All Comments on 'Rag Doll Ch. 04'

My wife loves reading me your stories.

My favorite series thus far and a simply lovely ending to a great story! Thank you!

I only gave you five stars because there were not ten. This was an incredible story and I have thoroughly enjoyed every word of it. Keep up the good work.

This was a truly great story and I enjoyed it sooo much. The ending was so great and perfect. I wish I could give you more then 5 stars. I hope you keep on writing wonderful stories. I'm looking forward to reading your next story as well as more of Lost Girl: Julie's Story. I would like to read more on this story.

I've read a lot of your works, your one of my favourite authors here and this is your best story, I've read and reread the other chapters countless times - I tear up everytime Nick has his breakdown in Ch. 2 - and now you've ended it perfectly. Love this story, thank you.

I am so glad to have an ending to this one. I have been sitting on edge for two weeks wondering what was going to happen.

You have a gift wordmam and people love it . Now that this one is over work on the others when u get time . Say hello to the boss lady .

Thank you Beachbum for for giving us such a wonderful story! I hate to see it end but I know there will be more stories from you in the future that will be just as great as this one. I wish I could rate this higher than 5 stars

really enjoyed the story - fantastic - well written heart rendering

love it all

Excellent way to end a great story!!! Really enjoyed this storey very,very much!!!!!! I don't think any one could improve on any aspect of it ! Really looking froward to see what other stories you have yet to release or have planned to write! This was a real enjoyable read. THANK YOU !!!!

I very rarely leave comments, but deserve it I agree with the rest, Yes there is sex but the background story, the love interest, the cars!, so will written made me A bit happier while in hospital.

Thanks M8

Your story was brilliant., Well written, the characters were believable, their connections believable, and their actons, believable.

The pace was just right and your sequences plausable.

.....and I'm a total sucker for a happy ending.

I'll be looking forward to more from you in the , hopefuly, near future

I have nothing to say other than thank you

I have read all of your stories and every one is wonderful. I loved the ending in this story and I can't wait to see what you can come up with next. Again bravo on another masterpiece!!

Absolutely wonderful and heartfelt ending to the story!!!

A touching and elegant ending to the series.

To any future authors; read the entire story, or for that matter, anything by this author. This is what you want to strive for.

Very well done. Thank you for sharing.

very well done. i loved it!

Superb

This story is so intense. It felt like the author put me between the lines. The start and ending was sad but beautiful. well done beachbum

Well done!

To me this is the best story on literotica u did a great job I hope u wright more stories like this

Great story the whole thing this was the best part but the whole story was great love ur writing as well

most of the stories here aren't ended well...this one along with others that you have written has a fantastic end...not too hurried neither too slow to catch up, its almost perfect...you could try some alternate ending styles as well other than the 'all's well that ends well' typo

This was a well written series. I started out with Chap 3 due to Lit recommendation but then went back and read the start. I have added you to my favorite list.

This is an amazing story, really captivating, please write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Very well written..... What a ride... Best story so far... Keep it up

That was one of the most captivating emotional stories I have ever read in my entire life...I laughed, I cried, I got angry, I smiled like a friggin idiot.........I will remember this story forever.......well done....and it has special meaning to me because I am from upstate NY and am familiar with all the places referenced. Bravo!

Every time I think I've read the best story on here I get shocked, I mean honestly this has everything you want in a story there isn't the right words to say how glued I was to it. All I'm saying is its f Ing epic.

I got jammed up at work, and it took me a while to get to the last chapter of this story.

It's one of the better stories on Literotica (and I've read a lot of them). I really liked the way this last chapter tied everything together, as we found out that Nicky's father was responsible for Ashley's rape.

I gave you fives, across the board. This story ranks up there with Susan2002's "My Dear Brother", u06la14b's "Wilderness Paradise", CalHollows's "Looking Glass Rose", Rob_mDear's "Mouse Bk. 1", Mentalcases's "Just the Six of Us", and CarlusMagnus's "Charlie and Mindy'.

Congratulations on a job well done.

This is so weird I loved this story I actualy felt a connection to all the potrayd carachters I loved the story and hope you'll make mor again thank you and bravo

Good at every turn: plotting, character development, tension in the story arc. Even without the explicit sex it would deserve a top rating.

The entire four-chapter Rag Doll story is well conceived, well told, and well written. Good plotting and pacing, believable characters, and realistic dialogue make for compelling bedtime reading.

I wouldn't be surprised if the author is a professional writer moonlighting as 'beachbum1958' for his erotic stories.

Bravo. Well done.

I've absolutely fallen in love with this story. The sex scenese were great, but this was so much more than that. These four chapters have been amazing. I felt that I really knew each character as though they had been long time acquaintances, and I felt their emotions as I read. Thank you for this, and congratulations on a job amazingly done.

That was a great story, the sex didn't matter. I would have read it without it! Awesome job!!

As one of your earlier comments said, this story could stand alone without the sex, I'm not saying that the sex part wasn't good but oh boy you really know how to keep your readers glued to the storyline . A truly great story.

One of the best stories ive read. I really wish there was more chapters. Even without the sex, it would be just a great. This story put you right there with the characters, you could picture them, hear them, and experience them.

You my friend, are a great writer. I look forward to more of your works.

Great writing - and not all about the sex.

I found myself not wanting to 'put this story down'. It kept me wanting to read more.

Now I am more curious about your other work.

Well done BB1958!!

Great cars, great writing, loved it!

I loved this story.

You did a fantastic job with this story. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop till I read all of it. I want to thank you for a great story.

I reaffirm my previous comments! An excellently written story!! Five stars and favorites, of course! Bravo!

absolutely the best yet on this site

All the stories in Beachbum1958 are just so great. This author puts a lot into his stories and that's why they are all so good.

I am glad I read the entire series in one sitting. You weave a great tale and it is a pleasure to read your work. Keep it up!!!

I love a lot of stories but this is my kind I loved this one and i lovevyour other stories so thanks for thx story this will be the first I favorite ^_^

Is it bad I skipped the sex for the story? Excellent job

On this site most of the stories are ok and some are crap but this one i actually read and loved it more than the sex part.

Wonderful story. Wonderfully plotted, though I must admit that after the first couple of sex scenes between Ashley and Nicky, I also skipped through. The story was extremely interesting, with characters that took on lives of their own. Very nicely done,

And I am a pretty fast reader, too. This is the finest and most enjoyable story I have read on this site (which is about the only site I read these days) and I made it a favorite and the author a favorite on the strength of this story. Thank you for writing, beachbum. I will read the rest of your stories now. Thank you again.

to be in love with the man who could write something like this; it made my spiky, abrasive soul melt, and I never do that; I'm usually his harshest critic and most objective devil's advocate, but that ending made me cry, as did the part where he finally hears Barbara's voice again. I've never read this entire story except in dribs and drabs as BB1958 passed bits of the the draft versions to me for correction and sanity-checking, which were not what ended up being posted anyway, thanks to Mike, his editor. I've steadfastly resisted the temptation to read this story end to end, as I didn't think I could do it objectively, as an ordinary, dispassionate reader, as it were, but now I did, and I'm glad and thankful I did. Those of you who know me will know that 'Lost & Found' was my pet project, along with input from a large and amorphous group of friends who took that particular story to our collective hearts. I was so focussed on that story that this one virtually passed me by unnoticed; perhaps I should have looked up a little more often! Lucky me for having my hands on this man. BB will delete this comment once he notices it, but just this once I had to say something, after finally discovering the man who spends his spare evenings drinking root-beer and eating peanuts with his pet pig and his gun-dogs on the patio could write something that affected me so deeply.

Ti amo mi marido,

Lori

Man... well done, sir. Well done. 9 out of 10, and i'm a harsh, jaded critic. The story was so fully engaging and the characters so deeply relatable that the only drawback actually becomes the "erotic" areas of this piece of Erotica, haha! Not to say that it's badly done, quite the opposite in fact, but its slight lack of variant flavors, and the fact that it peaks early and somewhat plateaus from there on, tends to be rather bland and overlook-able when compared to the simply incredible and enthralling story arc you progress through as a reader. Honestly, I didn't feel I was reading an erotic story at all, but more of a tender drama with several intense R-rated scenes thrown in as filler. Not that fulfilling, from a pervert's standpoint, but some damned fine writing nonetheless! Thank you very much.

Lovely Heart felt story

Keep them comming

definitely liked the closer

This story is one of the three all time great stories I have read on Lit. It is an incredible gathering of truth, justice, love, incestuous sex and adventure. I loved it.

Leaving a comment before i read the chapter this time. The pain in this story has always been incredibly strong and vivid. Its taken me nearly a year before i could bring myself to read this next chapter...

I absolutely loved this series. Loved the story just as much as I loved the sizzling sex scenes. Your characters were very likeable. Wish I could download as a book for my kindle.

Will be reading more of your stuff.

I swore i wasn't going to cry! I SWORE!!!

The whole group of chapters is TOO wonderful. Ya I know that in the end it is a "feel good" story, BUT damn I feel GOOD!!!

HC

words cant describe how much i loved this series. the last chapter just made me tear up. 65 yo men shouldnt cry reading stories. i see there are more chapters but i would have been satisfied with these 6....GOOD JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!

I love the story line that you have created here, however with the addition of the next chapters that you wrote this one needs a couple of minor revisions done to it,where here it says that he never saw his father again,in the final chapter he does,and the same where he says that he will never come back again you also changed that as well.Just a thought that you take or leave as you wish.This is not a criticism,just an observation.

Been meaning to sit down and read this whole thing...so glad I finally did...sorry I waited so long! Thanks for this story line!!!

So far all of your stories are very well put together and we'll written! Amazing stories, good plots, and characters you can't help but connect with them! I should go back through all the ones I've read and rate them, as I'm always hurrying to get to the next chapter, so I only seem to rate them randomly. They're all worth 12 out of 5 stars in my book! Great job and keep up the good work!

You have a timeline problem. Ashley was in HIGH SCHOOL, now all of a sudden she is at SUNY Albany getting an MBA? That's a big 5 year jump.

In my mind, the last part of the chapter is taking place 4 years or so after Nicky arrived; when he goes back to England to Barbara's grave, 4 years have elapsed, Ashley's finished college and in the first year of her graduate MBA, and Bobby's 21 now, if you remember, he was 17 when Nicky left, so yes, I did muddle it a little there, juggling too many ideas can do that to you. Apologies, and at some point I will go back in and edit the text to make that clearer - but not right now; we'll let the mistake stand for now, and thanks for pointing it out.

Will

Ah! I got it! Excellent+.

The sex got better but the story was rushed in the last 2 pages of this chapter. Would have loved seeing Ashley, Judy and Nicky in a nasty three way!! That would've been hot. Pretty good. Still hate the British adjectives used as it made me confused as to their meaning. Nice job.

Anon has definitely written some pretty good stuff to be able to make a crack like that. It is a good story, one of the best, as the readers have voted.

Isn't it strange that someone can't accept a love story, with a liberal sprinkling of loving sex, as just that and wants a nasty three way thrown in just for him to probably play with himself over?

Add on to that the inability to cope with a few True English words when, if you were to ask, he would protest to the high heavens that he speaks English.

How often do you see posts on this web site where Brits are complaining about Americanisms, US slang, and the difference in names for various body, and car, parts.

Suck it up buster, the world does not, and never will, turn for your convenience.

Very dynamic and emotional.

So what was your first car, Beachbum? A Spitfire, TR4, TR250, TR6, a Midget/Sprite, B, BGT, A? Your plot is more than worthy of a Hollywood movie. You may refer to yourself as a bum, but there is much more to you, isn't there? (The comment writer said in the voice of Elliot Gould to Donald Southerland.)

Awesome story. Sex is perfect.

In all honesty, after reading three chapters of this series, I feel like it moves way to fast. Entirely to fast. Each of the events that happen in the series (at least everything I’ve read past the first chapter) are glossed over pretty quickly. I mean everything happens in under a month, when it should have happened over the course of several months. It’s not very believable and it makes it hard to like the characters. Also the only emotions shown that are in the least bit believable are: Nick’s entire situation with his stepmother and Ashley emotions on being raped and she kind of overreacted with leaving Nick in a place that he knew nothing about. That was stupid and felt forced. In the end all I’m trying to say is this series would have been much better if the stories were paced better and because they weren’t, they came out very sloppy.

Write a better story, show us the better story you've written, or sit down and STFU

Laddie, illiteracy is a curable disease. You should indulge in the cure, because you've got it bad.

My very first car was a 1947 Triumph Roadster, in British racing Green, complete with rumble-seat and wire-wheels. This was in the early 1980's, and it was so scruffy the university wouldn't let me park in in my college quad, they said it was an eyesore, so I had to stash it in a lock-up garage while I restored it.

My next car was a white 1953 Jaguar XK120, same story, lovely car, in horrible condition, but I eventually managed to get it back to almost concours condition. I still collect, restore, and race classic British sportscars, although while I'm living here in France I drive a 1959 Facel Vega HK500, and occasionally my 1967 Aston Martin DB5 I restored from a rolling bodyshell.

Brilliant!!! what else is there to say. i too wish it were longer - but for the selfish reason of being able to read more of your terrific, sexy, interesting story. I see you just added a comment - and i hate being a pest - but any thoughts as to when you'll be completing chapter 6 -2 of"Lori". i now have 2 favorite stories - this and "in love with Lori".

THANKS

I like how BB leaves the comments from morons like you. @beachbum. Thank you once again. Even though my eyes are sore now (i am emotional) i just sat here and read them all. I know this will show up as anon, but i sent an email. The fact that i skipped through the sex part to get to the heart of the story tells me one thing. You are a very good writer. I may not have a classical education, but i AM a reader of more than a few great works of literature. While this was not Tolkien or Terry Brooks or Philip Jose Farmer, it was a great piece of work. Thank you.

If you write further stories based in America there was no need to point out the no parole. If you serve Federal time there is no parole.

As pretty much 50% of the readers on this site are NOT American, there's no way for them to know whether or not what you say is the case, or even care, just as long as they get a good read out of it.. So thank you for pointing it out for me, I suddenly feel so blessed and complete in my education, now go away and nit-pick somewhere else and remember that you're not the only reader here, and most people don't have your obviously encyclopaedic knowledge of the Federal penal system, nor do they give a shit.

I never really connected to any character as I connected to BARBARA . I'll never forget BARBARA nor this story . It's one of my top 3 emotional stories up to now .

One request

Write a simple story of 15 to 20 pages about BARBARA and NICKY's bond when Nicky is in England but without the beatings ,you know , HAPPY ONLY BARBARA and HAPPY OR NOT NICKY

And there should be some moments between Julie and Nicky , the long lost son , you never really pointed out the part .

You concentrated on Nicky , Ashley , BARBARA and that sick dead father and the relationships between them excluding Julie out of the game .

Think about it , he lossed one mom and found another long lost mom . You can simply write one hell of EMOTIONAL WRECK story of 30 pages .

Yet another great story!

Another of your fantastic stories. Off to read the next one.

Keep writing!!!!

A great story, well written and a great read. Me dips me lid sir.. Thank you.

This is by far my all time favorite story out of all of them on this site!

honestly i didn't read this for erotica i just kept reading for the story, you should try writing professionally, id buy your books, lol

I've read this before but due to the lockdown I ended up rereading it. And the only thing that bugs me is the question of Nicky's passport. His birth certificate has one name on it and his drivers license has another - there is no way that the US Embassy would have issued him a passport when his ID didn't agree with his birth certificate. A minor error but the only real flaw in a very good story.

In the UK, a driver's license is not regarded valid proof of identity, because there is no legal requirement in the UK to carry any form of identification document whatsoever, nor what name can appear on it if you choose to carry some; it's a good idea to have some, but not required by law, and no-one can force you to have one, nor can they force you to go by your birth name if you choose not to; you can use any name you like, as long as you state and acknowledge on official documentation (for instance applications for child benefit, unemployment benefits, medical practice registration etc.) that's the name you wish to be known and recognised by in your daily life.

The flip side of that is that any document you carry to prove your identity, such as a driving license, can be in the name you have let known is the one you wish to be known by, and not necesarily your birth name.

Under current British Immigration and Nationality law your birth certificate is the only definitive identity document recognised under UK law, or your British passport, as you will have had to submit your birth certificate (along with a notarised Deed-Poll showing your legal change of name) to obtain a UK passport in either your birth or legally changed new name.

Pretty good story. 👌 It was a good ending, but it still feels like a hollow victory of sorts. Barbara's murder never got acknowledged much less solved.

The one thing that really bothered me was that Judy got over her crush with Nicky in mere minutes, giving Leon her phone number too fast. That really makes her out to be a shallow bitch. It totally cheapened the tender moment in the car when she pulled over and told Nicky about how she felt. It just totally ruined it. 😒

I'm glad to have a good closing, but the other chapters were better. And just like several other people have commented, you can totally strip out the sex scenes and it's still a good read.

I.....cried. I'm not gonna lie. You can remove the sex scenes and still have a marvelous story. Thumbs up!

Truly a lovely ride, bumps and all. He was truly sweet and all the ladies in the family lovely. Well done.

What an incredible story from a gifted writer.

Thanks.

What a beautiful story.

Another fantastic story!

(11/28/2022) Coincidence? I’d like to think not. Thank you for this enjoyable read. I gave each chapter five stars.

damn you BB. You made me cry again :p

Excellent.

Another great chapter. It had me shed some tears again. And another great plot twist 👍.