All Comments on 'Rachel's Reward'

It's a shame I can only give you five stars for this, you deserve more.

Great story! Thank you for sharing it with us.

Great powers of description and really erotic

Good luck in the contest.

It was exciting to follow Rachel's sexual development and the idea that she will now use this on Tyler would be interesting to read, as well.

Your descriptions are always so vivid. I'd love to see what you could do setting people up in some other locales.

Oh.. As always- you impress.

Great story, well written. Good luck in the contest.

You write the oddest little romantic, sweet stories. :)

Terrific story. The tension builds throughout. Even though we all know where the story is headed it's a pleaure to read along.

I do not like group sex stories but your writing is amazing and so I read and was aroused as always. Good luck in the contest.

Absolutely wonderful writing, so very hot!!

Well done!

Great story, very well written, I felt connected to the characters. I would love to read Rachel and Tyler's story.

I have a new favorite. Mmm who is the redhead......lovely.

Great story! I liked the way the tension built, and the sex was insanely hot. Seemed like there were a couple of continuity lapses (Rachels sleeping arrangements for example) but a very enjoyable read. It definiately got the job done.

This had everything, superb writing skills through to top class sex scenes. It is difficult to fault it in any way.

Really enjoyed the story...smart and sexy! And, I agree with the other post: I'd love to hear Tyler and Rachel's story too!

"Rachel's Reward" is an outstanding sensual story, the writing is marvelous!

I love the story Jaymal. It is a very sexy and well written story! —MissyLuvsYa

I loved this story, sweet Rachel matures in a way that pleases her crushes. Reminds me of someone....

You never disappoint Jake, thank you for another tale of sexy fun! The love between Kyla and Reece is wonderful and I love that they are adventurous!!! and lovely Rachel get the Reward :))!!! Great job! ♥

To the anonymous reader who pointed out a factual discrepancy in my story - I am not adverse to criticism as anyone who actually knows me will realize. If someone puts a criticism in public forum anonymously, however, I will delete it as a matter of course. I find it basic courtesy to at least give a name to yourself. Personally if I had anything constructive to point out to a writer I'd contact them via the site's email and phrase it along the lines of 'I enjoyed you story, however...' Then it comes across as helpful criticism, not as an irritating piece of decontextualized nit-picking.

Once again, truly amazing writing, previously I have loved your stories for getting inside my head to the hidden fantasies that get me hot. This time you've outdone yourself with the character development and depth of the scenery descriptions - I felt like I was the one walking down the hill to the beach instead of Rachel... I think I'm in love with all three main characters in this story!!

Thanks for another great read.

Excellently written! And it was a turn on to read such a great story with a character who has my name. ;-P

Man epic story very good writer a fav right away Write A LOT more storys please!!! :D

Added to my faves. I LOVED this so much, for so many reasons. I like your style, like your analogies, loved the characters. My only complaint was the typos, but the story eclipses that, it was so good. ^.^

Very nice work on this. Loved the imaginative description of the mechanics, the confidence and maturity of your writing and rounded characterizations. Lesser writers rely overmuch on puerile "symbol words" that are supposedly naughty but actually just dull and unimaginative, and an immediate turnoff. You don't do this. Great erotica is great because it engages the mind sexually. Without that, you got nothing. I'll look for more of your work.

Written with feeling and a joy to read. Wonderful job.

is rare on this site: you do it in spades. One tiny quibble: the past tense of dive is dived, not dove. A dove is a bird. I only mention it because everything else is so near perfect. Thanks very much.

good story ,really liked it ,a long story with a long build up im not usually a fan of long build ups, but this was worth it keep writing.perhaps we can have sequel they meet up again .

Hot stuff , nice work man :)

Wow! Perfectly written story with eloquent writing. The best I’ve read in Literotica! Please keep it.