by sunburycd
Chapter 1 was great, but I'm not sure if I like the direction that the next chapter is heading. I guess we will just have to wait and see how it all pans out.
if Edward actually fucks lauren (cuz now he has blackmail material) it would kind ruin the story for me. anyways looking forward to whats next
She is a smart intelligent woman. She will figure out how to neutralize Edward. She will bring Natalie into her Circle 3
i really like to story. but i hope we can neutralize edward as well. no blackmail. but i love this story and can't wait to read more.
Was enjoying your story until you bought up blackmail. Blackmail is ugly and if it comes to that I wont continue reading this story or any other that has it in it.
too bad that "cheap ass driver" needs to be taken care of! Sounds like he is planning to wreck many things, including his own job! Is Sebastian "man" enough to eliminate the coming problem? Sure hope so! I'm waiting for the next chapter...
Let's have Edward out of the picture some how or at least the phone ends up in Lauren's possession and she erases the video? I really want to see them happy and getting what they both want.
Thank you to those who've read and commented. To everyone with fears about where the story is headed, rest assured I'm not going to fuck over characters I enjoy writing and I love Lauren and Sebastian. 😉
Awesome story a little to fast for me and I would like to know more about Sebi. but I get where you going. I also agree with the others that the Driver should be handled cruelly for thinking of blackmailing
Mediocre ad best. Stop writing about this line of reasoning. Ch. 01 was a 5* fully, I gave this a 4* but was being generous. The last part...of the driver and video...is crap. STOP WRITING.
its simple - sebastian calls his phone while lauren is being driven by edward to work, she notices it and reclaims it from edward. then edward takes the car to be washed, and while looking at his phone while driving veers into the oncoming lane, gets hit by a rather large lorry and wham - dead instantly. well deserved!!!
Ever notice that the people who don't write these stories make the rudest comments? They know nothing of the efforts made to bring these stories to life.
Do keep going and good luck.
Thanks again for commenting. goducks, I like your suggestion and sswillow, I figure you're never as good as people say you are and you're never as bad as people say you are. Thanks for the kind words.
Outsmart the Driver at his own game. Is he loyal or a smuck. Use that. I love the story line. Awesome.
Please, please, please... don’t go down a dark road with the chauffeur.
Mom and son reacquainted...
Your story... my opinion.
Please keep writing!
Which one should you ignore, the people who comment on the story or the one who comments on them for daring to have a different opinion?
Far be it for me to tell you how or what to write. Enjoying it. Thanks, for sharing.
Ummmm I don't like the way this is going. Bring it back on track..........():\
This is JUST the kind of story I love to read...much emotional connection going on here, between Lauren and Sebastian...gets better & better!
Edward, on the other hand...he is a problem that needs "taking care of"...and soon. Violating Lauren's confidence like that, over some MONEY??!! He should know that loyalty is rewarded, without resorting to deceit or blackmail/selling photos to the highest bidder!! I do like "goducks" solution from 5 years ago!.
I also must tell you to ignore the naysayers...this IS your story, to tell how you will; if someone does not like it, go read something else, & leave the rest of us to enjoy a superb tale!!
Five**5**Stars...most definitely deserved!!