All Comments on 'Rag Doll Ch. 02'

Bluddy great mate.

sooo well written, i loved part 1 and i really loved this one too, i really hope you write many many more chapters, it is all so perfect, love ya

Another great story from a great author! There isn't a story of yours that I haven't loved. 5 stars!

I love the fact that you can create and craft a story that is erotic and engaging. I really want you to write more of this story...BUT...please don't be tempted to turn it into a long-running series. The saying is "Less is more" but sometimes "More is less." My feeling is that two more chapters is enough.......and I can't wait to read them. Well done and thank you!

You actually brought tears to the eyes of this 61 year old curmudgeon, an action that many a person would have wagered against. All I can say is that I love your writing and storylines.

Thank you for sharing your talent and ideas with the rest of us.

5*****

M51

How I hope that the father gets what is coming to him . I agree that you only need a few more chapters . Maybe 10 or 15 pages each . I foresee a lot of action yet to come . Call me a perv , but I would like to see Nick,Ash and Judy have a romp in the hay together . Bet that would be awesome . Thanks

Chapter 2 was just as good as your first chapter. I'm really starting to get drawn into the storyline. I hope to see more soon.

Love this story so far. Great relationship development between Nick & Ashley. Can't wait to find out how they explain their love to their mother, and how she reacts to it.

At least one more chapter, maybe two, to wrap up the story. Maybe mother & Dr get together, let us know Nick's dad gets what he deserves.

But, please, keep with the love and romance between Nick & Ashley! Keep the story about them and their love for each. Please don't bring any one else into their relationship. That would only cheapen their relationship to being about the sex.

Great. I'm hanging on every word. It's like a TV sit-com and I wait eagerly for the next episode. I'm excited........... :-)

Love the story so far. The only problem I have is the pacing (and maybe all the crying though some of it is justified). Anonymous protagonist returns home and within hours he's in love with his sister AND she returns the feelings?

The characters are talking/thinking/acting like they've slowly built a bond over months or years when in fact it hasn't been a week and that feels off to me. I wouldn't mention it, but the characters haven't mentioned love-at-first-sight or even been consciously aware of how quickly things are moving? Too much, too soon I say!

Aside from that, I wouldn't change a thing. Love your descriptions of the characters and their appearances; better than most authors on this site. Also, I was annoyed at how quickly the mother/sister started acting like brother had been in their lives the whole time, but recently my family reconnected with a long lost family member (my dad's half-brother) and it played out almost exactly like you've described it. It might be a comment on the way I view the world, but I don't understand all the sudden love/interest/caring. The stranger is still a stranger, he doesn't FEEL like family to me at least, but the reaction in the story seems to be about right. Jolly good show old bean!

Again you create a wonderful series with interesting and well-developed characters. Keep up that great work and eagerly anticipating the next chapter.

very good start.... PLEASE I NEED MORE! !!!!!!!!

....for the next chapter. Your writing makes you feel like you are there living the experiences. Bravo!!

Why stop now? Continue man

because of the combination of inosence and maturity and because this is an amazing story!

Please continue... I'm hooked!

Plz continue its a real good story and I want to know what happens so plz wright more....... (.Y.)

I love your writing. Please continue this story

... Made me late for work reading these two chapters. Good show.

Great story! More please, & soon!

This is awesome and I love it, please write more soon

So far, this is one of the best stories I've read here on Literotica.

I hope the rest of the story maintains the same standard.

LewBrishess

Good so far, what kind of shite answer is that?. It was fu ken a,

Thoroughly enjoyed the first two chapters.

Again, another Fantastic Job!!! Keep up the good work, your storytelling ability is great. You are, by far, one of the best writers here on Literotica.

Amazing so far!

i loved your little anecdote on how these yanks cannot read proper English. I being South African, was taught read The Queens English and I must say, reading English, proper English, is so comforting. I am may be a lazy when typing but put a pen in my hand and I will be writing English all day.

I enjoy reading your story, there is so much emotion involved that I sometimes forget that words such as pussy, cum, and one of my favourite, cervix(don't try to understand it), are going to popping up like weasels everywhere!! I get so invested in the emotion that when the sexy portion comes through, I feel awkward and I feel guilty as if it's almost out of place. but its more than sex, Ashley and Nick are making love, and I like that. for that, I rate you 5starts. you're awesome!!!!

The plot thickens! Now Mr Nixon knows, and Judy too. Interesting relationship Ash seems to have with Judy, considering Judy feels so free to walk into the room during the afterglow of relations. I like how you jabbed at American English and also addressed the 'happened so fast' critiques through Nick's internal monolog. Another full 5 stars! -HWD -`ღ´-

I'm pure American but I'm also A career Military Enlisted man so I recognize the Queens English. And I must say, Bloody Well Done, Mate.

Please keep up the good work.

Get rid of the British slang. Sex scenes are boorish without screams of ecstasy written down using graphic dialogue, instead of the first person narrative. Recommend to people from the UK who enjoy a good story with sex scenes that will keep your cocks flaccid indefinitely. Keep trying.

Went and bought a telescope today so I could look for the fuck I give about your opinions...nope, didn't find it.

you made a realy good connection with Barbara. loved that part. your other characters are still a bit weak though imo.

all in all pretty good read and ive given 4* for it.

keep writting.

but

dont be so rude in your responses to others. its not becoming.

Should be *than.

*Realy should be *really.

Write a better story, I urge you, in fact I beg you, then perhaps we can hold them up for comparison.

Anyone who gets rude or boorish gets it back with interest. I'm not a doormat, and I'm under no obligation to tell tossers 'thank you sir, please may I have another' when they post ignorant, rude, or racist snot-o-grams, and if you want to post derogatory or semi-literate comments, be prepared to have them deleted, because I'm under no compulsion whatsoever to accept crap from halfwits.

Having said that, I usually leave them up so the other readers can see for themselves what an idiot looks like.

Want to one-star me? Go ahead, I don't write for scores, I write out of personal enjoyment for the achievement and to entertain, not win awards, and if you don't like what I write, or how I tell a story;

a. I don't really care, and

b. either write one you like or exercise your right to choose and go elsewhere.

It's very well written, and I commend you for building a compelling world for Ashley and Nick. My only gripe is while you took the time at the beginning to set the story up, you weren't as patient with the build up between them. It was so rushed that I'm having a difficult time to truly feel their connection and subsequently enjoy their intimacy. Still, it's easily better than 99.5% of the stories on this site. 5*

You really got a lot of talent in your writing. I love the cheeky British or English slang you incorporate to the story. I really can't think of anything really wrong with the story. I plan on reading the other chapters. I also plan on reading most of your other stories. I really love the way you write!

Still loving the story. Five stars

Your description of Nicky's dad bring back painful memories. There really are monsters like him in this world. My father was similar, tho not as evil, but the belt buckle thing? I can relate. What is it about the English and punishing severely? Thank goodness Nick had someone who truly loved him both in England, and also in America when he moved there to escape the monster that was his father. The physical scars may heal, but the emotional ones may take years, and will still be felt even then. This story has made me cry, which I am not ashamed of, even tho I am a man. It has also made me laugh, which is carthartic. Well done!!! And the sister thing? I have often wished someone would love me like Ashley does her brother. HOT!

love your story but i hope we have heard the last of Barbra.

@anon

why the last of barbara? the part about barbara gives him more depth of character, not just "the always sunny good looking guy with a horse cock and "perfect" character". uneven edges and internal conflict, that makes a character interesting. I don't think the story would've been this good without Barbara or frequent mentioning of her in the beginning.

😆 🤣 😂 roflmao!!! OMG! That last line delivered by Judy was priceless! My sides hurt from laughing 🤣 😂.

I'm glad that you addressed a lot of my concerns in this installment. Overall, I can't think of anything to critique this time around. I'm looking forward to moving to the next installment.

Really nice character development. I think I may be in love with Judy, with a sense of humour like that she could almost be British (well northern at least)😉