by m_storyman_x
Excellent story, well written as well as uniquely tittalating (no pun intended). The games were very imaginative.
Thank you
This is actually the first story I have commented on and wanted to say you are a good writer and I am looking forward to reading more of your work.
from the girl with little tits, but sensitive nipples..ooohhhh
That was a very good story. Great games for all. I would like to read about how everything progressed in the hot tub as well as after. How do these friends celebrate New Years?
It's got some great aspects and a couple negatives.
The storyline is good up til the end. The details, dialog, perspectives were good.
If the author had someone proofread it for the numerous typos, misspellings, wrong words, etc. and cleaned them all up, it would've read much smoother. And I felt the
ending was a little abrupt because the evening wasn't
over yet. I felt a little deprived having it end there
instead of going all the way through the night with the 3
women.
Quite well done. Yes, there are typos, but they did not detract that much.
What man wouldn't love that party, though I am afraid I'd be long finished before our hero in this story. Very imaginative and well done.
Have to agree with another commenter, fantastic idea, but no way would I last that long.
One critique I have is in one game, pin the tail, you emphasize the greatness of using condoms for safe sex, but it's after the women took turns guessing the guys' size. Mentioning the condoms next kind of seems like too little too late. It's not that the game isn't a fun idea or should be removed, just next time it might have been better to leave out the safe sex explanation.
Really good story line, but you need an editor to correct errors in grammar, missed words, and syntax. If you don't know what that means, YOU need an editor.
Remember, the story is great, but some readers like it properly written.
Poor Mike must really be worn out. That is one X-mas party not to miss. Great story!
Great story. Amazing games. The party flowed smoothly from one activity to the next. Everyone was friendly and in a similar frame of mind. My only concern was that Mike didn't worry about his wife or marriage.
This type of party is a fantasy of mine. A night of variety, games, and guilt free sex. It was great to enjoy it vicariously
... but entirely unlikely.
The real story is all of these (old) men would have been completely depleted, deflated, and asleep on the couches by 9 pm; completely eliminated from the Reindeer Games.
Wishful thinking, old boys!