Ravenswood Ch. 03

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Suddenly a ball of blue-white lightening exploded between them sending her crashing across the room. Jason, in reaction to the blast, smashed into the bookshelves behind him, sodas and chips went flying.

Stunned, Maura laid against the wall looking at him.

Jason used a chair back to slowly pull himself to his feet then he staggered across the room and held out a hand to help her up. "What happened?" Jason reached over to help her to her feet. "Something exploded, are you alright?"

A small trickle of blood seeped from the scratch marks her fangs made on his neck. Maura closed her eyes in a vain attempt to control her urges. She knew she should just run away, but she couldn't resist him. He smelled so-o-o good and her cravings intensified. She leaned in to lick the blood that trickled down his neck and another smaller ball of electricity exploded between them sending Maura back against the wall and Jason into a group of tables in complete confusion.

"Shit, I don't know what's happening," Jason shouted. "Are you all right? Here take my hand."

She pushed his hand away. "No! Leave me alone!" She grabbed her backpack and the cloth covered bag she always carried as she stumbled towards the door.

Jason scrambled after her. "Maura, wait, what's wrong? What's happening?"

She was out the door, beyond the lobby, and across the street in a blur. She flew around the corner of a nearby building and leaned against a glass wall. Her head was throbbing and her body was numb from both explosions. She could still hear the crackle of energy vibrating in her ears.

What the hell was that? Whatever it was, it knocked her down...twice! The pain in her jaw subsided a little, but the violence of the explosion frightened her. Why wasn't she able to control his mind? He just smiled at her like she had no effect at all. She leaned in and POW! She was across the room in a heartbeat.

What could it have been? Was it some sort of natural life force? Whatever it was, it sure seemed to be a powerful one. Until she figured it out she knew she had to stay clear of him.

She peered around the side of the building towards the front door of Trenton Apartments. Jason came out of the building shouting for her. She turned and fled.

"Maura! Wait! Damn it." Jason ran into the street and looked both ways. She was gone.

A NOTE FROM THE AUTHOR:

The author copyrights Ravenswood and all of its parts. The reproduction of any part of Ravenswood without the written permission of the author is expressly prohibited. This story is a work of fiction. All of the characters, their names and the places they visit, are purely from the imagination of the author. Any resemblance to persons, places, or things is not intentional and purely coincidental.

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
This is a fine story....

While the "gripe"comments below are true ish don’t stop writing .plot and characters are developing well

djb

ZZchromosomeZZchromosomeover 5 years ago

Have to agree on the need for an editor or even just a second reader to catch things. When writing, it's natural to fall into the flow of what you already know and forgetting that this is the first time the reader is being introduced to this information. This results in paragraphs that may seem a bit disjointed, lacking smoothness.

So... the writing needs polishing, but your storytelling is superb. Really looking forward to seeing what happens next!

TJSkywindTJSkywindover 5 years ago
New wrinkle

Spell check highly recommended; that would catch the majority of the errors. If you haven't found a reader or an editor, ask in the forums. Someone already on Literotica knows you're writing something that may have graphic sex scenes, so you and they won't be embarrassed by reading what you write. A reader or editor can help catch pesky errors in tense, dropped words, and other gosh-darn-its!

Good save on the height issue. LOL! And a shocking new mystery. Nice way to amp up the story. :D

Short, but thanks for sharing. 5* Slainté

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