All Comments on 'Redwood Nine Ch. 03'

wasn't sure at the start where you were taking it, but I see how you are developing it. Nice twist. Look forward to more.

PM

Incredibly slow, irrelevantly detailed. Just relating every movement that takes place, step by step, does not constitute a story. Could NOT keep reading. Not horrible or anything, but totally uncaptivating. How do i phrase this in a way to offer suggestions for improvement? Sounds pretty negative, sorry about that, but my points are in there. Hope it helps (if you or anyone agree/s). You DO have some nice prose and you do sketch an ambience of sorts. Tx