All Comments on 'Rainy Night at the Drive-In Ch. 01-02'

I would have liked it more if they had finished what they started while still at the drive in.

Sorry, but I'm not a fan of car sex. Thanks for commenting.

I think you have the makings of a great story but you need to stop jumping around, stay on one part and go to the end. Much potential here and more physical details would help. The action can be drawn out some and then go into the finish.

More please, thank you.

I’m really not into one page chapters even though this story shows potential it was far too short.

Thanks for your comments. I have been meaning to go back and flesh the beginning of this story out more but just haven't gotten to it. I agree with both your comments. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

No build up ..No detail and like the other comments far too short. It came across to me you wanted to see the reaction to this story to gauge whether or not to continue on with this story..disappointing really..⭐️⭐️ Sorry

This was the first story I ever wrote for publication. It was written quite a few years ago. My style has developed since then. As I said, I have every intention of rewriting it but it is some ways down the list right now. Thanks, though, for your frankness.

The story needs work, but I think you can handle it. My only outcry is little sister with a D cup.....ok read THANKS

Interesting that she didn't like oral.

I went down on a chick or two that didn't have great personal hygiene so maybe her previous experience with oral turned her off due to that.

A pity....My first experience going down on my girlfriend was wonderful for me. I was so in love with her I just wanted to inhale & taste her essence but she thought I was a pervert & didn't enjoy what I was doing to her. She was young.

I failed to hold on to her. I bet she learned to love it later.

I have a loving memory of her earthy scent 60 years later though.

I still have a warm loving place in my heart for Jenny & will until I die.

Started out great, self conversation was ok. Develope a sense of including a lot more details, and stretch the story out. Try to break the story into paragraphs, and it will be much easier to read. Finally, the end seemed rushed. Once you were inside your sister, describe how it felt. Also, imagine how she felt. Maybe the guilt of having her own brother's cocktail inside her, washed away by the intense feeling of how erotic, taboo, how forbidden it felt. Maybe she could tell him she wants him to blow his seed in her, or struggles when she feels it first shooting inside her, but give in as it's already too late...

More details would help tremendously, you have a great base there.

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