--but most importantly love. I loved sandy I thought she was awesome. I sort of felt sorry for Diego, he really did seem like he wanted to change before skankzilla ruined his life & got him killed, but he should've showed some self control so my sympathy is limited. I can't wait for next weeks story.

...and realized that in this new world everyone spoke like middle schoolers.

Truly, I'm amazed at all the laudatory comments. This is poorly written overdone dribble.

So Sayeth the .50 Cal.

I love the high literature reviews of so many of the "anonymous" critics.

They crack me up with their pious rants.

Get over it guys it's fiction

Me.... I just enjoy the story and then have dessert by reading the reviews.

certainly had a good start. I really liked it, but ...

But lately your stories are become like a circus. "Come here, 2 tickets for 3, see the lady who breaks her man's heart, who gets another woman who rescues him from the pits of depression".

It's less meaningful in emotions, too dramatic (without much depth) and feels a bit recycled.. No disrespect, but I am a regular reader with a big appetite and to me this would score differently than it would with a newcomer (as I once was) who would find it even more fresh. I applaud you for trying a different style though. Keep at it - it's the best thing you will do! :)

i have heard that many times and i think stang has too.he spends much more time describing the bitches he wants to burn than the knights in thier mustangs..look at it.danna is the most developed character in the story.while the hero is just a recycled version of the hero from his last story and the new love enterest is also basicly another recycled character.face it stang,you burnt out long ago and your original ideahs are all in the dust.what you have going on now are just pathetic pleas for patts on the back from the BTB crowd

I believe in simplicity, thanks for a good story. nough said.

It is amazing how many of the anonymous critics comments sound the same. I don't mean they sound like a bunch of different people with the same criticisms but that they sound like a few criticisms written over and over by a few people. WAIT....I am anonymous, maybe I am one of them. Let me check.... Nope still me and I still enjoy Stang. This was not his best but still an enjoyable story.

I actually have an account but could not resist.

Man, I really like your stories. And, I really like zombie stories. I like the RAB part too. Very nice explanation for how they become what they become. As for the firearms, you did well this time. You didn't focus on the wrong details. There are people like Sandy who are natural shots. Usually even they have to zero the rifles before getting a bullseye but, you made it work. You have to get her to shoot further tho. With a good scoped rifle in the hands of a natural, they can shoot way further than a measly 200 yards.

Quick question for you. Why do most of your female protagonists seems to go crazy once they are discovered? They just seem to lose control of reality for some reason. It's kinds weird. Anyways, thanks again for entertaining stories.

This story was typical Stang...but set in a different setting. I enjoyed it as did many others I think...and I hope he keeps them coming! Come on readers! How many of the really good writers are still producing stories for us? Why bitch because they are all similar in some ways? Every writer on here has his own style and writes to please himself as well as a segment of his readers. I still look forward to his next effort and I think his stories are improving in many ways.

OldMarineVet

And this was pretty good. :) No way I would name my daughter after that bitch though. Bad mojo. Keep up the great work! I check every week for your next story.

A very good story and I liked the sniper rifle element. Setting the story in a post zombie setting was a good break from normal corporate / house wife neighborhood stories.

Well done

Stang buddy, I gave you 5 stars. Good pace, well written. Kept me engaged from the first word. Only one complaint..... Naming the kid Dana? Seriously? Thats horrible man LOL

Yes it was predictable - but it was still a lot of fun and it was nicely executed - so read and enjoy.

Dana went psycho - yep like many of SS's dumb women - but let's face it without a psycho in the mix there is not a lot story left - "For whatever reason the woman cheats and does not understand why hubby is pissed - but he is so he decides they are over - she accepts t and moves on with her life - THE END" LOL now that is anticlimactic -

There needs to be a challenging antagonist yours are good ones for the various reasons that they go ape shit heh - Thank you as always for some fun time use -

Although long, it was, in fact, not too long. Action adventure of the highest caliber with a unique twist on zombies (a zombie by any other name . . . ).

I enjoyed the hell out of this story, and it would probably make a great movie.

out there among RAB with no provisions. That would have been much better punishment.

Started very strong and was a fascinating storyline with tremendous potential. The fact that Sandy and Jerry so quickly had a baby magnifies the weakness of your tale. Why did Dana need Diego to get her pregnant? This was simply not explained with satisfaction. If I am not mistaken, she was going to ask him to get her pregnant but never got around to it. Clearly he and the elders were not opposed to the idea. It would have been better to simply have her cheat on him out of pure lust. The whole premise was weak. Jerry is angry at Dana for flirting. Actually, he came across quite childish. Then he does nothing to dissuade Sandy from flirting with him, knowing that it was irritating Dana. There are both idiots. There clearly was very little chemistry between these two. As a result, they both come across as unsympathetic. I also didn't like Sandy. She sought out to steal Jerry, and she did. and the reader is supposed to find this heroic? hardly. There is no emotional impact in this story.

Even if Jerry COULD forgive the cheating, whether or not he took her back, her attempted murder of Sandy is an offense against the community that has to be punished.

Gave it five stars, added it to favorites. Author was already in favorites.

just a note, another way to go would have had him have both girls, low birth rate and that type of culture would have lent itself to that, and killing off a child bearing female would be a difficult decision at best.

Sooooo good!!!!! But, if you even think that you can get away with writing something this fantastic and then just dropping it someone seriously needs to hunt you down and hurt you!!! More!!! Lots more as this is full length novel good. It's better than any zombie crap ever written because it could actually happen. Medical experts have been screaming about the overuse of antibiotics for decades, and warning of disaster if it continues. To think of the book royalties should make anyone drool, to contemplate the movie rights payout should cause a short circuit of the brain. If you take advantage of this you could become seriously rich. Please, just consider it.

That was great!!

FBG

I wanted to give it 5 stars but the ending with them naming their daughter after a psychopathic whore really ticked me the fuq off, so I only gave it 4 stars!

Human Nature has a way to prevail. TK U MLJ LV NV

Enjoy what you have because our world is about to go crazy (I mean "CRAZY") Racial hatred, women treated like sex slaves. Extermination centers, we can't talk ill of our Furer. All religious books not deemed by the Furer will be burnt! ALL THIS IS NOT IN GERMANY 1943 IT IS ABOUT TO START! Story is Fantastic! Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE. OH OH! New military uniforms with Trump Land will be feared by so many HISTORY ALWAYS REPEATS BYE

Great story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Imho, the last comment by nony-mouse is inappropriate and needs deletion. Political comments poorly disquised as comments don't belong on LW.

Why in the fuck do your characters name their kids after whores? That's some stupid shit! It seems if over time you've grown some in your outlook on things (i.e. race). It's like you'd never been around blacks and had no real experience with them because you would say some irritating and stupid assed shit in some of your earlier stories (ex: an interracial couple being shocking to see, a a black guy acting a certain way, the descriptions of ALL of the black chicks in your stories). Dude, where the fuck do you live, 1920? So, I figured you were some older white dude because you referenced a lot of old films, music and tv shows (ex: Larry, Curly, Moe & Shemp- only old heads or die hard oldies fans remember Shemp). Then I thought that you must be a chick because why else would you paint these dudes in your stories as such pussies! That seemed like some heavily fueled estrogen laced shit leeching through. Then the chicks who won in the end agreed for their kids to be named after the whore that came before them. No woman in the history of fucking EVER would name her kid after a bitch that they hated! So I was back to the thought that you were a dude. I was wrong on all counts. You're a robot, that explains everything!

Ok... I have to admit that I really liked this one (And ch-01). I liked that it was set in "another world" and so you could get away with a fair few things.

I didn't like that fact that, in a twisted way, Dana was actually just a victim of bad choices she couldn't get away from. I don't think she actually meant to hurt anyone and in all other respects Sandy was actually as much of a bad seed as Diego was.

Having said that... 5 stars... Would read again.

Fucking really? 1* ending. Your characters are all (as usual) a bunch of horrible cunts...but this one's new

Yes, the zombie scenario is overplayed. But putting a LW story in the middle?

Seriously, it reeks of The Road Warrior, with Max in the fast car and the gang replaced by zombies... then throw in a clueless cheating bitch.

Regardless it’s a fun read.

"They would have been mine if that cheating, scummy, whore hadn't stolen my husband right out from under me"

No, you whore. That would have been yours if YOU hadn't fucked Diego, scheming to have his bastard and trick your husband into raising it with you. What a crock.

But seriously....why did they name their daughter Dana? It would've been a five...but that was a gross betrayal of everything Jerry and Sandy had built together

The two of them (Dana and Diego) got what they deserved! Jerry finally found a woman he could count on

Five stars

Probably doesn't belong in LW but what a kick to read,

Burn the bitch story. This time the happy couple both have really big solid brass balls. Sandy's sniper rifle sounds an awful lot like a Barrett considering the range and damage. I do have to admit like a lot of the other comments I didn't care for the idea of naming the baby Dana. Signed: BTW

Just feels little strange reading this now with all that's happening with Covid-19.

....... sometimes two sides, one is to ease pain, heartache and loss; while the other leads to suffering more I unbearable pain and loss.

In the case of Dana’s Character, no matter the gender, was a danger to not herself but anyone or anything. This is the kind of person who Would throw you under the bus before you even knew it happened. Being so selfish, self centered, completely untrustworthy and who you can never turn your back on, because they would stab you in back so long as their needs and wants were met; this would cover the majority of “Millennials” and what ever follows that generation. Sadly the remainder are actually decent people who know and understand loyalty, being self reliant with integrity who will Watch your back but are the minority.

With how Dana was dealt with, to quick again wrath and justice, would of been to give her minor flesh wound in the lower leg and not killled; let the RAB’s deal with likes of her in that world, would of have been completely justified.

Great characters and would like more content, 5 Stars !!!!!

There is no COVID-19. It is SARSCorona-2. A lab created modified form of SARSCorona which has been around for years. Read the back of a can of Lysol spray. Take your vitamins and get plenty of C.

Rimmerdal…

You imbecilic, anti-vax boomer fuck, I swear to god, you better be glad we can’t throttle cunts through our screens…

I see the anon below is a dedicated consumer of misinformation. He probably thinks the virus had a natural origin and that its creation wasn't funded at least in part by the US NAIAD and other agencies by laundering money through third parties. As for "throttling", isn't he a brave keyboard warrior? How precious.

Next time try commenting on the story.

Fun story , thanks for this .

Geeze dude ur awesome loved it wish thete was more. Great job enjoyed n appreciated it.

Didn't much like the ending and looking back on the story the characters' behaviors seemed inconsistent. Perhaps more time should have been spent in developing the changes. I found Dana to be a sympathetic character for most of the story and would have preferred a reconciliation.

"Looks like we're going to need another Idiot Dana", So should ALL Stupid "Dana's" perish.

I enjoyed the story. Given the category of the story, that Dana was a goner was pretty much a foregone conclusion, but I was hoping Diego was going to do something heroic, but it was not to be. Personally, I would have rather seen Dana and Diego turned to RAB’s, but that’s just me.

Great story overall

I do have a certain gripe sometimes, and that is true in this instance too, whereby the wives in these LW/revenge stories do something that is so ridiculously out of character for them that by the end of the stories they've devolved into completely different people. Yes, I suppose they could be attempting to fix, but end up just compounding upon their own mistakes, but sometimes, even with StangStar's stories, they go completely insane

The one saving grace in Dana's case I guess is that we didn't really get to know her well enough. The one thing you were supposed to be sure of was her love for Jerry, but that alone would've prevented her from doing what she did, and by the end she became a vicious, scheming attempted murdered

That aside, the story was a good read and holds your attention from start to finish. The characters were well fleshed-out, even if I didn't necessarily understand where they (i.e. DANA) were going, and the karma of the ending made it even sweeter. We need more protagonists like Jerry in these LW stories!

Once I got over the horror of an EV Mustang - yeah yeah, I know it had to be for the story to work - I can’t understand Dana behaving so far out of character… then why Jerry just accepted Diego’s BS during the meeting… so many questions

The world is constantly changing. People, not so much.

Fun exciting read. I cld read a lot more of this. This seems like an idear that cld be made into a scifi novel? thanks for writing and sharing. rk

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Great story!

Thx U